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my own poetry

Postby goth poet of love » Sun Jun 05, 2005 4:43 pm

broken and bruised
here for you to use
nothing to lose
except everything i have

beaten and shaken
mindless and forsaken
heartsick and aching
it's really not that bad

destroy me, deprave me,
you really can't save me,
degrade me, demean me,
try to make me cry

debase me, lose me
fuck me, use me,
corrupt me, corrode me
please just let me die

defy me, i'm shaken
infect me, i'm breaking
deploy me, you've taken
all that i can feel

kill me, i'm heartless
torture me, there's nothing left
fill me, you know you've kept
the one way i can heal

violate, contaminate, suffocate
i'm heartsick
pervert, subvert, convert
it's manic
degenerate, profigate, adulturate
my emotions
demorilize, animalize, bastardize
my devotion
asphyxiate, terminate, deteriorate
you're empty
assasinate, immolate, liquidate
just kill me
immoralize, toxify, oxidize
the truth
contaminate, disintegrate, lacerate
there's nothing left but you
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You never told me,
that it was going to happen.
You never told me,
That you were going to leave.
You never told me,
That it was time.

It is just like,
I never told you,
That I loved you.

I never had enough time.
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Postby Kyuu » Sun Jun 05, 2005 4:55 pm

It's really good. I like it. I can see what you mean.
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Postby Cali Defender » Sun Jun 05, 2005 9:59 pm

I guess in some circles its a good poem, but really, all I see is alot of crap.


Now, if im getting the meaning completely wrong, feel free to correct me. However, from what i can gather, its one of htose lost and hopless love poems where the speaker is so obsessed with someone they could care less about what that persons does to them or with others. And if you really are like that, well have a nice fucking life cus your pretty much a lost cause.
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Postby Spike » Sun Jun 05, 2005 10:11 pm

Good, goth, I really like the rhythm and emotion in your poetry. You should retitle this thread to "Goth's Poetry" and update it with more, because I like it ^_^
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Re: my own poetry

Postby Lord and Master » Mon Jun 06, 2005 4:59 pm

Thats real cool. ^_^
I right those kind of poems too, but I don't know if they are any good or not. I made my friend cry with one :'( .
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Re: my own poetry

Postby goth poet of love » Mon Jun 06, 2005 9:45 pm

^_^ well thank you all for your good reviews ill add another poem but i must tell that these are created without meaning the come with the wind and vanish with it and it adapts to the mind of the one who reads it so u read what u feel hehe here is another:

everything was beautiful
everything was new
everything was normal
when i first met you

everything was pleasant
everything was fun
i thought there was no more sorrow
my pain had just begun

i marred myself when i was angry
when i was upset or down
i mar myself when i was dying inside
i cry without any sound

i stopped my addiction
i stopped inflicting pain
i stopped everything i ever loved
all for your gain

i thought you really loved me
i thought you really cared
i thought you were sincere
i thought you'd always be there

you brought along a happiness
id never felt before
you brought along a plague
the pain i had and more

there was nothing i could do
my love was way too deep
i couldn't bear to lose you
i thought this feeling i could keep

then one day it's over
the day that you lied
that day i cried and i hurt
and i died on the inside

nothing is beautiful
not even you
there's nothing i can say
nothing i can do

the day it all fell
and things that couldn't have been
happened all at once
on march ten
You never told me,
that it was going to happen.
You never told me,
That you were going to leave.
You never told me,
That it was time.

It is just like,
I never told you,
That I loved you.

I never had enough time.
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Re: my own poetry

Postby Cascade » Mon Jun 06, 2005 9:50 pm

Do you ever write about anything even remotely happy? o_o
Wait...nevermind, that is a stupid question.
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valentine day

Postby goth poet of love » Mon Jun 06, 2005 10:01 pm

he he ill post this just to see what u think of it i just finished it awhile ago its title its the "valentine day":

a day of lust and happiness
a day of beauty and peace
a day for lovers to celebrate
a day for fun, at least

a day of deceit and lies
a day of broken hearts
a day that i wish was never made up
it's the day me and my sanity part

a day i wish was vacant
while my heart is frail and empty
a day that hurts and destroys
not even the weak are free

there's nothing i want more
than to see this day die
it's obnoxious, unsufferable, intolerable
wipe the tears from my eyes

there's nothing holy and sacred
on this deadly day of saints
hold my heart in your hands
your sadism makes me faint

there's no other way
to let you know i care
than to hold your heart in front of your eyes
crush it because you're not there

so in conclusion to all of you
never fall in love
because you will regret it
when push comes to shove

the day will make you ache
in pain, in agony, in despair
so in conclusion to all of you
don't ever think of going there
You never told me,
that it was going to happen.
You never told me,
That you were going to leave.
You never told me,
That it was time.

It is just like,
I never told you,
That I loved you.

I never had enough time.
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