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You never told me,
that it was going to happen.
You never told me,
That you were going to leave.
You never told me,
That it was time.

It is just like,
I never told you,
That I loved you.

I never had enough time.

It's really good. I like it. I can see what you mean.

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I guess in some circles its a good poem, but really, all I see is alot of crap.


Now, if im getting the meaning completely wrong, feel free to correct me. However, from what i can gather, its one of htose lost and hopless love poems where the speaker is so obsessed with someone they could care less about what that persons does to them or with others. And if you really are like that, well have a nice fucking life cus your pretty much a lost cause.

Good, goth, I really like the rhythm and emotion in your poetry. You should retitle this thread to "Goth's Poetry" and update it with more, because I like it

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Thats real cool.
I right those kind of poems too, but I don't know if they are any good or not. I made my friend cry with one .

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well thank you all for your good reviews ill add another poem but i must tell that these are created without meaning the come with the wind and vanish with it and it adapts to the mind of the one who reads it so u read what u feel hehe here is another:

everything was beautiful
everything was new
everything was normal
when i first met you

everything was pleasant
everything was fun
i thought there was no more sorrow
my pain had just begun

i marred myself when i was angry
when i was upset or down
i mar myself when i was dying inside
i cry without any sound

i stopped my addiction
i stopped inflicting pain
i stopped everything i ever loved
all for your gain

i thought you really loved me
i thought you really cared
i thought you were sincere
i thought you'd always be there

you brought along a happiness
id never felt before
you brought along a plague
the pain i had and more

there was nothing i could do
my love was way too deep
i couldn't bear to lose you
i thought this feeling i could keep

then one day it's over
the day that you lied
that day i cried and i hurt
and i died on the inside

nothing is beautiful
not even you
there's nothing i can say
nothing i can do

the day it all fell
and things that couldn't have been
happened all at once
on march ten

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You never told me,
that it was going to happen.
You never told me,
That you were going to leave.
You never told me,
That it was time.

It is just like,
I never told you,
That I loved you.

I never had enough time.

Do you ever write about anything even remotely happy? o_o
Wait...nevermind, that is a stupid question.

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FUKKATSU

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You never told me,
that it was going to happen.
You never told me,
That you were going to leave.
You never told me,
That it was time.

It is just like,
I never told you,
That I loved you.

I never had enough time.