Mimezinga little collection, MLPFiM fanfics, PG 13+ and 9+

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Mimezinga little collection, MLPFiM fanfics, PG 13+ and 9+

Postby mimezinga » Sat Apr 30, 2011 8:48 am

from what i can see it is possible to link the stories, i hope that's ok because reformatting the latter could be a bit of a problem and fanfic format is anyway a bit awkward to convert

both stories need to be arranged, especially in the syntax, i'm afraid that i stick too much to my motherlanguage when writing and miss some basics of a good narrative english, i hope you can help me with that

here we go



STORY NUMBER 1
PG: 9+
TEN YEARS FLAT (lenght 3,000 words)
TAGS: adventure, my little pony FiM, Scootaloo, Rainbow Dash
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6951506/1/Ten_years_flat



STORY NUMBER 2
PG: 13+
ONE LAST SONG (lenght 6,100 words)
TAGS: sad, maybe a little grim, DJ P0N-3, Luna, Rarity, Sweetie Belle
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6969238/1/One_last_song

i'd like to get some feedback, mainly about the language (but even your opinion about the story per se will be appreciated), even a PM will do, i'm trying to improve because quite soon i'll have to wwrite in englsh for working reasons, so i'm trying to learn how not to screw everything with a bad language property
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Re: Mimezinga little collection, MLPFiM fanfics, PG 13+ and 9+

Postby mimezinga » Fri May 06, 2011 5:01 pm

deleted suddenly muffins, got too many complains
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