Relick's Writing Room (Update 6/6/05)

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Relick's Writing Room (Update 6/6/05)

Postby Relick » Sun Jun 05, 2005 12:47 pm

EDIT: Okay, because of Spike-san's request (and now that she's a mod, her word is law ^_^), this thread will be where I stash my stories, fanfics, poems, and songs. All artwork will be stored in my DA page.

Please enjoy my stories and leave constructive comments. Instead of saying "OMG I LUV IT!!!" or "WTF, mate, this sucks", tell me why you like or hate the work.

I'm done talking now. Go read.

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This was a "short" story I wrote for my English class, but it could also be considered a fanfiction for the anime "Chobits." But very loosely. For one thing, its set in New York and the background of the creation of persocoms is completely different. Tell me what you think!

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Prologue: The Advancement of Technology and the Creation of Persocoms

By the year 2100, technology will have become more advanced than anyone from our own time could have imagined. From the 21st century on, technology has flourished, bringing forth new inventions that allow for easier living on the behalf of human beings. Some of these new products are solely for entertainment, like the pocket-sized game station, while some are for more practical uses, such as the portable telephone that allows one to talk to anyone from anywhere. But all these new technologies pale in comparison to the newest generation of personal computers.

These computers, otherwise known as persocoms, can do virtually anything its owner wants. Cooking, cleaning, paying bills, you name it, the persocom can do it all. But what makes them so different from other computers is their shape. Persocoms are built to look like human beings. Their outward appearance resembles real people so strongly that someone who has never seen one before could swear that it was just another human.

The world’s first persocom was created in Tokyo, Japan by Dr. Yuki Murakami in the year 2013. It took 10 long years of nonstop work and research on Dr. Murakami’s part, and resulted in one of the most advanced AI units of the time. Murakami’s persocom was built in the shape of a young girl and went by the name of Amaterasu, after the Japanese god of the sun who was created by the King of the Gods. When asked why he built Amaterasu in the shape of a woman, Murakami answered simply, “Staring at a bright screen all day can damage the eyes and give a major headache,â€
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Postby QuickSilver » Sun Jun 05, 2005 12:56 pm

Hmmmm...yes "short" indeed...I like it, but doesn't persocom stand for personal computer aka Pc which already exsists? (just an observation...don't hurt me!)
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Re: A Light for Every Broken Heart

Postby Relick » Sun Jun 05, 2005 1:16 pm

Yeah, it does stand for "personal computer" but the term "persocom" has only been used in Chobits as far as I know.
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Postby Jay » Sun Jun 05, 2005 1:48 pm

It's a nice story Relick and leaves off on a lighter note.
Though short, it's as long as it needs to be, I do think that I like your less directly fanfiction works better. Keep up the good work ^_^
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Postby Deena » Sun Jun 05, 2005 5:12 pm

I love it, too.^.^ I wish you'd continue it, though.T.T
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Re: A Light for Every Broken Heart

Postby Relick » Sun Jun 05, 2005 5:18 pm

It might be continued! A friend of mine from another forum is working with me in making it into a manga! Yay!
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Postby Deena » Sun Jun 05, 2005 5:39 pm

Yay indeed! ^_^ I think you told me this before, though... o.O
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Re: A Light for Every Broken Heart

Postby Relick » Sun Jun 05, 2005 5:40 pm

Well...I'm telling you again.... >.<
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Postby Deena » Sun Jun 05, 2005 5:55 pm

There there.XD Relick has tendency to repeat what she's already said, repeat what she's already said, repeat what she's already said. o.O

Then again, I forget things all the time, so if she didn't repeat things, I'd probably forget them. I'd forget my own name if my mom didn't still call me by it... lol
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Postby Spike » Sun Jun 05, 2005 9:52 pm

Guys!! IN THE FUTURE

You make things: put it under a thread with your name where you will put all of your arty things in the future.

I know it's a new thing to get used to, but it's the way this forum will be run sooooo get used to it. Thanks.
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Postby Jay » Mon Jun 06, 2005 3:04 am

Aye, aye Spike, I'll keep that in mind if I ever get to doing anything arty XD

Also, I'm glad Relick repeated that.
Because I certainly never heard it.
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