Nekoman's PPGD Branch storyline: "Barren"

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Postby Nekoman » Sat Mar 29, 2008 4:05 pm

sometime today.

Added after 4 hours 29 minutes:

nvm, my company is staying all day.
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Postby tomaszavenger » Mon Mar 31, 2008 12:50 pm

Type it up.

What will happen?

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Postby Nekoman » Mon Mar 31, 2008 2:20 pm

Ill do it this afternoon, I promise, im kindof sorry I havent updated, and sorta left it at a horrible cliffhanger, but the next chapter is worth it! I promise!
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Postby Mara ichigo » Mon Mar 31, 2008 7:56 pm

-waits- ok......-5 seconds later- OMYGZ!! I CANT TAKE THE SUSPENSE!!!! IM GONNA DIE!! -dies- X_X
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Postby tomaszavenger » Tue Apr 01, 2008 3:52 pm

Mara, get on him, and force him to write more!

Seriously, dude, today is not tommorow.

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Postby Nekoman » Thu Apr 03, 2008 5:54 am

I told Boomer to post that I'll be updating Spring Break. [next week] Im not supposed to be on the computer, so I dont have enough time to type it up..
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Postby tomaszavenger » Thu Apr 03, 2008 7:13 am

Oh, all right.
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Postby Maoman123 » Thu Apr 03, 2008 5:58 pm

Nekoman wrote:I told Boomer to post that I'll be updating Spring Break. [next week] Im not supposed to be on the computer, so I dont have enough time to type it up..


Just do what I do, slowly adjust your body so you only need like 3 hours of sleep, then stay up until 4 every night! :D
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Postby Mara ichigo » Thu Apr 03, 2008 7:48 pm

aww that suks HURY UP SPRING BREAK! -goes and threatens spring break with a dirk- >=D muahahahahahahahahahaha!
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Postby Kite of the Azure Flames » Thu Apr 03, 2008 8:44 pm

i've already used up my spring break.... :brickwall: why damnit WHY!!!!
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Postby Maoman123 » Fri Apr 04, 2008 12:40 am

I've got another couple of days of spring break.... *glee*

It's 1:30 in the morning! *Grabs can of mountain dew*
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Postby tomaszavenger » Fri Apr 04, 2008 3:08 am

*Grabs can off Boomer and pours it on Nekoman*

Whoops!
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Postby Nekoman » Fri Apr 04, 2008 5:53 pm

Ch. 8
“Elmer’s glue”
I shut my eyes tight, for a good minute. After I didn’t hear sound or motion, I pried them open.

And what I saw scared me.

A white sticky liquid had come from Elmer’s shoulder, arched itself around, and stopped the dirk halfway down to his back. The glue was twisted around the knife, and was sinking, seemingly returning to Elmer’s shoulder. Creeping downwards, swallowing the knife with it. Elmer gave a strange noise as the knife slipped into Elmer’s shoulder, and his flesh returned to normal, the knife gone. He stood up straight, and I caught sight of his face. His glasses were cracked, the eyes behind the crooked flame glowing white and reflecting nothing, not a hint of life in them.

He jerked, and his hands let flow the same white fluid, which itself took the shape of his forearm and hands, growing to three times their size. He looked down at them, almost admiring these.. things.. and then back up to the boy, who yelped and took a step back, hitting a hole in the street and falling backwards, onto his back. Elmer raised his right arm, and the fluid’s hand part grew five times as much, which he opened it and slammed the fluid-palm onto the boy, covering face and body of the boy, who struggled to break from it, but couldn’t.

I heard a yell to the left of me, to see Mitch himself had changed. His eyes glowed ghastly green. His hands also dyed green, halfway up his forearms, with a green aura circling around his hands. Then, trees collapsed in the nearby woods, and a huge roar echoed through the street. Out jumped a huge gorilla. It was Bonnet, but he had changed. Three times larger, green fur, glowing red eyes, and.. spikes. On it’s back. It’s teeth poked out a god two inches out from the bottom lip, and he grabbed one kid and threw him, swiping the other three holding Mitch with one very large arm.

The kids holding me down ran, ran as fast as they could, knowing that I might break out too. I didn’t feel any stranger though. Why was this happening to Mitch and Elmer? I heard a scream. A boy had tried to shoot Bonnet, and the gorilla had used his spikes on him, plucking them from his back and tossing them at the kid, one had landed in his eye. The kid laid in the street, dyed by a puddle of blood, and motionless.

Elmer’s arms returned to normal and Mitch came out of his trance. Bonnet himself turned into a very, very, very small gorilla, down to a size that you could hold him in your palm, and had lost his mutations. We stood looking at each other, and grinned, we had won. But the dead kids caught our eyes. We looked around, at each other, and ran. Ran like hell, slamming and locking ourselves into Mitch’s house.
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Postby Iris » Fri Apr 04, 2008 6:08 pm

hehehe, finally an update, anyway it's good but can you add some spaces between the paragraphs? other than that nothing to complain about except the funny ']' in the 7th line(8th including title)
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Postby Maoman123 » Fri Apr 04, 2008 6:08 pm

Whew.... thats one hell of an update there...
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Postby Mara ichigo » Fri Apr 04, 2008 6:19 pm

sweet! glue boy's back! except, hes not bent on rage because of buttercup makin fun of him.....which i disaproved of....

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Postby Nekoman » Fri Apr 04, 2008 8:53 pm

0///0 You make red Rowdyruff go red.
^///^ thanks, I take it it was worth the wait?

Oh, and when I use spaces between paragraphs, It means I span a length of time, like so in the Eragon series, but I suppose I can change it for this story, if it's bothering you. Thanks for the criticism.
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Postby Iris » Fri Apr 04, 2008 9:38 pm

it's just easier on the eyes, white text is painful if it keeps going with out spaces
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Postby Nekoman » Sat Apr 05, 2008 8:07 am

I guess you're right.
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Postby Mara ichigo » Sat Apr 05, 2008 4:54 pm

Nekoman wrote:0///0 You make red Rowdyruff go red.
^///^ thanks, I take it it was worth the wait?

yes, yes it was ^_^ -smiles at you-
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Postby tomaszavenger » Sun Apr 06, 2008 12:22 pm

Definately worth the wait, if you promise to update more.
Awesome, Barren's soon going to have to realise his powers.
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Postby Nekoman » Mon Apr 07, 2008 1:20 am

Im updating Tuesday, then Thursday, which will be many an update, since im taking the laptop on the 6-hour drive to Florida. BE HAPPY.
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Postby tomaszavenger » Mon Apr 07, 2008 5:37 am

Yay! Except, do you have a wireless router? If you do, yay! If you don't, how do you connect to internet?
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Postby Nekoman » Mon Apr 07, 2008 2:42 pm

I type them on Word before typing them here.
Actually, its more like..

Write em --> Proofread --> Word --> Proofread --> Re-type Word --> Copy and paste here.

So I wont be on the internet.
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Postby tomaszavenger » Mon Apr 07, 2008 3:10 pm

Oh!
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