Hello this is my first online storie and it just happens to be the one that i want to turn into an online comic. But before that happends i want to get some feedback on if it would make a good comic. I can tell you it is about 2 kids that are born from the sun god and the moon goddess( i am a wiccan and it shows in my writing). The kids are split up until they are about 10 yrs old. When they first meet they can each control one elemant. But i am hoping by the end of this story they will each cotrol many elemants. I still dont know what is going to happen to them but i hope you will tell me what you think of it so far.
I hope that i did this right. I dont know ratings. I figure age would start @ 15.
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Once long ago there was this group that believed that the sun and moon held special powers over the planets and their people. This group was best know as the Mati Syra Zemlya which comes out to be the moist mother earth. They would pray to Phoebe the Moon Goddess and Helios the God of the Sun. During one of these prayer times the Mati Syra Zemlya saw 2 kids being born from the Sun and Moon. The leader Eros sent 2 smaller groups to find the kids. Only one kids was found and he was still a baby. He was found in a town by the ocean in a small village. He was given the name Adien. The other child was never found. The boy was the son of the moon, as a baby it looked like he had angel wings and as he turned five the wings had disappeared and his looks where more angel like then when he was a baby. From the time that he could walk he was trained in martial arts. By the age of ten the group found out that he could control the element air. Adien had asked Eros a question.
Adien: Eros may I please come in, I need to ask you something.
Eros: Sure my boy, what is it that you need to know.
Adien: May I and a small group of the Mati Syra Zemlya go looking for this other child of the sun and moon. I think that I can find them.
Eros: Why do you want to go looking for this other child?
Adien: Because something is missing. I can fell it every where.
Eros: I will let you go, but please be careful.
Adien: Oh, thank you Eros. Will you please select the one that will go with me.
Eros: Yes i will. Now you need to go get ready. You will leave in the morning after first meal.
Adien: Yes Sir.
Adien then goes back to his room and packs for his journey to find the other child. During the travels the group runs into many dangers. After three months the group comes to a small underground cave in the desert. Adien tells the others to stay outside and make sure that nothing enters or leaves the cave. The other child is around here, I can feel it in the air. As he enters that cave the entrance slams shut like there was a door there. When is eyes focus to the darkness he can see a small light further down the tunnel. Adien yells out to see if anyone answers but no one does.
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