You might as well clear everything up with it.

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You do understand that this comic's update schedule means we have to warp some of the pacing to give people a lot of things per page, so each and every page has multiple things that can be sought out by the fans, right? If you look back, very few pages were dedicated to either transition or plot singularly. I can think of one outright boring page that everyone agreed was boring, but I knew about that as we went INTO the page. No, I won't say which one it is.

My point is with this, I'm going to note to you in your moment to moment critiques the lens by which I've made the decisions I've made + the decisions (as far as I can tell) made by Bleed himself.



I'm ready to suffer.



Right, and make note of all the characters and ideas that were already in the story, that I couldn't just post a news update one day that said: "These characters that I don't think are currently useful to the story? We're just getting rid of them." There's the second justification, and I'll be bringing it up with the first one, too. These points I'll make I will very rapidly refer to by number.



Absolutely simple! This is justification three, nostalgia. So we see 1 and 3 here.



It does set the tone well--and you'll notice as it progresses, I have to keep evoking that tone.



I would like to point out that this opening shot is not merely a demonstration of the tone and theme, but acts as an umbrella shot for the progression of this chapter--Dealing with normal life again, so we can build back to the intense stuff far down the road.



Ah, now for my first defense. What you call pointless, I call tension-breaking. Dexter was sad, this is true, but Dexter in the original series goes out of his way frequently to get rid of bad feelings quickly by redirecting his attention. If you really want, I'll go out of my way and find you multiple times in the various episodes. So it's not only in-character funny reaction for Dexter, but it serves to develop Olga. Olga is capable of planning, she has insight into Dexter because of her insight into Mandark.



Are we really going to consider what-ifs?

2. What if Blossom forgot her last name?

3. What if they weren’t in the mood of talking about Olga, and just focused in the lights and the science project.

"Fortunately" none of this happens, [/quote]

fortunately has nothing to do with a story--Deus Ex Machina is a way of not letting us get caught up in those details that would slow down the theme of the story, which was the tension of the girls' every day lives against a backdrop of the audience understanding that the stakes are being raised off screen.

But let's let you go on, so I can explain to you why your criticism here is still not an example of you actually thinking through the process of the story--the goals I've got to keep in mind even as I make each and every line for every panel of every page.



Okay check this out: If Olga is capable of faking a black-out, she is also capable of considering information being withheld the right way. By telling Blossom, and not Dexter, she lets it come up more naturally for the two of them--and Dexter is doing a legitimate service, made apparent by the very explosion that you consider pointless. So we learn what Olga, Bubbles, Blossom, and Dexter are all doing in the "normal" point of their lives leading up to the big fight at the science fair.




because they're not the only characters in the story who have emotions or individual story arcs that need to be discussed. This is Powerpuff Girls D, Dexter is tied to Blossom, Olga is tied to Bubbles, and now we need to move to Buttercup. Olga wants to keep Dexter around, if she goes through the trouble of planning to keep him in an area where she can always access him, AND she wants him to naturally discover her to be Mandark's sister. Looks like she's pretty smart.



See, most of your criticisms seem to be you not really being patient. Each question is questioning the motives of the characters as if the characters' motives are something that can just be summarized and wrapped up in neat tidy packages, but that's not how any story with compelling characters is ever made. Blossom needed to learn Olga's name so she could tell Dexter, the emotional tone was established because Dexter being sad that Dee-Dee is dead is a parallel to Olga's brother being dead. Dexter is making this reference to Bubbles in the present because this is a CHANGE from what happened when he made the connection earlier.

He's not sad, this time, see, he realizes in the midst of this stressful emergency that Bubbles being like Dee Dee is not a BAD thing, when it WAS, before. What changed? Several things, including his knowledge of first Olga as an idea, and then her as a person.

So, WHY!? WHAT WILL THIS ACHIEVE?!

Bubbles and Dexter being able to interact in the story in a new way, so that their friendship can introduce even more new situations to the story.

There. Question answered.



Hey, wow, you're right, it won't work! So Buttercup became MORE enamored by Jack--right up until she finally realized how similar Jack is to the Professor. Now she's got to digest his teachings through another filter--the filter of her not being able to be enamored by Jack as she was because of how weird the similarity is.



Buttercup's development can't happen efficiently--it's precisely because it's scattered that it fits Buttercup's brash handling of the world.



you're absolutely right, so i am glad i am not doing that.



It doesn't--but Jack is a teacher in a school now, so he's got to follow procedure and get the parents involved. He's following the rules that a teacher WOULD follow. This is not strange.



Because Buttercup at the time wouldn't be able to fight him, she was still crushing too hard. When the action dies back down now, I do actually plan to have Jack fight Buttercup in Kendo Class, at least briefly, but we were not and did not waste time making pages about this fight, because it didn't make sense for a school club, and the pages would be about Buttercup simply NOT fighting Jack, because that wouldn't teach her anything. Not while she had such a crush on him.

For additional evidence I submit Buttercup's crush on Ace of the Gangreen Gang in the actual show. Her crush made her attention and focus shrink, and only when a very large and obviously bad thing happened to her would she be able to rethink her emotions.



Jack's speech is actually said at the beginning of the class. At the end of the speech, he explains how he knows everyone will do well. The speech itself is being interlayed on top of what actually happened in the class, and how Buttercup was not fulfilling Jack's expectations.



No, it's not. Sorry. I'm going to be focusing on that more and more, because Buttercup's crush has to be broken, and this is one of the major ways it's going to happen. Sorry! It's not just a joke.



Okay, I suppose. I don't have much opinion on the very beginning of the story.



There is a difference, however, in establishing shots of characters, and establishing how the lives of characters change and develop over time. The changes are subtle and small at first, but they begin to shift the paradigm in a way that makes the cumulative effect much more drastic, and in my opinion, making the changes proceed in an exponential way makes every actual action eventually made more powerful, because the audience relates not with a simple caricature, but a complete personality that engages readers at multiple levels.

I'm sorry that you think it's JUST mundanity, but this comic has more goals than to be JUST exciting in terms of fights and actions. We're also dealing with the less epic scale (but equally important IMHO) of emotions and growth.



Well, would Gir really be enough for a lonely kid with the power Bell has? I suppose it depends on the person, and since I'm writing this person, I say no. Ta-da!



Well, that's exciting!



Funnily enough, this was insistence on both Bleedman and Seiryuga, and not great, I agree, but certainly not unworkable or horrible. And if Bleedman and Seir hadn't gotten so angry at each other, some of this chapter would have proceeded differently, potentially having Naga in more of it, beginning to explain some of his importance earlier than it has to be now because of Seir being "backstabbed" (as he puts it) by Bleedman. >_>

So weirdly, Naga is halfway to Justification 2, written in without me, as it were.



Again, this universe is full of things that are strange and fantastical, and it really does look simply like that because it is not immediately explained to you, you are upset that it doesn't make sense.

A spin on justification one, here. If a character appears and does something, it's not likely that, if there are enough things going on, that an explanation will be immediately offered that is completely satisfying. Or, since this comic's been planned over years and years and years, not much of one at all, because it's not necessary--Bell as a character is more important here, and Naga is just another facilitator of her development, from sudden introduction to future subsequent actions.

Remember that there was a teaser with him and her on a broken tank in the snow? Something like that will still be happening.



i hate to repeat myself, but you just sound too excited over what you expect this comic to be. If you were around before my joining the team, you'd be surprised to see that a few people on the forums before these, and in fansites for PpG all around the web in the day, also had your opinion, but that the vast majority of people's response to this particular critique is "just wait. it's a web-comic. it'll be explained as it goes on"

like, the consistency of this as an issue in your criticisms is what has previously made me not treat it very seriously, despite the obvious effort you've decided to put into it--you're not applying much in the way of critical thinking, and that's something that i like to do, even in my writing, like say for instance in comic script writing. yeesh. -_-



Well, see, the more time you spend on a character, the more important that character should be, because that means the character is being your representative of the themes you want the audience to experience.

I believe that there's a TVTropes page on this, and of a particular sub-variation that works as a learning example of this. It's on how in video games if you character, that character is clearly more important than a character named "Town Guard #2".



Why is it important? Justifications 1 and 3: Unreliable schedule means even the more boring parts of the story have to be explored in an entertaining way so that fans continue to visit the site for regular updates; nostalgia from these characters' actions in their actual shows.

This is a fan comic. A nice fan comic. But it's still a fan comic. So we're satisfying the demands of the audience by having funny things happen as well as having dramatic things happen. I'm sorry if that seems boring to you.

Also, character development, and the setting up of getting all the characters where they need to be when they need to be in a natural and smooth way.

I'll keep in mind in the future that you would prefer a faster feel to the progression of different story arcs. I'm not sure what your demographic is though, lol.

I would like to remind you though, that if you're bored because of the action happening also, that really, your main problem with this comic lies in your ability to deal with the horrendous stretch on the pacing because of the infrequent updating.



You hate this because presumably it's pointless, right? You don't get a satisfying result, right?



Why is she essential? She was put in before I was here, so I had to use her. That's justification 2 again.

Nothing to offer? I disagree with that, especially considering I actually know what will happen. 8D

So far, we haven't attempted the love triangle. So far. Why have her in the story? Because I had to have her, and now I am making her work in a way that I think a lot of the fans will like.

Teran, I don't want to be a dick, but I'm pretty smart. I put some thought into her character. It's a little insulting to me, see, that your main problem is that the story is slow, so you have questions about the story that would be answered by just waiting and seeing. that's really the thing i've taken away so far: try to figure out what to offer you and people like you on each page so you can retain your patience in the future. :\

No, she couldn't be any other character, because she was Olga when Bleedman put her in. She can't turn into another one magically unless Bleedman wants to go back and edit every page and line of dialogue with the exact same injokes and justifications and likes and dislikes and presidpositions and--No, it has to be Olga.

We won't skip Dexter's emotional scars, emotional scars are a potential part of what makes the scenes you like (presumably faster paced scenes) as gripping and tense as they are.

Yes, those scenes do have an impact on the story. Just not as much of an immediately obvious visual one as of today.



thanks bro



no, dude, the update schedule is what controls the pacing. i'm not kidding, bleedman has literally told me to try and make each page interesting in its own right, and i understand why: because updating only a few times a month makes a normally paced story abysmal when presented in the same format that we've got.

So we compromised, and have come up with something that is moderately entertaining on each day of its release, so that despite the stretch of the pacing, people can enjoy it day by day.

It's really short-sighted of you to not even try to grasp the notion of this.



you like to express yourself in a personally offensive way. I see, that's never going to be misinterpreted by anyone. -_-



yup! sorry, but bleedman and dmajor and even seiryuga since he was still around at that point all agreed that we shouldn't offer too much closure on that scene since it was mid-way through the chapter with not enough structural room to focus on the other characters if we really went through with it. Too much going on with everyone to give it too much focus!



Yes, it is.



Bleedman wanted to draw it, so he did. Jenny is a character that a lot of people like, and wanted brought back from before I was brought on, so we did, and we got a lot of people who were excited that they got to see her. :)



and i insist, yes she did, because she is popular with bubbles. Bubbles, by the way, is representative of a large part of Bleedman's audience, excited kids seeing their favorite characters from different TV shows in one story. It also makes them sad when Jenny gets mind-controlled.



If it were true that being a portal was the only thing she'll do in this story, you'd be right. Since it isn't, you aren't. Sorry.



Jenny is a very popular character. She's just under the Rowdyruff Boys on the list of characters that the fans asked to see again. So I've given her a bigger role that does not END as the portal on the stage. Since she has more to do, she got an introduction.



Look, I hate to break it to you, but every single character is a plot device. They are all collections of emotional analogs that audiences respond to by relating the emotions that they feel with the ones ascribed to these characters.

We like having fun moments in the story, references, gags, the like. This story is not just a singular dark thing. It is also capable of being light and interesting. Not exactly slice-of-life, but maybe situational comedy and nostalgia.

You really don't seem to get how stories on the internet these days don't always follow the conventions that have come before them, and it isn't always a detriment to the experience as a general trend.



a sound rule that you feel you have to break whenever you finally find something specific enough to articulate against.



Yes. Yes, we did. Each circumstance we find the characters in that allows us an opportunity to play with them, and thus provide more individual page material for the readers, is a circumstance we will generally exploit.



Nothing? Are you sure? Bubbles can dance now, which ties into Dexter seeing her again. Dealing with Olga has made it so that Dexter seeing Bubbles as another DeeDee is NOT a bad thing. The strain between Dexter and Blossom that has appeared has brought a general malaise over Blossom, and it will only intensify as the story proceeds. Jack complemented Buttercup before the fight, and then Samantha attacking him made her go to begin fighting again. Rather than no progress being made, a baby step was made of Buttercup trying to determine for herself what it meant to fight--Fortunately, with Jack owning one of the robots, she has permission, as it were, so she doesn't actually have to be that graceful. That's good, because that means we still have more than one story arc for Buttercup after the fight.

Olga and Bubbles on the dance troupe were central from Olga mentioning that the dance troupe existed. Like. Oog. I'm on my vicodin, now. It's kicking in literally as I write this. Suffice it to say, plenty of it has to do with the fight--the presentation of comedy might feel to you like a slowing down of the pacing, but to people who want to enjoy each page to the fullest, the extra stuff serves as a speed up, not a speed down. You'll notice how we position dialogue bubbles in some pages can be muddled or slightly fucked with sometimes? That's because of compromises I've made with Bleedman when we can't seem to make certain structural positioning of the dialogue work. Thankfully that's a rare snag. The worst one is funnily enough in the opening Dexter vs the Pink Monster segment.



If the apparent reason is "it works!", then all the angles OF it working work, too. The decision that we made was to give some "down-time" on the adventuring aspect of these heroes after the fight with Mandark, to return it to the school-life theme, only this time, we'd actually explore that, with lots of implications of things going on behind the scenes, like a LOT, a LOT, and I mean a LOT of kids to young adult mediums, from live-action dramas to anime. Exploring the mundanities of life as you apparently see them is not always mundane to people who have respect for how the characters reflect the emotions they might feel in their every day lives, despite having super powers.

Extraordinary powers do not necessarily mean constantly extraordinary days.



A complex and interconnected weaving of the dramatic tension between the various stories that are all as valid as one another with a minimal compromise of the details of that dramatic tension while at the same time providing humor and nostalgia interspersed between the subdued progression of the narrative that is ultimately satisfying to thousands upon thousands of people.



You really don't think that Gir's relationship with Bell could help? Or that all these villainous types, half of which ARE robots, and the other half of which are scientific geniuses, couldn't be altered or adjusted in some way to be more reliable? Do you really want me to SLOW DOWN THE NARRATIVE MORE AND EXPLAIN HOW GIR IS LESS OF AN IDIOT? Seems counter intuitive to your other claims.



Cameos are fun! Hooray!



The moon sequence, if it had never happened, would mean that this fight would never happen. The bat robot guy reminds Bell that she was on the moon, so she knows that the bomb works. Dr. X's conversations with Bell on the moon confirm with this that the bomb on the moon was a test, and that this bomb is being used for its actual purpose.

So. Yes. It would have an effect.



Well, they have a purpose, and are useful, and have done their job, so. It doesn't pain me, and I'm a guy who is on narcotics for pain, so I think I can speak with some knowledge on that.

A comic is a visual medium. You try to not make the story as verbal as it is visual. That means what you show and what you DON'T show.


I shall now number the subsequent questions.



It distresses me that you're so insistent about figuring out the plot like this, because a comic as a visual medium explains words slowly, but okay, sure, I'll try and give you some plot answers here, even though I don't think that you are being very balanced in your criticisms to insist upon both answers and action--exposition and heightened tension are usually, not always sure but usually, separate parts of stories, and this story does not try to make major exception yet.

1 Bad guys with confidence can be subtle while they're not being subtle. Dr. X (not professor, that's the marvel character lol) has sent them in because they were going to get into a fight, and if you know you're going to get into a fight, you shoot first. Han Solo Rule Number One. Notice the big beetle robot cracking a hole in the door, and the army of MIB who show up to fight him and Bell.
2Give the heroes targets to save, and cause a distraction.
3Yes, of sorts.
4It will explode. Automatically assuming instant death for EVERYONE? :[
5Because by following through at this time, Dr. X is implicating that he's aware of every single one of those factors. Is he right?
6Samantha and Bell have stolen some things, but the major intent of this attack is to distract from the detonation of the bomb.
7No, it was not a coincidence. They did it on this day specifically because XJ-9 was there, and once they had her, they could shock and awe through the portal and cause trouble very quickly, letting Bell go with the Beetle downstairs even as most of the problems are upstairs.





you started this paragraph with "how about this?" Well, to answer you: No.

Secondarily, I put a lot of thought into it, stop fucking saying that, thanks.

So. Yeah. Dr. X has so far, done exactly what he's aimed to do. So your sarcastic complement can be taken unironically. :\



Now, earlier, you said you needed to vent. I've not been mean to you up until this point. Once again, there is a single point in your post where we go from you actually reviewing and being respectful to you deciding that you're going to drop the level of discourse.

Since you've done this, I now feel no obligation to not join you, since, you know, I mentioned earlier that my vicodin kicked in midway through this response. :D

I've already fucking said she isn't unnecessary and has plenty to offer, and to hold your fucking horses, so we'll move on.



it's funny because that one is also completely my idea, so, apparently it's just me being inconsistent since i can write great and bad things.



Are you seriously continuing this "critique" on an ONGOING story? I didn't really mind some of your critiques on chapter 7, because there's been a cushion of pages to let the internal time of the comic progress, but this is getting a little ridiculous. We're still IN the story. Bleedman has specifically told me, honest to God, not to worry about pressing the pace down. He's said to me, make each page important, and don't worry about how many pages it takes to get to a certain point.

Now, believe me, I know that I have to try and get him to adhere to a sense of pacing, but sometimes I do agree with some of his statements, because you to judge the audience for every single new thing done. That's how storytelling works.

I mean, the referential humor especially clues you in that this comic's sense of humor and style are evolving and not consistent because of the update schedule, man. And it's not even THIS comic, it's every one of Bleedman's comics. On one of the LATEST Sugar Bits comics to date, there is a smart phone that has joke Apps that take up a lot of the page, for the sake of humor. Were the actual jokes a success? That's something that will vary by opinion, but the very presence of a smart phone is a sign that these comics evolve with the times.

Your criticisms are still off base, man, sorry, and as I continue further, you're getting, again, less and less patient or forgiving, and thus less useful as a critic. You said you'd sit down and take your time, but you got bored and emotional and decided you would speed through it and start yelling FUCK THIS and FUCK THAT.

Gets a little difficult for me as one of the people under scrutiny to take this whole thing as seriously as you perhaps ORIGINALLY intended it.



Because normal people with emotions are easy for an audience to relate, and because we have to keep moving along different perspectives for different parts of the story.



because the name of this comic is Powerpuff Girls D, so all three girls must necessarily be represented--and beyond that, characters who tie into the individual girls have to be given time too, because they matter to the girls! Yeesh.



I see. Notice how little the characters have to decide in this time.



Yes, I do, and they take priority once a character has made a decision. Don't you know what an ensemble cast is?



more like it's what made all this stuff happen at all and thus has all been leading up to it in a satisfying way because we understand the actions that caused all the various things and ideas to come together the way we did.



No, you don't have to read this comic, okay. You can just fucking stop, if it really is that bad. You're not being paid to watch this comic. You're not being paid to participate in these forums. I asked you to participate because I wanted real criticism, comparative advice, not a list of how you don't like it because you're bad at grasping the entire medium of comics. :\



well, i guess not, but then i won't know why, i'll just have to guess because you think the humor is bad, when a lot of people think it isn't bad, and that you making this statement about how you hate something is just as useful as this entire lower half of your "critique" has become.



And so you fucking stop without a conclusion. This is you venting about how you see things you don't like. It started out okay. I listened, I was like hmm, there are some concerns here. But nope. Once again, you got ambitious and then tired and anything that was good about this became garbage.

I recommend that if you'd like to try again, you should take breaks and not lose steam and focus midway through just to finish it. You don't have to, of course, but as you can see, I tried to meet you on a lot of your concerns until you once again decided to stop typing with any real goal but to complete it.

This is the part where you go "lol the comic is impacting my behavior. haha. ha. woo..."

Sorry, man, but again, you're typing a lot of stuff, but without a cohesive and compelling point, and if you were trying to obfuscate the issue by just typing a shit ton, i'm diseased, so i have all the time in the world to counter-breakdown your breakdown, if you really think that the latter part of your post should be included legitimately. :\

in conclusion, i still disagree, and find this post disturbing in how similar it is to the previous one, only instead of Die Hard, it's "I JUST FUCKING NEED TO FUCKING TYPE LIKE THIS, FUCK!"

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Jesus this discussion got popular. One thing I like to think of is what happen to Townsville. We've seen in the show that if the girls were to leave the city it would revert back to a worse crime filled hell hole then Miracle city. Now there is a exception in the episode with Cityville but their stay there was what a day? Megaville is now there permanent resident so I have to wonder what's going on in that little city. My headcanon that should be comic canon follows like this: Fuzzy runs for Mayor again but has taken a drug that permanently made him smarter, He won the election and in a shocking twist he cleans up the town by focusing on reinforcing the TVPD instead of pickles. Hell he even chased most of the girls rogues gallery out of town hence why Mojo is in Megaville. Now you must be wondering "Whats his evil plot" Well he doesn't have one because he was a dumb hillbilly not evil. Thats what I would like to see in the near future if I ever get a "Bleedman universe presents" kinda deals. but thats just me

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Holy crap that's a long post BeeAre.

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They haven't appeared, and there's not a single reference about them. BR felt that XJ-9 introduction in the first saga, so he decided to re-introduce her. If he thinks that Rowdyruff Boys are not essential for the story, I can respect that, but again, I found XJ-9 introduction in this second saga way longer than it should.

I find it unfair that I'm not "allowed" to properly criticize the story because the plot is still in progress. "Oh no, you see, it's Griddles! He's the man you all should blame, ignore the horrible pacing in the comic, it's Griddles!". While it is pretty obvious that if GT: WHAM didn't existed we would get updates more often, I can't still help but feel that most of the updates are boring, and add little to the story.

So all my criticism is worthless because the comic is far from over? Yeah... I can only represent that excuse with an image:



To be honest, if a comic OR story depends that much of flashbacks, it's like a sign of defeat. It's like saying that the current story sucks, so we need to borrow the elements that formed the story. While I had no problems with the flashbacks in Chapter 2, when Junior is explaining what the hell is going on, the current flashback is fucking boring and pointless to the story. Knowing Mimi's story won't change a single thing about her character. Can you imagine if we were back in 2008, Nergal talks about Grim Junior's biological father, and we get a flashback? It only slows the story, it's a way to compensate the fans for the poor story, unsuccessfully I might add. Is there even a story that needs to be told?


Tried a second time to make a "better" review for PPGD, and even decided to sleep while working on the conference section, but I can't avoid it, reading that part truly pisses me off. I could make a third review, and I can assure you the results would still be the same, what can I analyze in that section? I still don't know what the villains want, but don't worry, having more fight scenes will compensate it all, oh, wait, it won't. Again, this could easily be solved if the fight was from Blossom's perspective. Oh, but what about Samantha and Buttercup? Well, how about this? Blossom and Bell finally reach... that place, start fighting, then Samantha appears with Jack's sword and it's two against one. The audience is left wondering what the hell is happening up there, again, for storytelling purposes, then Buttercup finally arrives and helps Blossom, and gives her (and the audience) some expository dialogue which reveals that there are no high casualties or something. But instead we actually have to see what's going on by ourselves, much to my dismay.

Anyways, thanks for your kind words, I really appreciate it :)


You don't really have to think a lot about this. Maybe he is a reincarnation, maybe he is the same guy, all you need to know is that this is a fancomic, so the artist can take a few liberties with the source material.


Thanks mate, I really appreciate it! :D

Ah, haven't seen that episode in years, main reason I couldn't make a connection between her last name and the explosion, thanks for that.

Yes, the point of the scene is for Blossom to learn Olga's last name, and eventually she will reveal it to Dexter, changing the character. But again, at this point, I'm not even sure what they want from these two, oh yeah, the "out of jail card", sorry, it's my own damn fault because the story is still in progress despite all the chances you guys had to finally close this subplot between these two characters, which at this point I still have no idea why it was brought to the story.

As for Dexter and Dee Dee/Bubbles subplot, again, I have no idea what's the purpose of this in the comic. For Dexter to have like... I don't know, a better communication with Bubbles or something? Again, why? Remember, they need to get all the scientists out of there and Dexter needs someone with super stength to open the door, in this case, Bubbles. Let's assume that nothing of the Dee Dee/Bubbles subplot has been brought to the story, would there be a change? No, there wouldn't. Perhaps some dialogue and stuff, but still, I just find it pointless.

I wouldn't call it pointless if it had an effect on future chapters, don't you think ;)

Seriously though, why focus so much in her cooking abilities? I just can't relate a solution to her flaws with cooking. And even if "cooking" solved her problems, the fact that she hasn't used Jack's method yet makes her subplot pretty pointless. "Oh, but she tried" Yeah, fuck that.

It was planned, although I can't blame anyone if they don't know, even I thought the meeting was a coincidence. What if Naga lives in the moon? What if he is exploring the universe or something?

I like your speculation, at this point, we don't know anything about the character. Just when I thought that Olga's introduction was horrible thanks to the fact that they had a lot of things in mind and left her in the shadows (quoting you :P), you wouldn't expect them to make the exact same mistake, right?

Again, why rush her appearance if they have other things in mind? Although her appearance was essential thanks to the fact that she appears in the last saga, why would they rush it? Also, she is in Mandark's base, so you would expect that she is evil or has certain knowledge of her brother and his alliance with Professor X, but that's not the case, so why introduce her so early, hell, why introduce her to begin with? To develop Dexter you say? Is this development relevant to the saga? Remember, all the storylines of the saga converge at this specific place, how will Dexter's feelings change the tides of the fight? I mean, the saga ends after this huge fight, correct? Wait... that's not the case? WHAT?!? Then why bother connecting all those horrible subplots at this specific... oh God... I need another beer...

Exposition is just like CGI, if used correctly, it's an useful tool. Too much exposition can truly fuck a story. I may have missed the connection between Jenny and the Cluster, and well, even though I hated her introduction, I guess she is essential to the story, so yeah, my bad.

Actually, Blossom has never seen Gir without his dog suit. But yeah, I guess you are right again, a robot with mental retardation wouldn't really expose the bad guys, might as well be just another science project, but I insist, such a crucial part of the plan shouldn't depend on Gir. I mean, have you guys watched Invader Zim?

Anyways, thanks for your comments.

No need for apologies, also, thanks for your kind comments, I really appreciate them :)

This is quite a great theory, they might as well use those scientists for their personal army and stuff. The main reason I didn't thought of this is because once Bell and all those robots exit the portal, one of the robots immediately shoots missiles at the audience, could easily get everyone killed. Not to mention that one of the robots says that they need slaves, victims and food. The appearance of those bug robots implies that they will simply eat the humans (mostly thanks to their comments), so again, do they really need the scientists, or just want to eat everyone? If it's the second, then why do it in the middle of the conference? Might as well start the invasion in a mall, expecting no resistance at all, Bell hiding like Samantha, and once all the super heroes are gone, she actually infiltrates and fights against all the MIB agents, again, expecting no resistance at all. But hey, this is a super hero comic, so we need tons of fighting scenes.

Anyways, thanks for your comment, feel free to reply me!

Well... here's the moment of truth, what I've been expecting for months. Let's see what B. Are Shyamalan has to say about my review.

I know.

I do understand that this is a fancomic and that the updates can really vary. We may have an update tomorrow, perhaps the next month. I've never said that this is the reason why I don't like the second saga, and more for the contents each individual page carries. Seriously, not a single time have I said "holy shit, this page is horrible because it took a month to make", I criticize the contents of the page, and how related/unrelated they are to the plot in general.

Seir did raise a valid point, and I know I mention him way too often, but even outside the team he is still loyal to the fancomic, and I really respect that from the man. So, as I was saying, he did say that I only checked the current update, instead of watching the previous pages and relating it to the current plot, which is something valid towards my review, main reason I decided to make second one. No more Sugar Bits, no more Grim Tales, a review dedicated exclusively to PPGD, and as I wrote it, I was also reading the comic itself, main reason the whole introduction of my review changed so dramatically, from a "everything is pointless" to a "well, it's kinda of slow but it sets the tone correctly". Well, at least you admit that "a single page" was boring and just plain pointless, too bad you refuse to tell us which one. Oh well, one is better than nothing.

Feel free to search for episodes where Dexter gets rid of his bad feelings thanks to his ego, it won't change the fact that I find the whole segment plain pointless. Even if this is supposed to be a reference to the cartoon, it doesn't means that every reference you insert in the comic is "correct", or that will help in the storytelling process. It may develop Olga, but not in the right direction, if anything, you guys are making her look like someone evil, and she is far from being evil in this story. And what if she is capable of planning, you guys haven't used this in the story, so again... why bother with it?

I wasn't even aware that she was that smart in the cartoon. Oh, so there's an explanation for all these coincidences, and Olga actually wanted Blossom to go with Dexter so that she revealed her last name to Blossom, and then when Blossom and Dexter were alone, Blossom would reveal Olga's last name to Dexter in a "natural" way. Good to know! That solves everyth... wait... WHAT?!? Olga might as well ask for a girl with Super Heroes and red girl to talk with. I find this more like a big fucking coincidence rather than a masterplan. And even if this is being planned by Olga, I gotta stress, what will it achieve? It's highly unrelated to the conference, and the story itself because we are dealing with many characters. Maybe if we could only focus in Dexter and Blossom, with Bubbles and Buttercup being supporting characters, it could work, but if that's the case, the name of the comic would be Blossom D, or Dexter D, well, at least according to Seir. I swear, I never thought that was a flaw in the first saga, and more like the correct way to tell a story with so many characters. Also, was Olga aware that when Dexter learned her last name, he would drastically change his personality? Oh God... I can only imagine myself talking with the Wachowskis, explaining them why both Reloaded and Revolutions suked the big one, and they would probably would bring excuses like this one.




I seriously hope that's a joke... oh wait, no it's not, it has been confirmed by two sources, so the whole subplot with both Dexter and Dee Dee was, much to my dismay, actually true. I don't know what's worse, the fact that you will tell me that it has a lot to do with "growth" and "development", the fact that it was done with the purpose of expanding this story "in the future", or the fact that it's horribly irrelevant to the current fight. So Bubbles has super strength, something that Dexter needs in order to escape with all the scientists, so what the fuck does it matter if he makes a connection between Dee Dee and Bubbles, the stakes are still the same, and I doubt that changing the dialogue between these two will make things any different.

Thank you for your answer in any case. I would actually prefer a "blame it on Grids", at least that way you are trying to hide rather than trying to convince me that it's good storytelling. God... it's like in that interview with Shyamalan talking about The Last Airbender... "I imagined the movie this way!" Won't even bother asking more about Olga and Dexter, I can only assume that it will end like this subplot, with both characters "growing" for... what was it? Oh yeah, "Olga and Dexter being able to interact in the story in a new way, so that their friendship can introduce even more new situations to the story".

Interesting, so what I perceived as an interesting joke was meant to be taken seriously? It's not a good signal when the audience gets the wrong idea, I thought that Buttercup still had a crush on Jack to this moment. You know, it actually... oh... wait... yeah, sorry, forgot that one page before the conference where Buttercup imagines Utonium and then Jack and is like disgusted... wait... that was another subplot?!? Do we seriously need that as a subplot? I guess so, I mean, it has a lot to do with "personal growth" and shit, so sure, why not? Hey, Monkey was introduced, might as well make another subplot about being forced to reject that duck (you know, Mandark's duck) as a love partner because they are different species. Shocking, isn't it? I mean, this story is all about personal growth, so do it, DO EET!!!

Fair enough, I guess. I still find it odd that this is the first Kendo class... wait, it's not even a class, it's a try out, and Jack is already allowing the students to fight against each other? Whatever, it's not like if this specific point ruins the story or anything.

It does make sense that a teacher (especially a sensei) would ask a student to fight against him/her in order to know what they are capable of. So Buttercup wouldn't be able to fight him because of that crush, so you are going to justify that we needed that subplot where Buttercup realizes that Utonium and Jack are pretty similar so that in the future she is able to have a BRIEF fight against the man with little to no purpose in the story despite the fact that you already said that there was no chance in hell of that relationship ever happening... oh yeah... personal growth, what was I thinking? Wait, she is still pretty shy around Jack so... Pr... what? I guess it's like watching a friend of yours or the guy/girl you like naked, of course it feels awkward, but I gotta stress, what will this achieve in the fight?

I know you are already tired of constantly hearing the same, "what will this do in the fight?", but all the points converge at this specific place, everything has been building up to this point (not that it's much or that I actually like it, more like "accept" it as a fact), so by having all the subplots so horribly unrelated to the fight itself, it feels like a complete waste of time. Oh, and I'm aware that when this fight is over, it won't be the end of the second saga (much to my dismay), so then why are you guys focusing so much in the fight itself? Just do what I say, focus on Blossom, let the PPG save the day so that the plot finally keeps going, oh, and a piece of advice, next time that you want to build all the subplots to a specific point in the story,

1. Make them matter

2. Respect that specific point in the story instead of making it a place for another mindless fight

3. Growth matters because it establishes the character and his role in the story, and the approach the character will take in a specific moment, so avoid making it random, like... well... this whole saga. And more importantly, make the whole development directly relevant to the plot. Growth can also be random

Works for me, I guess.

It's just mundanity, I'm sorry, I mean, I can see you from the writer's seat and tell me that it's just me being impatient and that I don't understand your story, but in the end it's just mundane. So you are dealing with a less epic scale, something that it's not bad because it makes the story feel a bit more realistic, life is not a Michael Bay movie (get it?), but when you literally make it a comic about the life of super heroes with only personal growth that won't matter in the end. You could even say that the whole fight and all the subplots are two completely unrelated stories, but the main problem with this justification is that you made those subplots in order to have all the characters in this specific section so that we could have the fight, which it appears that doesn't really matters because the story will continue even after it's over. I guess your ego is truly that big, you will never admit that the story is overall dull and boring because there's a lot of "growth" in your characters, sacrificing all the storytelling aspects, because you see, this is a comic about super heroes. Yes, I'm aware that they are persons with feelings and stuff (main reason everyone loved Spider-Man 2, it really gave us a more human version of the character), but your characters are fucking kids, let them be kids! And that's another reason this second saga is not working for me, it's just way too sad, so much drama, tragedy, what happened to the cheerful characters I expected almost four years to see again?



Yes, Seir has told me this already, he insisted on how Naga should be an "asshole" in his first appearance, despite the fact that I found him more like a nice kid who needs to learn how to make friends. And yes, his introduction was fucking horrible, although there's still hope for the character.

I don't mind if it's not immediately explained, the last thing I want is for this story to be another Grim Tales second saga, with everything rushed and overall an unsatisfactory ending. So no, I don't have a problem if you guys bring an element and it's not immediately explained. I understand that there are many many elements in this story, and you guys should take your time, but I have a problem when nothing happens, then I actually get fucking angry. Oh, something is happening? Yeah, what a shame that it's fucking boring and overall unimportant. "Personal growth" you say? Yeah, at this point I'm actually tired of making jokes about personal growth, something I bust my ass to make it matter in my stories, and yet, you think that as long as a character is developed, no one will have a problem with it, doesn't matters if it's related to the plot or not.

Blame it on the critics!

Actually, it's shocking how unimportant Blossom appears to be in this story. Seriously, she is the character that has been developed the least in this second saga, and ironically, seems to be the most important one in this whole fight, as she needs to stop Bell from activating that bomb (although I don't know what the hell it does). We've spent quite a lot of time with Olga, and she isn't important at the moment.

A faster feel to the progression? How about some progression to begin with? If the schedule is so unreliable, why bother having some parts in the comic to begin with? You know, a real writer/director would ommit those scenes so that the pace of the story feels a lot better for the audience to enjoy it. Oh, what was I thinking, if you remove a single sequence in your story, there won't be any growth in your characters, everything is 100% essential. Guess I'm one of the few who doesn't praises you and your excellent story, sorry for hating it, please keep blaming it on Griddles.



Trust me, even I'm tired of posting this image, but if you feel like constantly reminding me that I hate this comic for my own damn fault, I might as well, post this everytime you do so.

Exactly!

I already explained that in the past, she is essential because she appeared in the last saga, but again, why introduce her so early if nothing she does will be important UNTIL MUCH MUCH LATER. I can only assume that after the conference fight is over all this shit will finally make sense, although I doubt I'll enjoy it. I mean, if you are doing all these subplots to make the characters have a better relationships, then I can assure you I will end VERY disappointed.

Holy shit, you need to tone down your ego, son.

You won't skip Dexter's emotional scars? You already did, remember? Thanks to his ego, taking all the tension of the page away. I don't care if "it was done on purpose", it was pretty fucking bad from a writer's perspective to work on something just to skip it in the next scene. Oh, but it's a reference to the cartoon, yup, more than enough justification.

How many times have I said this? I know that Olga had to be introduced, but why this early if she has no impact on the story, at least not to this moment. Yes, I read that you believe that if a character's development starts slow it can have a powerful impact in the story/audience, but at this moment in the story she hasn't done a thing. Oh, she's super smart and did the whole ballet segment on purpose? For what reason? The beach segment didn't receive proper closure at the moment? Again, why? And shit, all these years of waiting for her appearance in the story just for it to end as Dexter and Olga having a better relationship as friends? Too much speculation from my part?

Again, fair enough. So Bleedman can only update the comic once/twice a month, so you have a pretty big fucking task, make each page interesting in its own right, which includes looking for refererences to have a comedic/nostalgia effect in the audience, and also connect it with the current plot.

You think I wasn't aware of that? Kinda of insulting, you know?

The problem with that is that some of the updates are just... ughhh... Again:

1. Why not ommit the "boring" parts of the comic if you understand that the updates will be this slow.

2. Why not focus on a single character so that the story proceeds? In the end, this conference fight is not the defining moment of the saga, it may be pretty important, but again, it's not what will give the audience closure to this story, so it could work.

Don't hate me for what I am.

Too much going on? Not much has happened at that point in the comic. The only thing we know is that Dexter changed his personality dramatically after learning Olga's last name, which is something directly connected to the beach segment, so again, why not give it closure? What else has happened at this point? Bubbles ballet try-outs? Buttercup's new love for cooking? Bell's melancholy in the moon? I guess the last one is an acceptable example, if it wasn't for the fact that it's not related to this segment, and we won't explore it again in a while. Notice that I didn't mention "we won't explore it again in two years"? I've said it in the past, and I'll say it again, the pacing in the updates AND the story is pretty bad.

And last but not least, Seir told me that you decided not to close that segment, and instead used those flashbacks to confuse the audience, which, again, it's an acceptable way to tell a story if the pace of the comic works correctly.

So all the subplots were made to connect and place all the main characters in the conference fight, so my first impression was that the conference fight would be the defining moment in this saga, like making a card castle, every card is a part of the plot that looks unrelated at first, but in the end it was part of the same story, and in the end we get a pretty awesome card castle. Like in Star Wars, all the points converge at the Death Star fight, or in The Empire Strikes Back which the defining moment of the story is the cloud city, so pardon me if I was under the impression that this was truly the last fight in this saga.

The problem that I have with this is that if this is not the defining place where the audience gets a conclusion, then why the fuck bother in placing all the characters in here, and even worse, focus on all of them? In the end, it is "another" fight that may have an effect on everyone, but by focusing in everyone the shock factor will disappear. How about focusing in Blossom and Bell, Samantha appears to assist Bell, and when everything seems lost, Buttercup appears and assists Blossom. When she appears she uses some expository dialogue explaining that there are no major casualties, we get a fight, someone wins, and once the fight is over we see the aftermath, with the whole building in ruins, tons of robot bugs dead, but no major casualties in the end. It would be fair to show it from the scientists perspective if it wasn't for the fact that it slows the pace of the story. Or how about this? Show it from the scientists perspective and once they escape there's like a huge fucking explosion, but in the end Blossom and Buttercup are alive and we get like a small flashback of the fight or something. Oh... wait, that would make the whole sequence in the moon 100% pointless. I mean, I already think it was pointless to begin with, mostly because of the pacing in the storytelling process. I guess that Bell will grow up in this saga so that she has a better relationship with all the other characters so that we can explore MORE future stories.

Well, at least someone enjoyed her introduction.

Great... more main characters in the story...

Stories in the internet? Like fanfics? Yeah, not a big fan of those, although I do love fancomics. And when the fuck did I say that I prefer a dark story over a lighthearted one? And, again, before this update in the comic, I did praise the previous 5 pages because of the intelligent references to the cartoon and because I felt the plot was finally moving. And every single character in the story is considered a plot device? What?!? So far, the only plot devices I've found in the comic are Olga (for both Bubbles and Dexter, and you could say Blossom too, I guess), Jack (for Buttercup), the Sand-Clock bomb (the story overall), Naga (for Bell) and Jenny (for the Cluster).

The rest of the characters is what I like to call "πρωταγωνιστής", which is Greek for Protagonistes, which translates into Protagonists.

Much to my dismay. I mean, if we were back in 2009 and you said this, I would probably be very excited, but at this point I already know what you mean by "individual page material for the readers"

The vicodin part of your post really caught my attention... might as well pull the same argument you used against me when I said that Die Hard would... ahhh fuck it, I'm not like that.

So Dexter saw Bubbles dancing against those fucking robot bugs and out of nowhere he thought "hey... it's not bad that she looks like Dee Dee, actually, this is pretty good!". The problem that I have with this is that you it seems that all the subplot has been building up to this point, and although we finally receive some closure, I just found it plain boring and anti-climatic. So Dexter and the rest of the scientists need to escape, so Dexter goes up in order to get Bubbles so that she uses her super strength and everyone can finally escape. Let's imagine this subplot never existed, would there be any difference in the plot? Would Dexter see Bubbles dancing and fall into a depression, forget everything that is at stake and everyone would die thanks to that? Of course not, he would still ask Bubbles for help. Oh... but no growth in the character... *sigh*

As for Buttercup telling Jack that they shouldn't fight, seriously? She is the first character to say that they should fight the bad guys. And again, it's not a good sign when the audience perceives something that was meant to be taken seriously as comedy (I perceived it as a lame joke) when Buttercup tries to focus, and then decides to use brute force against that robot thing.

Don't you dare to tell me about characters that reflect emotions like if I had to learn this again. That's the main reason the first chapter of this current saga worked, because I'm not asking for a comic written by fucking Michael Bay, the first saga also carried characters with many emotions. Yes, I did say that the first chapter was a bit boring, but at least the tone of the comic was correct, we knew that this was going to be a lighthearted fancomic about cartoon characters which we all love, this time with more insight in their personalities. But what happens when we lack of a plot, and there's a lot of drama? Well, we get a boring story.

It didn't need to be THAT complex.

... the fuck? No, I don't think that Gir's relationship with Bell could help... at all. And if these robots and scientific geniuses can be altered in order to be more reliable, why the fuck is Gir still acting like a fucking retard? This single segment in the story can be summed up with a single "ahhh... fuck it!", but instead, you offer me more stuff than I can digest. Seriously? A relationship with Bell? Oh God...

The fact that we don't get to see it doesn't means it never happened.


1. Again, being aware that there are many heroes in the same place is a clear contradiction to "give them a distraction", especially if it has been proven that they are far superior to most of the Cluster army. The worst thing is that this could actually work, but instead, Bell for no apparent reason decides to attack Blossom and call her attention, which could clearly be a threat to the plan they are trying to execute. Maybe if she didn't called everyone's attention, this could actually work. "Oh, but she allowed Blossom to attack her so that she immediately forgot about her", WHAT?!? Why did she even forgot about Bell to begin with?

2. Again, why would Bell call Blossom's attention to begin with? Why exit the portal with the Cluster army to begin with? And why the fuck is Samantha going with Bell? None of the MIB agents are a challenge for her, so why not make sure that NO ONE FOLLOWS HER, like she did with Jack, especially if it has been proven that our super heroes are far superior than the rest of the Cluster Army.

3. Great.

4. Because, you see, in most cases, BOMBS ARE A HUGE FUCKING THREAT THAT COULD END MILLION OF LIVES.

5. Because he's a genius! He knows that the job will get done, cool!

6. Read points 1 and 2.

7. Again, if she is so essential for this plan, why not steal her? Attack her when she least expects instead of leaving such a crucial task to Gir. Oh, yeah, forgot about her relationship with Gir, what was I thinking?

Ahhh... this is where the fun begins. Oh... wait... no, if things get way too personal this thread will probably get locked. Fuck!

I wanted to post something like "mostly bad things", but I guess that would be unfair, as, according to Fummo, you have some other stories, so it would be unfair to criticize you as a bad writer. Sure, PPGD second saga is horrible, mostly because of the pacing and boring characters (they are not boring, they are growing! GROWING I TELL YOU!!!), but who knows, you might actually have some talent. Just avoid Super Heroes next time.

Because I like to add some bad words and sarcasm to my post you won't take it seriously anymore? It's actually a bit insulting that I'm fucking sitting in here, spending (more like wasting) my time to give you a proper reply, and all you get is "FUCK THIS and FUCK THAT". I've offered plenty of solutions, "it doesn't works like that", I criticize the characters, "they are growing man", I explain that the pace in the story is horrible, "blame it on Bleedman and his updates", and you are the one feeling insulted because I ask if there was any thought put into this? The fact that you guys have a script and everything planned doesn't means that it will be good in the end.

So Bleedman told you that you should make each page good on it's own, which I guess is something acceptable, but the pages are sometimes so slow, so unrelated to the plot/battle itself, it makes me wonder why is that even there.

Yes, I write this stuff expecting people to take it seriously, and again, find it horribly offensive that you are getting the wrong idea and tell me that you can't take me seriously for the way I express myself. But again, what can I expect, I'm talking with the man himself, the writer of the comic, I never expected this would be an easy task. If anything, I just realized I can't read chapter 9 without getting fucking angry.

Again, why? Why not focus on what really matters? Stopping the bomb so that the bad guys fail in whatever they are trying to execute?

It worked pretty well in the last saga, giving more focus to both Blossom and Dexter, with Bubbles and Buttercup as supporting characters. The fact that they are supporting characters doesn't means that they aren't important, FUCK! It is done so that we can move the plot at a better pace.

Yeah, too bad it is a bad excuse for balance in the story. Oh, and don't worry, I'm already expecting MORE MAIN CHARACTERS.

Like it or not, this is pretty valid criticism. It's actually pretty frustrating that you constantly tell me that there is a huge difference between the things I don't like and obvious flaws. And yes, I could easily stop reading this comic, leave fucking Snafu while I'm at it, but you know, when you are a fan of something, and that specific thing you were a fan of turns into crap... well, it's pretty hard to explain it, but you just can't leave it that easily. I was a huge fan of PPGD, and even though I hate this second saga, I feel it's a fucking obligation to keep reading it. I mean, I've invested quite a lot of time on it (especially after making this review, must have read the comic 4 or 5 times this single week), so again, it's really hard for me to simply leave it. Like a TV series that I once loved and out of nowhere they add more characters, the plot starts to suck, you feel a personal betrayal from the guys behind the project. That's what I feel, like if someone scammed me.

The humor was BAD. It's actually quite baffling that you defend those pages for no apparent reason other than "I don't get your humor".

As I said previously, Chapter 9 has so many negative elements in the comic, I just can't read it without getting fucking angry.

And no fucking way in hell I will make a third review of "your" comic, I wasn't going to make a second one to begin with, and immediately respond to your criticism, but then Seir told me that everyone got the wrong idea from my Die Hard comment, so I was like "well, his response was pretty childish and offensive in the end, but maybe it's not all his fault. Maybe I offended him unintentionally, so what the hell, let's make a second review, a much better review this time, start from zero", and again, much to my dismay, I got almost the exact same responses. "Pesonal growth", "I'm just not smart enough to understand your vision", "oh, it's personal growth, you aren't a writer, you wouldn't get it". I sorta feel what Kevin Smith felt when they brought Tim Burton on the Superman project.

Quoting Kevin Smith "So who is Warner Bros. going back to? The guy who made Clerks, or the guy who made them half a billion dollars on Batman?" So who is everyone going to take seriously? The guy who made a PPGD review, or the guy who is writing for Bleedman himself?

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the post went so far down it broke the page barrier XD

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To be honest, Teran, is there any way for you to make a point across without cursing? I dunno, maybe it's just me, but cursing to try and get your point across makes you look like an idiot, imo. Not saying I don't agree with you with some points of your argument, mind you.

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I just find it pretty hard to talk or write without cursing. I find it easier to express myself that way. Never thought it would be a problem... but then again, everyone got the wrong idea when I posted that Die Hard comment... so...

If it truly makes the whole review look bad, I'll edit the post later. Currently under a lot of pressure.

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Cursing when making a point just undermines you and ends up with you looking unsophisticated.

teran i am not going to bother responding anymore except for this: you use the word pointless as your go to criticism

do you understand how writing a story works?

what is not pointless to you?

what meaty substance do you find lacking in the comic?

the goals exist for themselves, as a writer--conveying a point is the purpose of the story, and I am apparently through the myriad reactions of people capable of articulating their standards, able to do that.

however, so far in your post, you can't articulate a reason beyond "excuses" and "pointless", not that I've gone back yet to read the rest of your response, but since that was about the only thing you said for half the page, that's what i'm going to attack here

pointless why? because you don't understand that characters do things to change? that it isn't obvious to you that they matter? because you need instant gratification? sure seems that way without you explaining how you "feel" that it matters.

i'm sorry man, but it looks like you've made up your mind to insist that it is pointless from start to finish, so you've stopped being able to provide useful commentary or criticism--in other words, your criticism has decided to stop even as the story must move on. because it's got questions to answer, as you managed to rightly convey in the midst of your muddling.

at no point do you ever explain what pointless vs not-pointless is, just insisting that "TO YOU" that's what it feels like. welp, with no clear indication or rubrick to demonstrate your knowledge of any indication otherwise, that means your criticism is stagnant.

if it were just me saying this, i would be inclined to give more scrutiny, but the people who have been articulating against you have been articulating less in my defense and more simply against your apparently incoherent standard.

as a stagnant critic to a dynamic medium, i've got no choice but to invalidate you as a competent critic. sorry, bud. if you want, i can lock the topic.

you can reply and stuff, but i'm not going to consider any replies worthwhile unless you specifically respond and deal with my criticism that your standard has become stagnant because it has no criteron through which to make its standard communicatable and understood. It's just a gut feeling you've got, and to me, that sounds like... how did you put it?



ah, that's right. an excuse.

btw: Happy Birthday to me! :0)

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Puff Most Epic.

Happy Birthday BR. Also Terran if you really want to get attention for what you are saying, criticism is not just saying that you are unsatisfied, but to point out detailed reasoning behind the view. It is often better to take a neutral approach when explaining what you do not like as well as what you like. Showing pure negativity will only make people think that you have reasons to criticize only because you are looking to bash the work of others. For what I had taken what you said, I did not approach it with the intention of proving you wrong or right, but to get the facts cleared up and share a bit of consensus of my own. BR has already mentioned that one of the pages was not popular which indicates that he as well as others on the team are likely aware of issues that are going on in the comic, but they have to stay committed to what they do even when the results do not come out the best. Can not change the past so criticize to improve the future of the comic.

Heck I will try and throw something in just in case it could be of use. Could use a bit more tension when things are serious. Like with the recent pages it seems to show off a lot of the nostalgia comedy. The Robot villains probably could have done with less speech as it makes it less possible to take them seriously even though yes they are not the main focus of this plot point. I like to often compare what currently goes on in the comic to how the first chapter played out, the battle between Bell and Blossom had decent amount of tension whereas Dexter and Mandark had amazing tension that compels you to continue while still being able to be comedic at times. I want to be able to feel that again, to be compelled and even maybe impatient for the comic to continue.

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Ahhh happy birthday BeeAre, anyway just hope those minor appearance characters in those comics must have great appearance.

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I heard you don't accept god
I don't accept fandom/shipping/mary-sue

I prefer to stay out of ranting, i do my own, but i let it slide. i don't have any issues with anyone who is
not agreeing.

Guess I did a bad job explaining why I'm highly unsatisfied with the comic.

Thanks for the advice. I'm sorry, it's just that I hate Chapter 9 with so much passion, as there are so many fl... I just find the pacing of the chapter extremely slow and there has been little to no closure in all the established subplots.

This second saga has over a hundred pages. I mean, admitting that one page truly sucks is better than nothing, I guess, but seriously? I'm sorry if I can't find that commentt as something humble.

Indeed, it will never go away, it can't be undone. But you might think "well... the first chapter was pretty boring, but I guess you could say it's more like an experiment, to test the audience or something". To this day I still find the story extremely boring as I find all the subplots plain tedious.

Much to my dismay.

And yet, they receive all the attention. Main reason I believe the pacing in this comic is pretty flawed.

Yeah, sometimes I like to believe there's still hope for this comic... I mean, I found the 5 pages before this update pretty decent, a bit slow, but then again, not as bad as... well... most of chapter 8 and 9. So I should expect like a good page every 8 pages?

*sigh*

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And here I was thinking that an in depth review on both sides was possible.

I guess our generation has absolutely no room for compromise, everyone thinks they are right 100% of the time and are angry otherwise.

If people just said "I disagree, but I respect your opinion, and here is my take on what you said." The world would be so much better.

If you bite the bullet once, it will be passed around tenfold.

This is just hard to read to the point of making me sad. Internet devolution at its finest. And sure, I may be known as a epic scale nerd rager, especially with my not so legendary "disputes" with Blood lord, but I learned something important those few weeks. Simply saying "You disagree" on this forum is asking for a fight.

Conflicting Opinions die here, if you couldn't tell.

Go to jail. Do not pass go. Do not collect $200.

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"It's such a fine line between clever and stupid."

The Chronometal Wars, a fan-fiction taking place in the PPGD Universe. Catastrophe is the only certainty.

You high nigga?

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People abuse of that argument all the time. "It's my opinion, you can't do nothing about it!".

Might as well just tell me "don't like it? No one is forcing you to watch it", or my favorite one, "get a life".

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I prefer the phrase "Can't win them all, but might as well win the majority"

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Well, in the end people did agree with few of my points, not a complete waste of time in the end :P

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So I found the leak book of Grim tales, I know I'm sorry for beating a dead horse & being a slowpoke but from what I've seen of the current Grim tales I have to wonder Does BeeAre & Bleedman still atend to release this one on the site after the current story arc is done or do they plan to rework it due to the leak. because honestly only seeing certain glimpse of it I'm actually interested in that Story arc you got a pretty big villain this time around got some interesting throw backs to certain nostalgic fans, & best of all most of the story won't have flashbacks!

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i personally thought the comic was shorter than what i expected it to be.

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Ironically, I found it pretty long, although I didn't enjoy the story.

Found it pretty lacking.

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One thing I'll say about it is that they simplified on who are main villain should be. That was another problem I had with Grim tales We don't know who our true main villain is. Think about it, We can't say Oogie Boogie is the main villain because he was supposedly killed off 3 chapters in, We can't say the Nergel cthulu creature is the main villain since it's more of a force of nature, & I refuse to say Him is the main villain since he was a sequel hook/padding for the story. I won't say who the main villain of Afterbirth(?) is to avoid spoilers but if you want to be the wet blanket Teran be my guest.

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Why the hell would I give spoilers for Afterbirth? So that this thread gets locked and I probably get banned in the end. If anything, you really should stop talking about that comic.

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My apologies I'll STFU now.

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