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Grivous wrote:The story seems to be interesting. Your art with drawing is really nice too.
But the story line seems really fast.
In the first three panels, there is the Character 1 walking in the scenery, looking at the girl crying and asking to her.
It could have more panels with more actions like: After the second panel, it could have a close-up of the girl crying; he walks at the girl; the girl realizes that someone is getting closer to her; she looks up and then he ask "what is wrong, little girl" to her.
In between the 4th and 6th panels could have more panels of actions too.
I like your style of drawing. Really attractive.
Grivous wrote:But about the eighth panel, it looks like the bad guy is trembling for some reason.
Haruhi5 wrote:love how the story is coming along ,your art is so cuteGrivous wrote:But about the eighth panel, it looks like the bad guy is trembling for some reason.
it looks like he might be laughing at him, since hes so small
Innocence Abandoned wrote:I like this comic... But is Jacob very far away in the 6th panel? Because if he is, I think the perspective on the floorboards is a little bit off.
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