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The Hellfire Story, and the Geistauge story - by Thiamor.

Postby Thiamor » Mon Jan 24, 2011 1:40 am

So I've been on a break with Hellfire and started work on a new story, Geistauge, in which WILL be illustrated and used as a job application with Dark Horse Comics. Already have an Artist who will help in due time.


Hellfire link: http://thiamor.deviantart.com/art/Hellfire-194874043

Geistauge link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/19BCozLNf9c4Se2OFpA_qSSHUd_aegs-efY2kPWcd7Vw/edit?usp=sharing
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Re: Hellfire (Lock my other topic, please. Too much to use now.)

Postby BeeAre » Mon Jan 24, 2011 3:22 am

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Re: Hellfire (Lock my other topic, please. Too much to use now.)

Postby Thiamor » Mon Jan 24, 2011 3:48 am

Yup. that.
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Re: Hellfire (Lock my other topic, please. Too much to use now.)

Postby BeeAre » Mon Jan 24, 2011 5:32 pm

Okay. It is locked. But now the link in your thread lets you back to it if you or anyone else wants to read it again C:
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Re: Hellfire (Lock my other topic, please. Too much to use now.)

Postby Blood Lord » Mon Jan 24, 2011 8:24 pm

Damn you BR. I thought you had updated your story.
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Re: Hellfire (Lock my other topic, please. Too much to use now.)

Postby BeeAre » Tue Jan 25, 2011 12:30 am

Blood Lord wrote:Damn you BR. I thought you had updated your story.


aso me so solly.
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Re: Hellfire (Lock my other topic, please. Too much to use now.)

Postby Nox » Tue Jan 25, 2011 8:43 am

You have something good here. It's not much, but it's a work in progress. I shall look forward to this.


This whole story, will be more like a prequel, that leads up to the current time.

A prequel is a work that supplements a previously completed one. So I think you mean prologue.

I did not steal this idea from Full Metal Alchemist.)

Then why so guilty?
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Re: Hellfire (Lock my other topic, please. Too much to use now.)

Postby Thiamor » Tue Jan 25, 2011 1:36 pm

Thanks, I couldn't think of prologue. I knew prequel was the wrong word, but most would understand what I meant.

Also, not so much as feeling guilty, more-so idiots trying to pull out my ideas on here and trying to match them with other works.

That has happened a bit before, so to get that out of the way I came right out with the fact that I hadn't taken the idea from there, because most Mechanical Arm ideas would make people think of FMA.

Also I've been updating the story bit by bit on another site I use, which I plan to copy over the other parts to here. Many people so far have came out and told me that it is very interesting. Even those not into aspects of Hell, demons and such or not even into horror have said that I have stumbled upon a good way to present it. Figured that if I could get a sample comic made from a friend, it may be a well fit story for a comic series. I don't see that many (I know there are tons, though) of comics based upon where the hero isn't necessarily a super hero. Just a person doing a job because they want to. Like sending souls back to Hell.
I will give away a part of this. Where no matter what good he does, he will end up in Hell forever, in the end of his life. You know, having a sealed fate.
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Re: Hellfire (Lock my other topic, please. Too much to use now.)

Postby Nox » Tue Jan 25, 2011 1:49 pm

Although cliche, nothing says classic than a tragic hero.

Metal arm does pretty much correspond to Edward Elric. But as long as the story of yours is relatively unique, then I don't think you need to worry.
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Re: Thiamor: Hellfire: Original Work: Chapter 1 - Intro

Postby Thiamor » Tue Jan 25, 2011 2:26 pm

Well almost all heroes have something tragic happen to them. What I meant was one focusing on more darker tones. Like how he could be more neutral than good or bad.
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Re: Thiamor: Hellfire: Original Work: Chapter 1 - Intro

Postby Nox » Tue Jan 25, 2011 7:44 pm

I agree, anti-heroes are a lot more interesting in terms of character depth. Well it's up to you, if you're aiming for gritty. Just make sure there's nothing too descriptive in there if you catch my drift.
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Re: Thiamor: Hellfire: Original Work: Chapter 1 - Intro

Postby Thiamor » Tue Jan 25, 2011 10:18 pm

Only thing like that would be, would have to be the gore. But nothing that would make it super mature works.
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Re: Thiamor: Hellfire: Original Work: Chapter 1 - Intro

Postby Thiamor » Thu Jan 27, 2011 11:28 pm

Edited the story. Added a few things, changed a few words to sound better as well.
Also someone pointed me to a page on Dark Horse Comic's website where they offer jobs. If you get a reply, basically that means you're getting the spot. If you don't, they don't reply back. I might submit this part, as a sample and see if they reply back.
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Re: Thiamor: Hellfire: Original Work: Chapter 1 - Intro

Postby Thiamor » Mon Jan 31, 2011 7:58 pm

Edited.
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Re: Thiamor: Hellfire: Original Work: Chapter 1 - Intro

Postby Thiamor » Sat Feb 05, 2011 12:11 am

Edited again.
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Re: Thiamor: Hellfire: Original Work: Chapter 1 - Intro

Postby Thiamor » Sun Feb 06, 2011 11:36 pm

Updated.
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Re: Thiamor: Introduction Into Madness

Postby Thiamor » Tue Nov 22, 2011 7:11 pm

Updated it a small bit.
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Re: Thiamor: Introduction Into Madness

Postby Thiamor » Sat Dec 10, 2011 1:39 pm

I've edited it, so going to bump this.
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Re: Thiamor: Introduction Into Madness

Postby Thiamor » Thu Dec 15, 2011 9:41 pm

Been 5 days, so I'm bumping this. I'd love your opinions.
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Re: Thiamor: Introduction Into Madness

Postby Thiamor » Fri Dec 23, 2011 12:55 am

Bumping this for opinions.
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Re: Thiamor: Hellfire

Postby Thiamor » Sun Jan 01, 2012 12:58 pm

Bumping this again.
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Re: Thiamor: Hellfire

Postby Thiamor » Mon Jul 02, 2012 6:31 pm

I've updated the story some more.
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Re: Thiamor: Hellfire

Postby Thiamor » Tue Jul 03, 2012 12:24 pm

Can some mod delete that spam post above this post?
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Re: The Hellfire Story - By Thiamor. Many updates are to come.

Postby Thiamor » Thu Jul 12, 2012 12:11 am

I've edited this story a bit more.

Also you'll win a cookie if you can find, and post on here, my indirect reference to the Manga/Anime series known as "Deadman Wonderland". Kgo.

Plus here is the link to my story on DeviantArt.

http://thiamor.deviantart.com/art/Hellfire-194874043
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Re: The Hellfire Story - By Thiamor. Many updates are to come.

Postby Thiamor » Sun Jul 15, 2012 9:21 am

Bumping this for a story update.
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