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Emblze~The two kingdoms~FanFic~ Chp 1 Prt 4

Postby emblaze » Fri Sep 15, 2006 5:30 am

here we go... i was planing an intro but i'm have a hard time tiping it so i'll post it another time... hope you like it...

Chp 1 Prt 1 "good things come to those who wait"
“Come on everyone,” the tour guide reminded every one. “We have a lot to do before we go back.”
“Ohhhh, come on!” exclaimed Buttercup with an impatient voice. “This is the forth trip this month!”
“Be patient Buttercup,” said Blossom, holding Dexter’s hand. “This is part of the school program to help us decide which college to go to.”
“Who cares what college I go to,” Buttercup sounded a little calmer hearing her sister’s voice. “I don’t care as long as there’s a decent gym class.”
“I do,” said Bubbles with a ‘don’t be silly’ expression on her face. “Don’t forget that were going to college together.”
“That’s why we are looking together for a university we all like,” said Blade. “Buttercup, we have gone though this many times and it is time you stop it… if you don’t care what university you go to then at least let us decide.”
~ At the megavill high school after the trip ~
“Before we continue from yesterday lesson I just want to remind you all,” started teacher Terada to speak. “If you haven’t decided yet about the college you want to go to, I will be happy to consult with you about your future plans.”
“Teacher Terada?” Blade couldn’t finish his question before it was answered.
“Don’t worry Blade I thought about it and I might have found something that’s suitable,” Answered mister Terada. “Come to me at gym period and we’ll talk about it.”
“Thank you mister Terada,” Blade replied.
~ At gym class in mister Terada office ~
“Blade I’m happy you came,” said mister Terada to Blade. “While looking through some old school files, I found this.”
Mister Terada gave Blade an old whore down envelope addressed to a mister Angross.
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Postby Emerald Emblem » Fri Sep 15, 2006 11:09 am

It's ok for a start emblaze.
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Postby dark psyghost » Fri Sep 15, 2006 11:12 am

Nice start Emblaze.
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Postby Elend-X » Fri Sep 15, 2006 11:32 am

I agree with the rest nice start!
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Re: Emblze~The two kingdoms~FanFic~ Chp 1 Prt 1

Postby robro » Fri Sep 15, 2006 11:36 am

agreed, it is a nice start
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Postby emblaze » Sat Sep 16, 2006 10:23 pm

thanx...
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Re: Emblze~The two kingdoms~FanFic~ Chp 1 Prt 1

Postby Leon FlameBurst » Sun Sep 17, 2006 10:51 am

Nice start, keep this up, Emblaze!
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Re: Emblze~The two kingdoms~FanFic~ Chp 1 Prt 1

Postby emblaze » Mon Sep 18, 2006 9:36 am

im doing it... slouly [i know it's misspelled, the stupid thing puts an Emoticon if its spelled corectly] ... but im doing it...
just want tell you all that the name of the chapter is "Good thing come to those who wait".
Chp 1 Prt 2
“Why do WE have to go through gym class,” said Buttercup. “We’re sure to get an A+.”
“We’ve been repeating BOTH conversations thousands of times Buttercup,” Blossom said really losing her temper.
“She just misses sensei Jack,” said Dexter cleaning his glasses for the fifth time today. “After all, we haven’t seen him for six years.”
“Speak for your self four-eyes,” Buttercup said and delivered a quick punch just to be blocked by a mechanical arm. “I’ve seen him last month!” she said with a hint of happiness.
“Well, when you have a crush on someone you happy to see him on the other side of the street,” he said it with a teasing voice.
When Dexter saw Buttercup charging at him he pressed a button on his belt and his white lab coat turned into the black Dextar suit and started blocking a barrage of punches.
“Cut it! Both of you!” Blossom was really pissed off by now. “The next one who continues these conversations I will freeze him or her so badly, they won’t defrost in a hundred years!”
Every body, including the teacher immediately stopped doing what they were doing and looked terrified at Blossom.
~ at mister Terada’s office ~
Blade was looking at the text for the last 5 minutes, it was obviously taking him a long time to digest it.
“So, what do you think about it,” Mister Terada said when Blade finally put the letter down. “I thought it was perfect for your and your sister’s special case.”
“It looks good,” Blade replied. “Do you know anything else about it?”
“I didn’t find much about it, unfortunately.”
“So how can we check it out?”
“I did find the place where you can signup,” mister Terada said. “But by the looks of it the place itself is somewhere else.”
“OK,” Blade sounded happy. “We’ll check it out later.”
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Postby dark psyghost » Mon Sep 18, 2006 9:51 am

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Postby robro » Mon Sep 18, 2006 9:55 am

great update
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Postby Elend-X » Mon Sep 18, 2006 12:50 pm

Good update Emblaze! I really want to know where he will study... lol
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Postby Emerald Emblem » Mon Sep 18, 2006 12:56 pm

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Re: Emblze~The two kingdoms~FanFic~ Chp 1 Prt 2

Postby emblaze » Sun Sep 24, 2006 4:42 am

The next one...

Chp 1 Prt 3
~ After school ~
“Come on Bell, you can do it!” Blade cheered for Bell.
“Go! Max!” Bubbles and some other kids cheered for Max.
“The first one to run once around Megavill and comes back here wins,” said Blossom, playing referee. “On your mark… Get set… GO!”
Bell and Max ran as fast as they could while Dexter was in some kind of a race car.
Max was way in the lead when Dexter turned on the hyper drive and immediately gained speed, but not enough to beat Max.
“So Dexter, do you like speed?” Max said when he noticed they were close.
“Yes, I like it a lot.”
“So I’ll show it to you.”
Max started sprinting out of Dexter’s sight then took a shortcut to find him self in a completely destroyed part of the city.
“Woowwww,” said Max horrified at the wreckage. “What happened?”
“I happened,” said the girl standing in the middle of all the destruction. “My name is Mono… what’s yours?”
Mono had long coal black hair that reached her hip, her eyes were black and she wears a jacket, long shirt and long jeans all black with red blood stains all over them.
“Did you do this?” Max asked with a worried look.
“Of course it was me,” she said with an evil look. “And this is what I’m going to do to you.”
She sent an energy blast that Max just moved aside to evade it, and then sent a couple of punches that were blocked.
“If that is the best you can do then the fight was over before it stated,” Mono said when she threw an accurate punch straight in Max’s gut.
Mono stepped back and sent two fire balls that burnt Max’s arms.
“Hay, that hurt.” Max cried as his arms were disabled.
“Then just stand still so I can kill you faster.”
Mono continued punching and Max kept evading until he had enough energy in his hand to send a blast. The blast missed Mono and exploded in the air high above the skyscrapers.
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Postby dark psyghost » Sun Sep 24, 2006 5:48 am

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Postby Elend-X » Sun Sep 24, 2006 12:10 pm

Nice update Emblaze! A whole new character! Mono!
I want to know the secrets..... heh.... ^_^
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Re: Emblze~The two kingdoms~FanFic~ Chp 1 Prt 4

Postby emblaze » Wed Oct 04, 2006 4:34 am

finnally...

Chp 1 Prt 4
“What is taking Max so long?” Bubbles asked her self after Bell and Dexter finished there lap. “He usually finishes first.”
“Yeah, that makes me worry.” Blade said in agreement.
“Maybe we should go look for him?” Bell was concerned too.
Just then they saw a large yellow explosion coming from the city.
“That can’t be good.” Blade said as he flew toward the explosion.
~ At the fight ~
“I know you sent that to alert your friends.” Mono said teasingly. “Even if they saw it they wouldn’t get here in time to save you.”
Max barely got up not to mention defend against the barrage of punches. Then fell down again, and started to slowly lose consciousness.
“Time to finish it,” Mono said and charged a huge energy ball in her hand.
“Mono, stop that right now and come back to the base,” Max couldn’t recognize the voice.
“Come on Brick” cried Mono with a little girl’s voice. “I never get to have any fun.”
Max lost consciousness and woke up in the medical level of the simulation room.
Every body sighed with relief to see that he woke up.
“Thank havens you’re all right,” the Professor exclaimed.
“What happened?” Bubbles asked in concern. “We found you unconscious, all bruised up in the city.”
“This girl named Mono kicked my butt…” Max started to explain. “…She would’ve killed me if this guy called… what was his name again?” Max couldn’t remember the name.
“As long as you’re all right everything is fine,” The Professor interrupted. “Although your arms will be dysfunctional for awhile.”
~ 2 o’clock at night ~
“That flare attack might be useful one day,” said a person shrouded in the darkness with male voice. “Don’t you think?”
“I don’t think that way,” there was a female voice too. “After all, we have thousands of others to choose from.”
“You’re right,” the male voice replies. “But I still think that we should keep an eye on that gang.”
“Let’s do that,” the female voice said and they disappeared as mysteriously as they appeared.
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Postby Elend-X » Wed Oct 04, 2006 5:06 am

Great Update Emblaze!
For the story line It depends...
I for example put all the details I can imagine to make suspence and make the story line go slowly... I don't know if I succed on doing it but anyway! :unsure:
Although I think that the speed its just fine! ^_^
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Postby dark psyghost » Wed Oct 04, 2006 12:17 pm

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Postby Emerald Emblem » Wed Oct 04, 2006 12:20 pm

It's a nice update.
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Postby robro » Wed Oct 04, 2006 2:04 pm

PPGD Fan wrote:It's a nice update.

agreed
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