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Poems!!

Postby Exodis » Wed Oct 05, 2011 9:25 pm

Hey guys. Now, I love poems, not only that but I'm actually a poetic rapper. I'll start putting my poems in this topic. If you like, you can post your own poems as you please. Now, here's my poem.

Devious Sins
By Exodis
The world's full of haters, Satanists, and unforgivable demons,
It's like joining classes, but you’re the slave and you get no opinions.
People fight cause they have no decision, only the will of the wicked,
They are the puppets of a mastermind with the thoughts of the unholy sickened.
Massacres happen cause that's the motive of their maniacal kind,
Don't believe me? Just look what happened at Columbine.
Devious sins, that's what everyone's doing nowadays,
It's their everyday motive, like injecting needles cause that's what they craze.
It's pathetic, but there is no stopping this pandemic of death and insanity,
Please understand that there's no escape, like the days of slavery,
Fuck everyone, cause now it's only survival of the fittest,
Hurry, for the devilish have come and are ready to slay you by inches.

Thank you, and happy poem writing!
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Re: Poems!!

Postby BaffledOne » Mon Oct 24, 2011 1:03 pm

Cool! Hm this will probably be some pile of dung here but here's my try:

Sorry for not caring...
I don't care about your standarts!
Whatever you want me to be, I won't be!
Whatever you want me to do, I won't do!
Whatever you want me to make, I will break!
"Whatever" that's my answer to you!
I won't care for it! Go away don't return!
I won't linger for you! I don't need you!
Whatever you did, whatever you said,
"Whatever", I answered...
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Re: Poems!!

Postby Exodis » Wed Oct 26, 2011 8:10 pm

BaffledOne wrote:Cool! Hm this will probably be some pile of dung here but here's my try:

Sorry for not caring...
I don't care about your standarts!
Whatever you want me to be, I won't be!
Whatever you want me to do, I won't do!
Whatever you want me to make, I will break!
"Whatever" that's my answer to you!
I won't care for it! Go away don't return!
I won't linger for you! I don't need you!
Whatever you did, whatever you said,
"Whatever", I answered...


Hmmm... nice job. You did repeat some words, some of the lines didn't make sense, but other than that: 3.5/5!
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Re: Poems!!

Postby Innocence Abandoned » Wed Oct 26, 2011 11:00 pm

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I prefer to study in the classical school myself, where rap and such is anathema to most. Also, I have a feeling this thread is gonna get RoflStomped by the Spam section vets.
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Re: Poems!!

Postby BaffledOne » Thu Oct 27, 2011 10:43 am

exodis6 wrote:
BaffledOne wrote:Cool! Hm this will probably be some pile of dung here but here's my try:

Sorry for not caring...
I don't care about your standarts!
Whatever you want me to be, I won't be!
Whatever you want me to do, I won't do!
Whatever you want me to make, I will break!
"Whatever" that's my answer to you!
I won't care for it! Go away don't return!
I won't linger for you! I don't need you!
Whatever you did, whatever you said,
"Whatever", I answered...


Hmmm... nice job. You did repeat some words, some of the lines didn't make sense, but other than that: 3.5/5!

Yay! I didn't expect getting anything higher than 2 thought. I don't have any experience in this field whatsoever (well besides having to learn *insert a rough word describing my hatred to having to learn them* long poems by hearth), so thanks a lot :mrgreen:


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I prefer to study in the classical school myself, where rap and such is anathema to most. Also, I have a feeling this thread is gonna get RoflStomped by the Spam section vets.

But that feeling doesn't obligate you to do the same, does it?
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Re: Poems!!

Postby Banshee » Fri Oct 28, 2011 7:55 pm

I don't get her
I really don't get her
Constant promise
Constant lies
All she does is ruin my life
She told me she loved me
Yet she struck me
Berated and yelled
This is my own personnel hell

*Shrugs* saw the thread wanted to post.. This is about five years old. Hope you like it.
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Re: Poems!!

Postby Maru » Fri Oct 28, 2011 8:23 pm

It's so addicting, these weird-ass songs on YouTube. I love'em to death.
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Re: Poems!!

Postby Exodis » Sat Oct 29, 2011 6:17 pm

Okay guys, another poem by yours truly! Rate this, like this, I won't mind! Enjoy!!

Unforgettable Grief
By Exodis
We all make choices, we all make decisions,
From you joining a cult or forming your own religion.
Create words that can cause utter depression,
To persuade people to do stupid shit, like political assassination.
We live in a world that's full of ignorant bastards,
Thinking they're the best for killing their masters.
To all its nothing but the land of the poor including the slaves,
The only way to be free is digging up your family's graves.
So look at life until it's greatest ambition,
Just don't fuck it up with a racist situation.
Like stealing the Mona Lisa you’re a shadowy thief,
Cause were all innocent victims of an unforgettable grief.
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Re: Poems!!

Postby Maru » Sat Oct 29, 2011 7:07 pm

Things go bad right when everything is going well. I learned that today.
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Re: Poems!!

Postby Alopunk » Sat Oct 29, 2011 7:56 pm

The rhythm was great, but for some parts it seemed a bit off. 4/5
Here's a lil poem I'd like to contribute:

Gaze towards the sky
Clear those burdens from your mind
And the rain will stop
Lord Soth: ^ That one does have a fascination in making people more sparkly.
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Re: Poems!!

Postby Exodis » Sat Oct 29, 2011 9:29 pm

Alopunk wrote:The rhythm was great, but for some parts it seemed a bit off. 4/5
Here's a lil poem I'd like to contribute:

Gaze towards the sky
Clear those burdens from your mind
And the rain will stop


OoOoOo this one is good. Short, but good. 3.5/5
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Re: Poems!!

Postby Alopunk » Sat Oct 29, 2011 9:36 pm

Yeah, it's supposed to be short. Haikus are the only kind of poems I can ever manage to write. ^_^;
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Re: Poems!!

Postby Exodis » Sun Oct 30, 2011 1:59 am

Alopunk wrote:Yeah, it's supposed to be short. Haikus are the only kind of poems I can ever manage to write. ^_^;


Ah yes, Haiku! Wonder if any of the admins know how to do poetry...
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Re: Poems!!

Postby Innocence Abandoned » Sun Oct 30, 2011 2:14 am

I would argue that poetry isn't something you do and not do. It's more of something you are or are not. But then we're talking semantics and philosophy, which I'm sure isn't a discussion anyone wants to have in a thread dedicated to poetic rapping right?.
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Re: Poems!!

Postby Exodis » Sun Oct 30, 2011 2:12 pm

Innocence Abandoned wrote:I would argue that poetry isn't something you do and not do. It's more of something you are or are not. But then we're talking semantics and philosophy, which I'm sure isn't a discussion anyone wants to have in a thread dedicated to poetic rapping right?.


Hmmm true, but this is poetry. Poetry can come in any ways, from rapping to long rhymes to a haiku. Poetry is infinite.
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Re: Poems!!

Postby Maru » Sun Oct 30, 2011 5:39 pm

I've been posting stealth haikus for some time now but no one notices. :mrgreen:
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Re: Poems!!

Postby Exodis » Mon Oct 31, 2011 11:12 pm

maru-shadow wrote:I've been posting stealth haikus for some time now but no one notices. :mrgreen:


You have? Hu... I never noticed!
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Re: Poems!!

Postby Maru » Mon Nov 07, 2011 8:24 pm

That was the whole point. Can't believe you didn't see this coming, you guys.
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Re: Poems!!

Postby Alopunk » Tue Nov 08, 2011 10:25 pm

maru-shadow wrote:That was the whole point. Can't believe you didn't see this coming, you guys.

Oh... OH I SEE THEM NOW!
You're one clever munchkin, Maru.
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