Brax4 wrote:Here's a bit of insight, the main character decides to kill himself after a series of unfortunate events, and winds up hanging himself.
Killing off the protagonist in the first scene: nice. Just like in Yu Yu Hakusho!
Brax4 wrote:As the rope falls, he falls into the world of Underland.
That actually sounds awesome. You can show him dying and right when he's dead just show the rope snap, and right when the body falls on the floor the floor breaks and everything crumbles as he freefalls with him awake as he falls, letting him know that he's dead and falling into the abyss known as Underland.
Brax4 wrote:Forced to solve a puzzle of how to escape this purgatory, "WB" (The main character, well, his initials) sets off to find his way out.
What would be cool is you can show a pair of shadows watching WB solve the puzzle. This can be their conversation as they spectate WB's actions:
Person 1: So, what of this one?
Person 2: Committed suicide. Hung himself.
Person 1: Ahhh yes, the noose: a common use of suicide. Let's see how this goes, I sense something interesting in that boy
Person 2: Do you? All the souls that come here you think are pathetic scum, solving an impossible puzzle that'll lead them to insanity and-
Person 1: Yes, yes, I know. But this one... this one's different.
Person 2: Well then, we'll see how this goes IF he survives...
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