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Postby BG07 » Thu Jun 22, 2006 10:51 am

... :'( sob...so sad
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Postby dark psyghost » Thu Jun 22, 2006 11:01 am

this was a very sad chapter :(
great work DC.
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Re: Darkness_calls. (Fanfic) "Leeching the worlds"

Postby emperor=soul » Thu Jun 22, 2006 1:12 pm

that was a good chapter but i wonder how Blossom and Buttercup will act when they find out about Bubbles death
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Re: Darkness_calls. (Fanfic) "Leeching the worlds"

Postby Cadaverous » Thu Jun 22, 2006 6:01 pm

NOOOOOOO!!! TINA!!! :'( :'( :'( :'( :'( great update
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Postby Forse the Deathmaster » Fri Jun 23, 2006 3:26 am

Great job!
I can't wait for the next chapter!
(This is going to be good!)
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Re: Darkness_calls. (Fanfic) "Leeching the worlds"

Postby Darkness_calls » Fri Jun 23, 2006 7:08 am

Last update:




Chapter 18
“The Fallen”


The Sun was sitting; the clouds were strange orange in color. In the
middle of Megaville was the city’s largest park; in the middle of the park
was the largest hill in all of Megaville. Hundreds of people, all dressed in
black, were standing there, sobbing, crying or just plain sad. In front of
them was the highest priest in the city, he was calling his blessings. In
between the priest and the people were a lot of crosses, on each cross
were a picture of those whom had fallen from the last monster attack on
this fair city.

Four days had passed since Balrog and the Leech lord died. Nothing had
been seen or heard from Bubbles, Boomer or Tina. They had been
marked as one of the fallen.

Three of these crosses had pictures of all too familiar people, Bubbles,
Tina and even Boomer. The professor was there with what was left of his
girls. Buttercup had bandages all over, she was in a horrible condition, but
she lived through. Blossom was there also, but in a wheelchair. With
them was Dexter, his arm were fully bandaged and strapped to make
sure he didn’t move. Dexter and Blossom had become much closer and
Buttercup was beginning to respect him a little.

Two cloaked kids were there also, Brick and Butch were paying their
respect to their fallen brother. They had lost all interest at trying to kill the
powerpuff girls. This was a sad day, so many had fallen.




Somewhere in New York…
“Welcome to McCracken’s, how can I help you” Said a pretty woman.

At the counter stood an orange man, he had a large brown coat and hat
on. Beside him were Bell, Bean, Bop and Berry. Bell was happy that her
father had stopped those ridiculous world domination plans, Queen Vexus
had ordered every cluster to return home, and she had better plans for
them, as she had lost interest in earth. Bean, Bop and Berry weren’t
nearly as happy as Bell, they had been searching for Shad for two day
until they realized that he must surely be … gone.

“What do you kids want?” Asked Dr.X.




On top of the Himalayas. inside a cave, which was created by machines,
hovered Goliath. He was overlooking the creation of the new base. It was
much larger and better created, hence he had enough time. He hovered
through a corridor, that particular corridor had over ten mechanical
guards. The guards defending the door at the end of this corridor, moved
out of Goliath’s way. Goliath entered the room. It wasn’t large, but it was
really well done. At the end of the room, standing in front of a large
screen, which overlooked the entire base, stood Tina. Nobody knows why,
not even Tina herself, but for some reasons she didn’t die. The leech
within her was dead though, she couldn’t open her jaws anymore, her
tongue was a part of her inner leech, but now it was gone. She had lost all
her powers but one, her first drained power.

Dr.Robotnik thought Tina.

Though Tina didn’t know why she was still alive, she had her guess. Didn’t
the leech lord say that she, like all leeches, were originally humans? If so
then maybe with his death, the real leeches died and they turned back
into their original self, a human. Somehow she didn’t feel bad at all over
that loss. But she knew that many other leeches would be furious. She
could never return home, because she would most likely be executed.

“Tina…” whispered Goliath.

“Yes, what is it Goliath?”

“We found what you are looking for…”

“Those two?” Asked Tina, her voice now filled with sudden happiness.

“Yes, just like you had guessed. The chemical X does protect its carrier,
even when the carrier is unconscious. They are both frozen and
surrounded by an energy sphere”

“Those … are excellent news indeed”

“But we should hurry to pick them up”

“Alright, I’m going there personally. I’m going to bring them along”

Tina walked, as fast as she dared, because she was still injured though
not dead. Quickly she made her way to one of many rooms in the base.

“You two weren’t rebuilt to stay all day kissing you know” Tina said with a
teasing voice, as she entered the room.

Barasia and Bulldog drew their head from each other. They were both
blushing from being so obviously caught.

“I’m going to need you both to help me save…”

“Bubbles and Boomer?” Barasia asked, shocked that they were still alive.

“Yes, I finally found them”

With those words they all walked towards Tina’s space craft. Barasia and
Bulldog were holding hands and Tina smiled when she noticed.

I did a great job with the rebuilding of those two Tina though, just before
she entered the craft. The craft flew away; heading towards Megaville,
Tina had a business to do inside the crack in the elementary schoolyard.

“Stay alive you two, I’m going to save you both” Tina felt warm somehow,
when she whispered the word “save”.




In another dimension where everything was black, lay an unmanned
base. Long from the base was an area still filled with lava. The glowing
lava was slowly spreading across all of Black Eden. But there was a pitch
black spot, right on top of the lava. It just got bigger and bigger until it
suddenly exploded in black brilliance. On top of the black spot stood Shad,
he wasn’t damaged at all.

“I don’t die that easily!” yelled Shad.


The sun finally set and night began to crawl into the sky. This wasn’t such
a bad day after all …


THE END




~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
And now this story has ended. I'd like to thank everyone that read my
story. And yes I had it planned from the beginning to make you think that
they would die ;)

Now I'd like to give credits:
Shad, Bop, Berry, and Bean © Shadowed state of mind.
Barasia and Bulldog © Griddles
The PPG © Craig McCracken
The based story line, along with Bell, Dr.X and other things © Bleedman
Commander Destruction © Kainsword
Zim and Gir © Jhonen Vasquez

Though this story has ended, doesn't mean I've quit writing ;)
I've already though of another story, which will begin not long from now.

Again, Thank you all for reading my fiction ^_^
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Re: Darkness_calls. (Fanfic) "Leeching the worlds"

Postby Cadaverous » Fri Jun 23, 2006 7:28 am

oh boy!!!!!!! nice finish, two thumbs up ^_^
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Postby Forse the Deathmaster » Fri Jun 23, 2006 8:02 am

Awsome! Great ending!
I can't wait to see your next story! ^_^
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Postby BG07 » Fri Jun 23, 2006 9:16 am

Bravo! DC that was an excellent display, I absolutly loved it... I'll be waiting for your next story with great expectations!
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Postby dark psyghost » Fri Jun 23, 2006 9:45 am

Great ending DC.
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Postby Emerald Emblem » Fri Jun 23, 2006 2:32 pm

sorry bout not reading this story
might try to but no promises
I'll read your next story for sure ;)
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Postby Shadowed State of Mind » Fri Jun 23, 2006 8:01 pm

GAH! How do I forget this?! I feel so guilty now, especially since you've read every chapter I put up. But there's a couple of bright sides:

1) I can refine the bibliography
2) I'll FINALLY get a trailer up

And nice to see that my boy's alive. Wish I can say the same for him in my fic.
The Life and Times of Shad Staydamind PPG fic; finished. part 1/3
Dual Minds Think Alike PPGD fic, part 2/3; finished (trilogy is on an indefinite hiatus)
Hidden Angels Original, ongoing fiction. (also hiated. Stupid college!)
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Re: DC Fic: "Leeching the worlds" (finished)

Postby emperor=soul » Fri Jun 23, 2006 10:58 pm

that was great w00t

sad that nowone really died :'(

i hope your next story is linked to this one
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Re: DC Fic: "Leeching the worlds" (finished)

Postby Leon FlameBurst » Sat Jun 24, 2006 7:34 am

Awesome ending, DC altough that some ppl died!
Anyway great!

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Re: DC Fic: "Leeching the worlds" (finished)

Postby Darkness_calls » Mon Jun 26, 2006 10:41 am

Thank you guys for everything ^_^
It really makes me feel better :)
Here is the beginning of my new story. Though I haven't decided a name for it yet ... This chapter is just the "beginning" and I decided to write the whole "beginning" chapter in one...

New Story!



Chapter 1
“Let us begin”


In a bright white corridor, where guards and cameras were always a
meter away. Walked a beautiful woman, her brown hair flowed around, as
she made her way to one particular room. She thought about what she
should say and how she should act. As she wondered, her mind flashed
back at her office, where she was given the assignment.


“Lilly, I have an assignment for you” Said a large, rather fat man. His bald
head reflected the light in the room. He sat in his large chair in front of
his desk and stared at the previously described woman, Lilly.

“Yes! Finally I can prove…” she never got to finish.

“This won’t be easy” the fat man quickly said.

She was quite surprised to see her boss in much a scared mood, her boss
noticed the look she gave him and he stroke his bald head and said again:
“These particular … inmates. Have been put in the special asylum”

“You mean…” She gasped.

“Yes, the holding facility for criminals with unnatural powers”


She suddenly stopped; some guards slowly moved their head in her
direction, wondering why she stopped. Out of her dark brown leather
handbag, she pulled up a document. She opened the document, and read
it again.


The brother and sister, Balanus and Basium.
Nobody knows where they came from or how old there are or even why
they are so …special. Over six differently trained interrogators have tried
to get their story but all have failed and physical interrogation has been
deemed too dangerous, as the criminal would most likely try to escape.
Lilly was always shocked to see their pictures; both of them were so
young, probably 7-10 years old. They were dressed in similar outfits, both
navy blue military outfits, with a BB sign in the middle. The weirdest thing
about them is that they both had eye patches, the boy, Balanus, had eye
patch on his right eye and his eye color was copper. The girl, Basium,
had eye patch on her left eye and silver eye color. Both of them had the
same hair, Golden. Both of their appearances seemed to be so unreal and
the only thing that is known about their origin is that they were created
not born.


With a sigh, she finally kept on walking; the walk ended five minutes later
in front of a large hulky door. In front of the door were four guards, this
cell was just like any other cell in this asylum. She walked towards the
guards and all in one they aimed their gun at her.

“Registration please”

Slowly she handed one of them a key card, the one whom spoke took the
card and looked at it and them he put it inside a slot of a machine which
was firmly strapped on his side. The card went in, there were loud peeps
and then finally the card popped out.

“It seems to be valid, welcome to cell 44, Miss Lilly” the guard moved out
of the way and signaled the other three guards. Two of the guards
walked towards a panel, which were placed and the opposite sides of the
door. Both of them took up similar keys, they placed the key inside a
keyhole on the panel. The third guard whispered “3…2…1…NOW” and both
of the guards turned their keys at the exact same time. For few seconds
nothing happened, then with a loud hiss and pouring smoke the giant door
opened.

“Just press the button on the door when you are finished Miss” Said the
guard politely and handed Lilly her card. She walked slowly inside the room.


The room was nothing like she would have imagined, she had often
interrogated prisoners in jail, there it had everything a human would need
but here, inside this room was almost nothing. The room was white like
the corridor outside, in the middle was a large tube, the tube itself was
only about 12 feet high, but it was held by various machines, so it seemed
to connect into the roof and floor. There were three screens in front of
the tube. One contained many information’s, like heartbeats, oxygen and
so on. But the other two had just a horizontally line. The tube was filled
with a weird green chemical, this chemical made it impossible to see the
one inside the tube (though that isn’t its real purpose). Lilly thought it was
strange that there was only one tube; she guessed that since they were
both so young, it was pretty easy to have them both in one tube. There
was also a small camera facing a table and a chair, which were placed
right in front of the tube. Lilly walked towards the table, wondering how
exactly she would be able to interrogate them.

“Welcome” suddenly a boy’s voice was heard, the tone of the voice made
it seem like the owner was both wise and being sarcastic. Lilly noticed as
he spoke that one of the screen (which had a plain line) suddenly went
crazy, it was then she figured out that those two screen must be a wave
magnifiers, in order to let the voice be heard.

“Are you here to try and interrogate us also?” Asked a girl’s voice, she
had such an unfriendly tone to her voice and while she spoke the other of
the two screens went crazy, obviously those two screens represented
their owners. Lilly put up her serious voice as she answered.

“Not exactly, I am here to…”

“Make us suffer?”

“Sis, don’t jump into conclusions”

“… No I’m here to simply ...”
Lilly waved her hand around, like she was trying to find the right words.
“…Hear your story”

“I find that highly unlikely”

“Would a cute woman like me lie?”

“Yes”

“And you aren’t cute”

“Sister! Stop being so mean”

Lilly went all red, she couldn’t believe that those two were the children she
had read about and she was rather mad from the girl’s comment.

“Well, we can begin with you two telling me your names”

“You already know ours…”
“…Since you have the document in your hand”

“Papers can lie”
Lilly was determent to make them tell her their names, which would be
the first step.

“So can we”

“I am Balanus and she is my sister Basium”

“Why did you tell her!?”

“Because I want to know her name”

“My name is Lilly”
That’s it, earn their trust Lilly thought

“Well Lilly, I am going to tell you our story. I’m not going to
make it fancier or prettier. I don’t care what you choose to believe and not”


“Let us begin”

End of Chapter 1
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Postby BG07 » Mon Jun 26, 2006 10:47 am

I'm liking things so far, and I'm sure it'll be a great story... one question... Is it a continuation of your last one, or is it a completly new story?
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Postby Emerald Emblem » Mon Jun 26, 2006 10:48 am

That is very good DC
I see why you feel good enough to rate ours
this is done to a high standard
Keep going with this
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Postby Darkness_calls » Mon Jun 26, 2006 10:50 am

BG07 wrote:I'm liking things so far, and I'm sure it'll be a great story... one question... Is it a continuation of your last one, or is it a completly new story?


It is a completely knew story ... though a familiar alien leech (with backup) might show up ;)


And a cookie for those whom can guess what their names mean lol
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Postby dark psyghost » Mon Jun 26, 2006 10:51 am

Great opening of the new storie DC
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Postby Emerald Emblem » Mon Jun 26, 2006 10:57 am

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Balanus

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Basium

there you go DC

even though this doesn't count
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Postby Darkness_calls » Mon Jun 26, 2006 11:00 am

PPGD Fan wrote:http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Balanus

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Basium

there you go DC

even though this doesn't count



Damn Wikipedia lol
This was meant for Latin experts :P
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Postby Emerald Emblem » Mon Jun 26, 2006 11:05 am

Which I ain't
the lazy persons way to latin meanings lol
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Re: DC Fic: (finished)/*no name yet* (new)

Postby Leon FlameBurst » Mon Jun 26, 2006 5:58 pm

Long and great opening, DC!
And again new characters!
You are quickly on recover to start a new story! lol
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Re: DC Fic: (finished)/*no name yet* (new)

Postby emperor=soul » Mon Jun 26, 2006 7:43 pm

great start

those kids remind me of the ever after comic
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Re: DC Fic: (finished)/*no name yet* (new)

Postby Cadaverous » Mon Jun 26, 2006 7:55 pm

yay, new story....to lazy to clikc links, what do their names mean?
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