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Re: Grim Tales From Dark Realm - page 16: Nozone

Postby Imosa » Sat Aug 13, 2011 8:14 pm

Panel 5: How dare you bring us here. Although it's still pretty awkward. It makes Junior sound like hes the type of person who looks down on everyone. One would expect to ask "Why did you bring us here?" because its more to the point.

Panel 4: I have saved your ass. Have makes it sound like hes announcing it to the world or something.

Another nice page. I feel like I've heard of Nozone before. Is it an original idea?
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Re: Grim Tales From Dark Realm - page 16: Nozone

Postby Maxgate » Mon Aug 15, 2011 12:11 am

@ Grivous: I see :D

@ Imosa: thanks, I'll fix that later
And about Nozone, first, I think about Novoid, but it sound like Ben 10 =), so I change it to Nozone. You can say it's an original idea :D

Well, new page, lots of words - lots of mistake, tell me so I can fix it :D
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Re: Grim Tales From Dark Realm - page 17: Guardian of Worlds

Postby Grivous » Mon Aug 15, 2011 6:52 am

The character Gears looks pretty awesome!

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"They stole my keys". lol

And I think, in the last Gears' phrase, there is a 'do' in "So you know her?". It will be like this, "So do you know her?"

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Re: Grim Tales From Dark Realm - page 17: Guardian of Worlds

Postby Imosa » Tue Aug 16, 2011 3:33 pm

Grivous wrote:And I think, in the last Gears' phrase, there is a 'do' in "So you know her?". It will be like this, "So do you know her?"
It could be right.

What I find funny is that you swapped the words crime and criminal. "the most wanted criminals in their relm..." and "an unacceptable crime in any world."
Panel 4: "You said you are the Guardian of Worlds".
Panel 5: "...a portal to any worlds... and its the source of my power too."
Panel 6 "they had a little help... from a red girl" and "Can you tell me her number?". lol even though a phone number is made up of 7 digits, it's still considered one number.
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Re: Grim Tales From Dark Realm - page 17: Guardian of Worlds

Postby Mimeme » Tue Aug 16, 2011 3:51 pm

Panel 2 (suggestion?): "--they are not clones(<--plural) - they are from another world, where they are known as the prince and princess of the Dark Realm. [and then refer to Imosa's amendments]"

Panel 3/4 (suggestion?): "-- Because they murdered their parents to gain more power. [and then refer to Imosa's amendments]", followed by Junior's "They... murdered... their parents??"(<--plural)

Panel 6 (suggestion?): "Do you have her number?"

Other than that, lookin' good!
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Re: Grim Tales From Dark Realm - page 17: Guardian of Worlds

Postby klimino » Thu Aug 18, 2011 5:19 pm

lol ohhh,nice. the guardian of the worlds, is a perverted goofball. explains soooo much about life. :mrgreen:

nice comic,besides a few spelling/grammar mistakes,its really good :mrgreen:
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Re: Grim Tales From Dark Realm - page 17: Guardian of Worlds

Postby sam1027 » Wed Aug 31, 2011 2:01 am

Oh RIGHT~~~
The SO-CALLED POWERFUL Gurdian of World just messed with his guard on important thing because of GALS :twisted:
Good Job, Gurdian of World lol
Just always look out for my art fourm~~
DONT WANNA BE AlONE IN MY THREAD teehee~

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Re: Grim Tales From Dark Realm - page 17: Guardian of Worlds

Postby Maxgate » Fri Sep 02, 2011 3:50 am

Ok, I have fix the grammar mistake, but haven't upload it here
well, new page
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Re: Grim Tales From Dark Realm - page 17: Guardian of Worlds

Postby Unlimited » Fri Sep 02, 2011 5:30 am

Oh. My. GOD!!!
It's, it's, it's, it's, it's...


Something out of Panty & Stocking.
Kind of.
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Re: Grim Tales From Dark Realm - page 18: Pantsu!

Postby Grivous » Fri Sep 02, 2011 11:25 am

What is "Pantsu"?


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It is something related with "Panties"?

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Re: Grim Tales From Dark Realm - page 18: Pantsu!

Postby MQuinny1234 » Sat Sep 03, 2011 6:06 pm

Apparently, japanese translation or something.
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-"I'm sophisticated, charming, suave, and debonair, Professor. But I have never claimed to be civilized."
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Re: Grim Tales From Dark Realm - page 18: Pantsu!

Postby Maxgate » Sun Sep 04, 2011 1:06 am

You want to know what is "pantsu"?
well, google always ready for you =)

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Re: Grim Tales From Dark Realm - page 18: Pantsu!

Postby DJ4U » Tue Sep 06, 2011 2:46 am

That is a very angry child, started reading today and grammar errors aside this is a great comic hope it replaces some of the old comics on the front page.
Relax, enjoy a comic or two, don't be a dick...I think I accomplished my quota for the day.
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Re: Grim Tales From Dark Realm - page 18: Pantsu!

Postby Maxgate » Mon Sep 19, 2011 8:09 am

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Re: Grim Tales From Dark Realm - page 20: Her plan!

Postby ShadowKnife » Thu Sep 29, 2011 3:59 pm

Veronica looks so awesome in panel 2.
I am the one, the only..............um...................... never mind.
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Re: Grim Tales From Dark Realm - page 20: Her plan!

Postby Maxgate » Thu Oct 06, 2011 12:54 pm

Nothing much...
just a new page:
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Re: Grim Tales From Dark Realm - page 21: trust

Postby reaperrose101 » Fri Oct 07, 2011 10:06 am

I just found this comic today on deviantART! So cool! :mrgreen:
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Re: Grim Tales From Dark Realm - page 21: trust

Postby Maxgate » Sun Oct 09, 2011 11:41 am

@ reaperrose: lol
maybe you found my daviantart

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Re: Grim Tales From Dark Realm - page 22: M&M

Postby Maxgate » Mon Oct 10, 2011 9:49 am

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Re: Grim Tales From Dark Realm - page 23: Story from dark realm

Postby Maxgate » Sat Oct 15, 2011 8:49 am

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Re: Grim Tales From Dark Realm - page 24

Postby Scissors » Fri Oct 21, 2011 6:35 pm

Nice. This comic is pretty decent.
Innocence Abandoned: And that's why scissors always knows exactly the right things to say to newbs.
Chuckledarkly: Scissors don't lie. Only cut.
Blood Lord: Scissors, I tip my hat to you, my good sir and/or madam for giving me a good chuckle today.
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Re: Grim Tales From Dark Realm - page 24

Postby Maxgate » Mon Oct 24, 2011 1:56 am

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Re: Grim Tales From Dark Realm - page 25

Postby darknessvandeath » Mon Oct 24, 2011 8:09 pm

newbe here

I like the story so far keep on doing it
think about more charachers to this
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let darkness consume you
let darkness control you
let your nightmares become real
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Re: Grim Tales From Dark Realm - page 25

Postby Maxgate » Mon Oct 31, 2011 10:11 am

@ darknessvandeath: thanks
and I will make more characters

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Re: Grim Tales From Dark Realm - page 26: Red girl

Postby Innocence Abandoned » Mon Oct 31, 2011 2:56 pm

I'm impressed with your skill Maxgate, but I would highly recommend you send drafts of your page to a person who speaks English as their first language before you post them, to help correct the grammar and spelling errors. Or, better yet, find somebody you can trust as a writer and explain your ideas to them so they can get the sentences and phrasing perfect the first time, and you can then use their script. I'm sure if you ask around you'll find volunteers.
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