Bastard child of bad and poetry/ Possible nsfw, or something

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Postby InsideTheAsylum » Sat Jun 04, 2005 2:28 am

I'm just trying to illustrate that not all random scribbles are art ^_^
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Postby Kyuu » Sat Jun 04, 2005 2:29 am

Heh, yeah well, i actually wrote a song one day, and i had to go to class, but during class i kept adding to the song...it was funny, i was trying to rememeber what i thought.
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Re: Bastard child of bad and poetry/ Possible nsfw, or somet

Postby Deena » Sat Jun 04, 2005 2:29 am

I like it. ^_^ Poems are like the beauty in art; it's in the eye of the beholder.

Critically, I'd focus on the word choices you used. This type of poem depends a lot on the delivery of it; if you don't say it right, then it gets messed up. Say it to yourself, and see if any words need changing. I wrote this one poem for English, and there's this one line in it that I didn't have time to change. I used the word "weathered" when the word I wanted to use was "weary". Bah.>.< When you're saying a poem, a change likes that makes all the difference, making everything fit perfectly.
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Re: Bastard child of bad and poetry/ Possible nsfw, or somet

Postby Cascade » Sat Jun 04, 2005 2:30 am

I don't know Inside. I can pretty easily tell that poem was crap. I wouldn't think that Octodexy's is that bad. The thing about it is that it does successfuly evoke an emotion without using big allegories, etc. which is difficult.
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Postby InsideTheAsylum » Sat Jun 04, 2005 2:36 am

Man, this entire thread makes me want to pull my own hair. I always hate debating art since it's all extremely objective :/. At heart I'm a conservative classicist and that's where I judge everything from.
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Postby InsideTheAsylum » Sat Jun 04, 2005 12:04 pm

Er.. ok.

What's the point of displaying something of yours if you don't want to incite discussion? Hmmm?
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Postby Cascade » Sat Jun 04, 2005 3:17 pm

Well, I figured that Octo wouldn't have the patience for criticism anyways. What a lost cause.
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Postby Cascade » Sat Jun 04, 2005 5:48 pm

Oh okay. I understand. See you.
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Postby Deena » Sat Jun 04, 2005 5:58 pm

Don't be insulted by Gakun. He pretends he's smarter and an almighty god of everything, when he's really just a shrimpy little man.XD *pats Gakun on the back* There, there, I love ya anyway.<3

Anyway, I'm sad to see you go.;.; I did like your poem, though. There's a name for poems like that...prose? Arrrg, I forgot the technical term...*racks through brain* o.O
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Postby InsideTheAsylum » Sat Jun 04, 2005 8:24 pm

I never said I was the smart god ^_^. I even mentioned that while I don't understand it, that it was my person opinion. Frankly, I don't mind if someone calls my writing or art scribbling.. you know why? Most likely because it is.

Oi vei, moot point to argue.
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