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Postby Shadowed State of Mind » Wed May 03, 2006 11:34 am

Okay, I think I've caught up despite not having too much of an understanding of things. (Perhaps it's your way of sentance breaking?) I'll re-read soon but...those girls Shad and Bell created. Are they who I THINK they are?! :shock:

Although I think I'm having a bit of a hard time keeping up. Mostly because of how fast things go. Also, I've noticed that a few things from my fic have been...ahem, "borrowed" as well. Okay, few might not even be the word.
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Postby Darkness_calls » Wed May 03, 2006 11:38 am

Shadowed State of Mind wrote:Okay, I think I've caught up despite not having too much of an understanding of things. (Perhaps it's your way of sentance breaking?) I'll re-read soon but...those girls Shad and Bell created. Are they who I THINK they are?! :shock:

Although I think I'm having a bit of a hard time keeping up. Mostly because of how fast things go. Also, I've noticed that a few things from my fic have been...ahem, "borrowed" as well. Okay, few might not even be the word.


Yes, :P

I'm sorry Shad, I was currently idealess, so I made your story collide with mine a little, is that Ok?
If not then I'll just edit it ^_^
Don't worry except for the last two updates and you're very own cutemuffins, there probably won't be any more "borrowing" ;)

I've also noticed that I move things really quickly, maybe because if I stay on the same place for too long, I will run out of ideas and the chapters will "stink".

If you have to re-read it to understand what is going on, then maybe I need to slow down a bit :/



And here is a picture I drew and colored in about 10 minutes, It the part where Tina is "forced" to be a maid
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Postby Frostmork » Wed May 03, 2006 1:54 pm

Her hand is a bit small. And what is it in her hand?
(I´t aint good to cover misstakes. The only thing that can be good is to show them so other can learn.)
(That´s my own citate!)
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Postby Darkness_calls » Wed May 03, 2006 2:33 pm

Frostmork wrote:Her hand is a bit small. And what is it in her hand?
(I´t aint good to cover misstakes. The only thing that can be good is to show them so other can learn.)
(That´s my own citate!)


I'm not drawing Bleedman style (meaning no large hands), the thing she is holding is called a tray. Like I said, I drew her in a short time, about 3-4 min. the color took 1 min and the rest was me drawing thin, nearly invisable outlines.
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Postby Shadowed State of Mind » Wed May 03, 2006 5:05 pm

Well that explains things...sort of. But please, please PLEASE let me know or give me credit (or a combination of both) when you "leech" scenarios from my fic...or anyone else's for that matter. Take my latest chapter for example. The ending scenes in there are basically carbon copies of the ones from Tales of Symphonia, but I gave the game credit because I didn't modify them...at least not a lot.

And you may be better off doing a stand-alone fic. As in, don't attempt to combine your plot with mine. In fact, allow me to use my somewhat megar time to divulge why:

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That is "prototype" Shad. Late last year I was so enamored by Lifelines I wanted to "leech" off it myself. Not necessarily knowing any better I decided to go on ahead and make a few teaser trailers that was supposed to create a setting after Lifelines. The results within my mind compounded into the dreaded Writer's Block due to several scenarios not making ANY sense! And the fact that there're several conflicting scenes in Reunifications didn't help much either. So later on I decided to "downsize" prototype Shad up there into the cute, overly shy, somewhat overblushing little boy you know today.

Translation: Failure to use your own ideas (or even twist a few scenarios that were already done like I did a few times) will result in...BAH! You know what'll happen!

Nevertheless, I had no idea Shad was becoming so popular. I didn't expect this until after I've finished my trilogy. Speaking of which...I may be able to use prototype Shad yet, but in another fic. I've been discussing it with Griddles and he likes it...I think. Can't recall if I saved those conversations. Meh, ask him about it if you want.

Whew! That was something. So yeah, I hope you learned something...I guess.
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Postby Darkness_calls » Thu May 04, 2006 8:30 am

Thanks. That helped alot, but i can swear I though I put credits to you, well ... sorry about that. I have already decided what happens next, and there will be no more "leeching" ;)


Your text helped alot, really.
I do look up to you and Griddles.
And yes, may I use your Creampuffs ?

And like I said I was really idealess in that chapter. It won't happen again, I'm rather going to skip updating every day (yes If you haven't noticed, I have update almost everyday), then going along idealess.


Again thanks Shad. You helped me alot ^_^
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Postby Shadowed State of Mind » Thu May 04, 2006 4:09 pm

Tis okay. You can use the Creampuffs.

To future PPGD fanfic writers/nameless guests: Let this be a lesson to you all. Should you decide to make a fanfic and wish to use my (or anyone else's) OCs or scenarios (or merging your fic with another fic), be sure to ASK and/or give credit where it's due. Also, we have the right to say no. Darkness_calls just got lucky. :P
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Re: (Fanfic) "Leeching the worlds"

Postby Darkness_calls » Fri May 05, 2006 12:10 pm

Thanks Shad. Learn from this kids ^_^
I'm really proud of this update. It will probably be one of my favorites. Not only because its a large ( Larger then my normal updates ) update and not even because I feel really good with it, but because here my MOST favorite of all villains appears.

next update:




Bulldog couldn’t stop staring once in a while at Barasia. She was a robot
or more like a gynoid and still looked so human like. He had no idea how
strong … “liking” could be. He was created to like his master, but that
failed somehow. He noticed Barasia looking at him with a questionable
look on her face. He quickly looked the other way and felt some kind of
heat, rising on his cheeks. Just how humanlike did Tina make him? He
didn’t know, nor did he care.

Barasia had taken Bulldog by a small two man escape pod, which she
“borrowed” from Dr.X, to a large mechanical ship of some sort. They were
still in Black Eden; it was amazing how far this place stretched. Total
blackness and weird black trees gloomed everywhere. In the air were
certain glowing balloons. They smelled salty and still somehow … empty.

“Those balloons are filled with H5OZ2X” Barasia said, with a
knowledgeable voice when she noticed Bulldog staring at them.

“What does the Z2X stand for?” Bulldog asked, little embarrassed of being
caught staring like a stupid child at those glowing balloons.

“I don’t know, but I do know they are called sparkles” she said the name
of those thing with a tone that sounded like the name was really obvious.

“Sparkles?” Bulldog asked, feeling like an infant.

“Well you see when they catch fire they explode and for some reasons the
Z2X crates a dark cloud, which seems to “paint” the area around it black”
Barasia felt good, she liked it when she was able to use her vast knowledgebase.

“So that is why this place is so … so dark”

Barasia nodded, though it wasn’t a question. They didn’t speak for the rest
of the ride, until they came where Barasia was heading. Bulldog was
rather disappointed at seeing a little iron shelter, it was really small, and
even Bell’s bedroom was larger. The cold breeze welcomed them as they
landed and left the escape pod. Bulldog looked at the rusty shelter.
Though it was nearly orange red because of all the rust, it still looked
trusty. Bulldog gave a loud sigh and asked Barasia, with a disappointed
expression:

“You’re great reinforcement is here?”

Barasia gave a devious giggle and then spoke with a cute voice:
“That is exactly what I said, when I first came here”

They opened the rusty iron door and walked in, Inside was even uglier
then outside, there was greenish spider web hanging everywhere. In the
middle of the room was an iron platform, it looked brand new compared
to the rest of this construction. When they both were on the platform,
Barasia opened a canister, inside were four blindfolds , she handed
Bulldog one and took one for herself.

“Put this on and whatever you do or hear, DO NOT REMOVE THE
BLINDFOLD!” She yelled the last words, making the shelter shake a little.

Something in the corner moved and dust fell off the roof. Barasia
grabbed a pole, which lay besides the canister. With a hard time ( it was
really rusty ), she pulled the lever in her direction. A loud snap sound was
heard, the elevator iron platform moved a little, then stopped, then
moved again and stopped again. Bulldog looked untrustworthy at the platform.

“It’s just getting rid of the rust” Barasia said, like she was reading his
mind and then she put on her blindfold. Bulldog noticed and did the same.

The platform finally began to move again, this time without stopping. It
moved downwards, about a minute later the smell of rust vanished. A
shock, like a static electricity went through Bulldog and Barasia. She
shock was enough to make them shake.

I wonder what this shock would do to real humans Bulldog wondered.

Then a creeping veil, like hundred of people screaming, filled the air. They
could smell of blood and rotten carnage. Ghostly sound boomed over
them and many other creepy noises and smells, were heard. The ride
down with the elevator took full five minutes.

“It’s safe to remove the blindfold now” Barasia stated.

“What the hell was that!?” Bulldog asked, while he took off his blindfold.

“The nether guard room it is called, I’ve never seen it, but I’ve been told
it kills those whom see the horror it reveals” Barasia explained.

They stood now in a pitch black corridor, they could see each other like it
were bright, but everything else was pitch black. Barasia pointed at a
door, long way from where they were. Both of them walked fast, not
wanting to stay there longer then necessary. While they walked, a thunder
suddenly collided above them and the area flashed, revealing thousand
and thousands of eyes staring at them. Barasia shivered at the sigh, but
Bulldog’s emotional programming wasn’t as perfect as her. The lightning
and the flashes happened, a lot, while they were walking towards the
door. Then finally they were at the door, Barasia slowly opened the door
and walked in, Bulldog went in with her, not wanting to be alone in this
horrid place. Inside was noting but more blackness and a large purple
looking sphere, which illumed them both in purple color.

“Ahem … I’ve returned” Barasia said, small sense of fright in her voice.

“A year …” the sphere whispered.

“What was that?” Barasia asked, she new what was about to happen.

“A DAMN YEAR!” The sphere yelled and the room flashed, reviling
thousands of staring eyes.

“I have a reason why” Barasia said, all sense of fright had left.

“Really now… what might the reason be?” said the sphere, not really
asking but ordering.

“Simple, I was destroyed while searching for the gray emerald”

“I see, a good reason indeed, now I hope you have the emerald” the
voice said, suspecting the worst.

“As a matter of fact I do” Barasia giggled.

She pulled up a large gray colored emerald.
Where did she hide that! Bulldog wondered.

A dark laughter filled the dark endless room and a hole seemed to appear
on the sphere.

“Give it to me!” the sphere ordered.

“Remember my part of the deal” Barasia said with an innocent voice.

“Yes, yes. To give you the power to destroy you oppressors, you father
and the ones who destroyed you for no reason … Dark star council and
my part of the deal …” The sphere waited for Barasia to finish.

“Leave you to rule over Black Eden and to slay the three little girls, whom
defeated you … the powerpuff girls”

“That is correct and don’t you forget it … now give the emerald to me”

Barasia walked towards the emerald, every footstep seemed like an
eternity. Then finally she placed the emerald into the hole of the sphere.

“Finally, I will return, more powerful then ever”

The room flashed and the eyes were revealed, this time they didn’t vanish
with the flash but were there still. Hovering around then, this time staring
at the sphere. Each eye shot a beam into the sphere. The sphere seemed
to grow larger, finally it became almost transparent, reviling a blackish
humanoid figure inside.
Then with a purple blast of brilliance the sphere broke. The bright purple
blast, forced Barasia and Bulldog to close their eyes. When they opened
them again, they noticed that they were back at Black Eden, outside the shelter.

“Ahhh … the fresh smell of what will soon be mine” A voice came behind
them, it was the same voice as the sphere.

Barasia and Bulldog turned around and saw a tall humanoid, he had pale
grey skin, devious eyes. He was dressed in a white suit and in his hand he
held a wooden staff, on top of the staff was a small golden skull.

“Who are you” Bulldog spoke, really surprised.

“I … I am the master of fright, the true king of darkness. I am what
makes the heart beat like crazy. You may call me …”

He made an evil smile, showing his many white sharp teeth, then he continued:

“ … The Boogieman
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Re: (Fanfic) "Leeching the worlds"

Postby Darkness_calls » Sat May 06, 2006 10:29 am

Here is another chapter. I've been trying to describe better. I hope this one and the last upgrade showed some progress :P
Fear the power of the Dark Star council.

The Creampuffs (Berry, Bean and Bop) are made by Shadowed state of mind

Next update:



Tina was in the library, books were scattered everywhere thanks to
earlier explosion. Tina had no idea what that explosion was, nor did she
care. She heard an echo; it sounded like footsteps, four of them. What
ever it was, it seemed to be stomping instead of walking. It stopped at the
library doors. Tina recognized the footsteps.

“Are going to come in or are going to stand there like an idiot, eh, ladybug?”

The library doors were flung open and an overly large insect robot came
in. The insect was pale green in color, hard metallic wing on its back. The
wings were under a shell, which opened up, every time he was going to
fly and that was where Tina gave him the nickname “Ladybug”. He had a
powerful grabbing claw around his mouth area, three tubes sprouted from
the back of his head and followed from what seemed to be a spinal
column on his back. He had four large and thick legs. He had four arms,
two of them really small and useless, they dangled from his chest. The
other two, were large, spiky and ended in a three fingered claw. Out of
one of his hand, came a radio or a com-link.

“The maid is acting strangely; she has some kind of device. High changes
that she caused the explosion. I will have to silence her”

The insect stared furiously at Tina, and then the radio closed and vanished
inside the robot’s hand.

“Now I have a good reason to beat the hell out of you for calling me a
ladybug and revenge for all the fallen comrades you’ve slain”

“I’m so scared miss ladybug” Tina said, not worried at all, because she
knew she could beat him with her powers.

“Did you know Zim added a chip into every council member, now I have a
remote in my head. If you use you powers to much then a swift scroll will
end your life”

At that moment Tina wished, she had never made fun of him.
Tina felt real fear right now, it was horrible. You see, when leeches are
threatened by its life, they become scared and paranoid. Usually they can
resurrect themselves so they don’t care about dieing, but when there is a
high possibility of dieing with about being able to resurrect self, then they
become scared. That is how Zim is able to enslave Tina so well. She is
simply scared about her life.

The insect rushed towards Tina, whom was still shocked from his last
words, he punched her in the stomach. She lost her breath at that punch,
but he didn’t give her any chance, instead he pushed her downwards,
slamming her into the floor and creating a small crater. Tina coughed up
some blood at the force of the slam. Tina’s vision came blurry, because of
the tears, which were starting to form in her eye socket. The insect
grabbed at the neck, he held with much strength. Tina gasped for air. The
robot’s massive hands could break her neck if he wanted to. But instead
he threw Tina away. She landed at a bookshelf, it fell down, because of
the impact. Tina tried to stand up, she was only able to get on her knees.
The massive insect jumped high into the air and landed with a loud noise
beside Tina, he slapped her down again and stepped on her right leg. Tina
yelled in pain. The insect seemed to be enjoying himself. He lifted Tina,
so she could ,barely though, stand on her feet. The insect swung with his
claw like hand at Tina, ripping the clothes of her chest and making three
deep cut wounds in her chest. She fell on the ground, writhing in pain.
That wasn’t enough thou for the insect, he used the opportunity and
kicked her while she lay there. After few more kicks he heard Tina sob
and beg him to stop. He stopped there and stared down at her utterly
beaten body. He felt that he might have overdone it.

“Let that be a lesson for you” He said and walked away.

Tina didn’t bother to stand up, she just lay there crying. Then she heard a
cute, soft and childish voice:

“Are you okay?”

Tina tried to remove the tears, with her hand, that were blurring her
vision. Tina wanted to see the owner of that unfamiliar voice. Tina felt
someone dry her tears.

“It’s okay, don’t cry” said the voice again, with her sweet innocent tone.

Then finally saw the person. It was a little girl, her face was just like
Bubbles face, she had blonde hair, a bear hat firmly placed on her head,
and she had amber colored eyes. She was dressed in black shorts and a
black vest, under the vest was an amber colored shirt and over the shorts
was an amber colored mini skirt. The girl seemed to be sad and scared.

“Thank you” Tina said, with much effort.

“That monster tried to hurt me and my sisters too” The girls said with her
innocent voice, clearly despising that insect.

“Sisters?” Tina though out loud.

“Yes, Bean, Berry and me Bop” Bop said happily.

“I’ve never seen you before”

“Ohh… That is because daddy Shaddy just made us”

Shad made them!? Tina though.

“Can I help you?” Bop whispered

“A drink would be fine” Tina said and tried to smile at Bop.

Bop flew with the greatest speed Tina have ever seen and came back with
a glass of water, Tina drank it with the help of Bop, after the drink, Tina
was able to sit up.

“Is there anything else I can help you with?” Bop asked, really sweetly.

“Well there is one thing …” Tina looked at her and smiled.
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Postby Shadowed State of Mind » Sat May 06, 2006 10:36 am

Well I see you've gotten slightly better in descriptions. Nice to see you left in Bop's speed (although technically it's "flashwarping" as Bell dubbed it). Let's see how you do her sisters.

And why put in the Boogyman? :unsure:

Added after 21 seconds:

Oh, and Bop can't read (yet).
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Postby Darkness_calls » Sat May 06, 2006 10:37 am

Boogyman is my favorite villain of the PPG. Shame he wa only in one episode :/

I know Bop can't read yet ^_^
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Postby Shadowed State of Mind » Sat May 06, 2006 10:42 am

Also, Berry's somewhat the leader of the Creampuffs since she resembles Bubbles the most (although in my fic Shad led them for a short while, but they're just too hyper at times).

EDIT: Oh yeah! Another thing...

Bean: scardy cat and crybaby
Bop: overly naive and bossy (with a short temper to boot)
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Postby Darkness_calls » Sat May 06, 2006 10:45 am

I know that too, I've read every fic in the art forum more then once (yes EVEN Griddles). I just love Bop the most ^_^ she is so cute with that hat ^_^

Edit:
Bean: scardy cat and crybaby
Bop: overly naive and bossy (with a short temper to boot)


This will help thanks ;)
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Postby Shadowed State of Mind » Sat May 06, 2006 11:06 am

You're welcome. And I take it the gift will be here tomorrow?
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Postby Darkness_calls » Sat May 06, 2006 11:42 am

Here and on your page (a bump for present ;) )
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Re: (Fanfic) "Leeching the worlds"

Postby Darkness_calls » Sun May 07, 2006 10:41 am

Here is the next update.
And Happy Birthday Shad ^_^

Next update:



Shad and Bell were showing Berry and Bean around the place. Bop left
them for some reasons. The corridor they were walking along, echoed
with booming sounds of mechanical creations and stank with hot oil. That
was because of the dark councils “upgrade” facility was nearby.

“What is that smell?” Berry asked, as she held her nose.

Berry’s eyes were aquamarine in color; she had blondish hair with two
cute looking piggy tails, like Bubbles. The piggy tails were tied with an
aquamarine colored ribbon. She was wearing an aquamarine shirt and
dark blue sleeveless jacket. She had light orange colored shorts and
brown shoes.

“Shaddy what is that smell?” Bean asked, while waving her hand in front
of her nose, like she was trying to make the smell go away.

Bean’s eyes were bergandy colored. Just like her two sisters, she was
blond. She was dressed in bright blue shirt, a bergandy colored jacket on.
An orange shirt like her sister and bergandy shoes.

“You know those bug machines, right?”

Berry and Bean nodded.

“Well … this is the smell when they … uhm … make themselves stronger”
Shad tried to explained, not finding the correct words.

The next room they entered was filled with techno stuff. Computer parts,
tubes, book, strange looking machines and many other things were
scattered everywhere. But out of it all, was the super computer. It was
really large, looking down on everything in the room. Beside it was a
platform. That particular platform was used to teleport things, to certain pinpoints.

“Bop!” Berry and Bean suddenly called.

Bop stood there on the platform, it seemed like she was talking to the super computer.

“Don’t worry its not like she knows how to activate it” Bell said calmly.

Then to their surprise, a picture of Megaville elementary popped up in the
super computer screen. Many colored lights filled the room and with a
white brilliance Bop vanished. Bean started to sob and Berry yelled:
“Bop is gone!”

“Don’t worry girls, Bell can get her back” Shad said, not sure if Bell really could.

“Well I can’t get her back that easily, I will have to go there myself and get her”

Bell flew towards the computer. She did something with the computer,
because it suddenly changed its picture to Bell instead of Megaville elementary.

“You can watch me here” She said and walked onto the platform.

“Wait, take us with you” Bean ordered.

“I’ll be much quicker by my self” Bell said, with a smile then vanished in
the same way as Bop.



Meanwhile Bop appeared in the school playground. Lot of kids were
startled at her sudden appearance. But she didn’t take notice of the kids;
instead she quickly flew towards the only mountain, deep inside the forest.

What the hell was that? A certain black haired and green eyed girl thought.

“There is the mountain” Bop spoke to herself, while she tried to remember
what Tina asked her to do.

Tina didn’t want her to tell anyone about what she asked her to do. Tina
even told her how to activate the teleporter. Bop landed near a small cave
opening. She took up a beautiful ring out of her pocket. Tina gave it to
her, but the ring was broken at one point. Bop though about asking Tina if
she could keep the ring, because it was so pretty. She hovered into the
small cave opening, to her surprise; the cave itself was huge and had
much mechanical stuff in it.

Do all caves have so many techno … stuff? Bop thought.

Then a cube shaped machine hovered towards her. The front screen of
the cube blinked with many types of red color.

“Who are you, state you business!” The cube ordered with much hostility
in its voice.

“*gulp* I … I am Bop” she said, frightened of the hostility of that robot.

“What is you business here!?”

“Uhh … I … I …”

“Spit it out!”

Bop decided to skip talking to him and just do what Tina said she should
do, so Bop showed the robot, the ring Tina gave her. The red colors on
the robots screen suddenly turned bright blue.

“I’m sorry for my hostility back, there. Please follow me”

“So you’re not angry? flying computer”

“No, I am just … guarding this place. But you can call me Goliath”

“Why did you become so good, after I showed you this ring?” Bop said
with a curious voice.

“That is Tina’s ring. She is my … friend”

“Ohh … I see, can you help her? She is hurt”

“I know … and I will help”

Bop followed Goliath deep down an artificial tunnel. She noticed many
interesting things she wanted to ask about or touch, but she decided to do
nothing but follow Goliath and help Tina. They didn’t go very far. Inside
one room was a gigantic robot, the robot looked really humanoid. Bop
just had to ask:

“Does that big metal man work?”

“Yes it does and I’m pretty sure you will see it in action sooner then later”

Goliath stopped in front of a thick iron table. On the table were two things.
A bright white ring and a remote with only one button.

“Give Tina these two items and tell her from me that her unfinished dress
works now, hundred percent”

“Alright, I will do that” Bop said happily and took the ring and the funny
looking remote.

Just as she was going to leave, Goliath spoke, he had a teasing tone in his voice:
“You know how to get back?” he asked.

Bop stopped in her track; quickly she turned around to face Goliath. She
blushed a little with embarrassment and said:
“No, she never told how to get back”

Goliath giggled and then he told Bop to follow him.



Bell appeared; she appeared at the same time as when Bop hovered into the cave.

Most kids recognized Bell, they screamed and ran around. Bell tried to
ignore the kids, while she was looking for Bop. She hovered around the
playfield trying to locate Bop. Then a voice came, it was all too familiar to Bell:
“So we meet again”

Bell turned around to face the powerpuff girls.

“I didn’t come here to fight” Bell yelled at them, she had been too worried
about Bop, so she forgot about the powerpuff girls.

“But we’re here to fight you” Buttercup yelled back.

“I’m just looking for someone” Bell said.

“So you can kidnap that person also!?” Bubbles yelled angrily at Bell.

“I was just following orders” Bell tried to explained.

“That doesn’t concern us” Blossom told her.

“I don’t have time for this” Bell said and began to fly away.

But she got zapped by some kind of energy, making her unable to move a muscle.

“Who said you could leave?” Bubbles told her.

Bell suspected that they wouldn’t let her go that easily, but now at least
she had a reason to fight the powerpuff girls.
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Postby Comic Kitten » Sun May 07, 2006 10:35 pm

Very creative Darkness! I like! ^_^
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Postby Darkness_calls » Sun May 07, 2006 10:47 pm

comic_kitten wrote:Very crative Darkness! I like! ^_^


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Re: (Fanfic) "Leeching the worlds"

Postby Darkness_calls » Mon May 08, 2006 6:23 pm

Meh, I've gotten little more comments, that is good.
Well, update Time.

Next update:





“Bell what are you doing!?” Shad yelled.

“Why are those girls fighting mommy” Bean asked.

Shad blushed a little at the “mommy” statement by Bean, but he didn’t
answer Bean. Berry was sobbing, not liking what the constantly updated
images the computer was showing them. Out of the blue, a text came to
the computer:

<<Warning unknown teleportation in progress>>

“What does it say?” Berry asked, her curiosity besting her.

“I really have to teach you girls to read. It says that somebody is
teleporting” Shad explained.

To prove his word, a white light of mass brilliance filled the room; a
screeching sound cleaved their ears. They held their ears in the hope to
silence most of the highly pitched screech. Then finally the screech
silenced and the light vaporized. In the core of the light, hovered Bop.

“Bop!” Shad, Berry and Bean yelled in surprise.

“Oh… Hi” Bop whispered, her thoughts were in the library

“Where have you been?” Shad asked.

“And what are you holding?” Bean asked

This questioning was too much for Bop, she quickly flew away as fast as
she could. Heading towards the library, it took her some time to reach it,
mostly because she didn’t know the way around yet.

“What was that all about?” Shad asked himself.

“I’ll get her!” Berry yelled with happiness, like this was some kind of new game.
Shad tried to stop her, but she wouldn’t listen and flew after Bop.



In the library sat Tina. Still greatly hurt. She was thinking about
everything she would do when she would get loose. At the same time she
felt some guilt from exploiting the little girl, Bop, like she did. Bop had
been so good to her, but Tina was sick of this place and was ready to do
anything to get free. The library door flung open, shaking the roof a little,
making dust fall down and Bop came in, then she swiftly hovered to Tina.

“So you return” Tina smiled at Bop.

“I met a robot thing and he was angry then he was suddenly happy and
told me to come in and then he gave me remote and a ring” Bop talked to
fast and without breathing, that her sentence became barely understandable.

“Slow down a little, what did he give you?”

“This remote …” Bop gave Tina the one buttoned remote “… and this ring,
he also said something about your dress working 100%”

It worked, oh the joy. I can’t believe my new super armor worked Tina
though and gave a devious smile.

Tina hugged Bop, forgetting all her pain in this happy moment and
whispered in Bop’s ear:

“Thank you, thank you so much”

Bop didn’t know how to act at first, but then decided to hug Tina back.
Tina stood up with much trouble, grabbed the remote and placed the new
ring on one of her fingers.




In a totally different place, a certain battle was occurring. Bell dodged a
blow made from Buttercup and kicked Blossom in the lower leg, forcing
her to the ground. Buttercup tried to kick Bell but was deflected by Bell’s
hand. With a head butt, Bell forced Buttercup to the ground also. Blossom
tried to stand up but Bell’s eye lasers forced her back down.

“Face it you two are too weak”

“But we are three!” Yelled Bubbles and shot a grey beam at Bell.

Bell got cough in the beam, she wasn’t able to move a muscle and then
Bubbles looked quickly in the direction of a tree, sending Bell smashing
into it. The quick movement, made Bubbles beam loose focus, therefore
realizing Bell.

The tree on the fell down, as it broke from the smash given to it. Bell
didn’t stay there long, she jumped up into the air, her vision fixed on
Bubbles like a hawk staring at a pray. That was a mistake. Pink and
Green colored blast hit Bell in the back, beating the air from her lungs.
Bell came crashing down, but that wasn’t enough, Buttercup punched the
ground, sending a bright green wave of destruction towards Bell.

Bell tried to dodge, but was too late and the green wave hit her. She
yelled in pain, as her skin got burned and most of her clothes literally
vaporized. Then Bell heard, with the help of her superhuman hearing, a
faint screech. It sounded so familiar; she looked in the direction of the
sound and noticed the only mountain in the area, or rather at the blast of
white brilliance. It was the same white light as when Bell teleported.

Daddy must have brought her back, then there is no reason for me to stay She though.

This hesitation was exactly what Blossom was waiting for, she dashed
towards Bell and roundhouse kicked her in the head. The force of the
strike nearly made Bell fell unconscious. Bell tried to jump away, to get
enough space to teleport back home. Blossom noticed it and grabbed
Bell’s dress, or what was left off it.

Buttercup gave Bell a strong kick, a loud strap sound came and Bell’s
dress got completely torn off. Bell landed few meters away; this was her
chance to teleport.




In the library, back at Black Eden. Tina pressed the only button on the
remote. A giant nearly invisible pulse wave sprang from it. As the wave
went through the library, Tina could feel the grip of the machine inside of
her loosen. Whatever that wave was, it seemed to have destroyed Zim’s machine.

The wave spread through most of Black Eden, shutting or deactivating
every mechanical thing in its way. The deactivation was only temporary.
Every cluster creature and even every member in the dark star council
became deactivated for a brief moment. The pulse wave was that
powerful. Then the wave hit the super computer room.

“What is going on!?” Berry yelled in fright, as the images of Bell and the
powerpuff girls vanished. The room’s light went off.

“What happened to the light?” Bean asked with a fright in her voice.

“Oh no, Bell” Shad whispered to himself.




Something was wrong Bell wasn’t able to teleport. Instead she lay there in
a complete shock.
What is wrong!? Bell though

Then she heard the laughter of the powerpuff girls. They were laughing at
her, why? Then she noticed. Bell was so unlucky that she decided this
morning to use her teddy bear underwear. She blushed hard; she has
never felt such embarrassment in her life. The laughter died when a
devious voice of a girl suddenly came:

“My, would you look at that”

Barasia and Bulldog appeared from thin air. Not like Bell, when she
teleported but literally from thin air.

Oh no! Was the only thing that Bell could think of.

End of Chapter 13
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Postby Comic Kitten » Tue May 09, 2006 11:22 am

Love it! ^_^
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Postby Frostmork » Tue May 09, 2006 11:26 am

Cool.(I´m short on comments for the moment.)
And I see what´s in Tinas hand finally!
Well,That´s all I got to say.
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Postby Darkness_calls » Tue May 09, 2006 11:42 am

Thak you two for the comment, they mean really much to me ^_^
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Postby confused » Tue May 09, 2006 3:33 pm

I have no idea. I didn't comment earlier 'cuz I don't like to review, but, hey, if it means something to Darkness, I'll do it.
This story rocks! Common, all you fanfic people, move and review!
Urgh, it's too dark around here...
*puts on glasses*
Ah, that's better!
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Re: (Fanfic) "Leeching the worlds"

Postby Darkness_calls » Tue May 09, 2006 6:57 pm

Wow... Thanks :)
But I don't like forced comments, so if you don't want top you don't have too ^_^
It's enought for me to know that my fic is being read.

Added after 3 hours 18 minutes:

Griddles will hate me for this lol
Here is a chapter, I don't think I'll be able to update tomorrow :/ (damn exams)

Next update:




Chapter 14
“Light in the darkness”


In the pitch black corridors of Black Eden, a flicker of light moved. Light
footsteps seemed to follow the light, the once full of life corridor, which
the light was moving in, was completely silence, not counting the echoing
footsteps. The light suddenly stopped and the footsteps halted.

“Hello, is anybody here!?” Yelled the one holding the light.

It was Samantha; she had been upgrading her mechanical arm when the
pulse wave went through. Now her priced arm was deactivated and
completely useless.

She was only wore a black jacket over her underwear. She had taken
almost all her clothes off when upgrading her mechanical hand and she
had no time crawling for her clothes in the darkness. She looked around,
using the flashlight she held in her human arm. Nothing, so she ran on.
After awhile she yelled again:

“Hello, is anybody here!?”

But this time there was an answer, cute voice of a little scared girl:
“Sam … is that you!?”

Samantha didn’t get the chance to answer back because an amber
colored beam shot her way to Samantha and glomped her.

“I’m so scared” Bop said to Samantha.

“Good I found you, now can you please let go of me?”

Bop let go of her. Samantha wondered why she was alone then she
noticed the movement of a shadowy figure. This sudden movement of the
shadow, startled Samantha.

“Who is there!?” She yelled

“Only me, armless one” Said Tina and walked into the light, which shone
from the flashlight.

“This is your fault isn’t it!?” Yelled Samantha, though she didn’t really
suspect Tina of being capable of doing it. But to her outmost surprise was
the single word Tina gave her:

“Yes” Tina simply said with a devious smile.

“I knew you couldn’t be trusted, I shall strike you down!” Samantha roared.

“With the remote or your broken hand” Tina teased.

Samantha bit her lower lip. Not knowing finding the words to answer back.
Samantha instead gave a loud battle roar and jumped at Tina, who
simply sidestepped and shot two non lethal orange power beams in
Samantha’s back, sending her crashing to the wall.

“Stop it!” Bop yelled. Tears starting to form in her eye socket.


Then another light entered the hallway. This light was a simple fire on top
of Dr.X’s head. Of course the fire didn’t hurt Dr.X. With him were Shad,
Berry and Bean. He noticed Samantha rubbing her head in, trying to stand up.

“Let me guess, you did this?” Dr.X asked Tina. She gave him a simple nod.

A blue energy began to form in Tina’s hand and she looked at Dr.X with much hatred.




In a sunny playground a furious battle had began. Bulldog was single
handedly taking on Blossom. While Barasia fought Bubbles and Buttercup
with much ease. Barasia had always been powerful, but now with powers
gained from Boogieman, she was extremely powerful. Bell just sat there
in complete shock.


Blossom threw a punch at Bulldog’s face, but he grabbed it fit his palm
and kicked with great force under the hand he held, displacing Blossom’s
shoulder. She yelled in pain, but Bulldog wasn’t programmed to feel pity
or sorrow, so naturally he ignored her yells and punched her under the
jaw. Blossom’s jaw banged together, forcing blood from the teeth
roothold. She flew few meters away from Bulldog and crashed into the ground.


Bubbles crashed into a tree, breaking it apart. Barasia, now turned to
deflect Buttercup’s kick with her fist. Buttercup’s fist became green as she
slammed her hand towards Barasia. A large plasma rifle sprang forth
from Barasia’s hand and shot greenish electro magnetically active cloud
right into Buttercup’s chest. Blasting her few meters away. Buttercup
landed on her feet right next to Bubbles.

“I have something that can defeat her, Buttercup do you think you stall
her while I get it?” Bubbles asked Buttercup.

“Of course I can” Buttercup answered quickly, not liking the fact that she
might not be able to win.
Buttercup rushed towards Barasia, while Bubbles snuck away.


Why is Barasia still alive is this Bulldog’s fault? Bell though.
She should have been destroyed, why isn’t she? I destroyed her some time ago


Blossom forced her eyes open when she heard the boy robot growl:
“Die!”

She noticed his body high up in the air; he flew down with great speed,
ready to give the final strike. Blossom had a plan and she hoped that it
would work or her end would be now. She shot two laser beams at
Bulldog; He knew that the lasers weren’t strong enough to hurt him. But
that wasn’t what Blossom was hoping for. The laser hit him and sent him
spinning controlessly; his now well aimed strike was nothing more than a
confusing trip down to earth. Blossom gathered as much energy as she
dared, when Bulldog finally came close enough she kicked with all her
might, releasing all her stored up energy.

The time seemed to slow down in Bulldog’s mind, his short life flashed
before him; an image of his last wish came up. The image showed him
kissing Barasia, that was his last wish.
How much of me is human he though, then the inevitable kick hit
him with full force right in the chest. He flew almost hundred meters away.
And lay there motionlessly, his chest was completely crushed. Soon the
programming chip in his head would shut down.


Barasia slammed Buttercup to the ground as she rushed towards her. Her
fingernails suddenly grew. They became some sort of blades, ready to
slice Buttercup’s head. Then she heard a horrible sound of crunching
metal. She stared with fright when she saw Bulldog take the hit. She let
Buttercup and ran towards Bulldog’s motionless body.
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Re: (Fanfic) "Leeching the worlds"

Postby Darkness_calls » Thu May 11, 2006 1:19 pm

Drama and fighting :shock:
Another chapter ^_^
I hope Shad and Griddels (if he would ever read it) won't hate me for this lol

Next update:




Tina threw her hand forward, much like she was punching the air with her
open palm. A whip like bluish energy rushed from her five fingertips with
a loud noise. It zapped through the air and made its way towards Dr.X. He
barely dodged by jumping away. The unleashed energy hit the concrete
wall. Blasting a fine layer of tiny rocks at the group.

“Why are you doing this!?” Bop yelled in fright.

“Because she is evil and really bad” Dr.X explained, while standing up.

“I’m evil?” Tina said, with a fake shock.

“I didn’t know better than it was you that is trying to kill the powerpuff
girls and enslaving humanity” Tina continued, this time just amused.

Bop turned around to face Dr.X, her expression was a simple confusion.
“That is a lie” Berry yelled at Tina and flew towards her really quickly.

Berry punched in Tina’s direction. Tina wasn’t ready for her, so the impact
took them both away from the light and into the darkness. Lot of blasts
were thrown the sounds of punching and kicking filled the air along with
some taunts and war cries. The room, which Berry and Tina were fighting
in, lit up every time they threw energy blasts or beams. Flashing with
aquamarine or bright blue colors. Then a loud bump noise and everything
went quiet.

“What *cough* do you think won?” Samantha asked, finally able to stand up.

“I’ve been analyzing the Creampuffs and have seen that they are
individually stronger then each powerpuff, but that girl or alien, has the
combined power of Bubbles and one of the so called rowdyruff boys”

“How do you know these things?” Asked Samantha, not really caring.

“I have my ways” Was the simple answer he gave her.

The room was still silent, then footsteps. They noticed what seemed to be
red eyes. When it finally came in to the light, they noticed that it was Tina
and she held Berry in one hand. She dropped Berry onto the floor and
the unconscious body fell with a loud slam noise to the ground.

“Berry!” yelled Bean and flew crying towards Tina.

Flying almost blind with tears is never a smart idea. Tina had her eye
laser ready the whole time, hence the red eyes, and shot Bean with it. It
didn’t hurt Bean much but it disturbed her flight path. Tina slammed her
fist, with bluish energy, in Bean’s back while she flew by. The impact
forced Bean into the ground and creating a small crater, as Bean’s small
body hit the ground. She lay there motionless. Samantha gave a battle
cry and tried to hit Tina, but the weight of her deactivated hand hindered
her from doing much. Tina dodged her pathetic punch and roundhouse
kicked Samantha in the head, slamming it into the wall. A small crack
came to the wall and blood streamed down Samantha’s nostrils and mouth.

Samantha fell motionless to the floor, Tina didn’t know if she was knocked
out or dead, neither did she really care.

“Now the guards are down, the leader dies” Tina stared at Dr.X

She ran clenched her fist; ready to give him a deathblow. Dr.X closed his
eyes, knowing there was nothing to be done. He waited for the punch, but
it never came.




Barasia sat on her knees in front of Bulldog’s almost destroyed body, his
life system wouldn’t keep him alive for long and she knew that.

“Bulldog … Don’t die” She whispered, artificial tears forming in her eye socket.

“You’re so perfect. Just like humans but more …” Bulldog stated and smiled.

He had always fascinated the perfectness of her building, but not as much
as he fascinated her in person. Barasia cheeks forms light red patterns,
like human blushing, the programming in her mind made it feel so …
warm, though artificial.

“I … I … wouldn’t even be here if it wouldn’t have been for you”
Bulldog smiled more at that praise.

“I never told you Barasia, but I … I …”
He continued and Barasia said the words with him:
“… Love you”

They both smiled and blushed a little. Then Bulldog moved really fast and
flung his hands around Barasia and kissed her. She repaid the kiss and
held him in her arms. After a while his strength faded and his hands
stopped holding her. She laid him carefully on the ground. He was gone,
the life chip shut down and he stopped working. Barasia didn’t know how
to act. The artificial mind of hers filled her with emotions, she couldn’t
handle. Then in the end she simply cried.


Bell and the powerpuff girls didn’t dare to disturb.
A tall man walked beside them, Bell was the only one that noticed him. He
was dressed in simply silk clothes. Under all the silk was a woolen cloak.
The design of the clothes seemed to focus on maximum movement. He
was in some kind of weird skin boots, light as feathers. In his arm was a
large weapon, a mixture of a spear and an axe, though not like a pike
axe. But Bell didn’t care about this; she was staring at his head. He had
no lower jaw and a worm creature; more like a black leech was swinging
in front of him.

Scarier then his look was the way he spoke. It looked as if the worm was
speaking not him, and the voice sounded like hundred rats scratching an
iron door.

<<<Such sadness over a fallen item>>> The man said.
This statement made something in Barasia snap.




Dr.X opened his eyes, wondering why the punch never came. In front of
him hovered Bop and Tina’s fist stopped an inch from her head.

“Move away Bop, I don’t want you in the way” Tina ordered.

“I won’t move” Bop’s face lit up with childish stubbornness.

“She will kill you if you don’t Bop” Dr.X said.

“No she won’t” Bop said with stubborn voice.

“What makes you think she won’t?” Dr.X asked, he really didn’t know why.

“I saw her when she was helpless and that bug robot was hitting her. She
didn’t look like an evil person then … I know she isn’t evil”

Dr.X then first noticed all the bruises and cuts on Tina. Tina’s hand
shivered and finally she withdrew it. Thanks to all the darkness they two
didn’t notice that Tina was actually crying, Bop really had an impact on her.

“Where the heck is Shad?” Dr.X suddenly asked, worried.

A silent dark laughter echoed through Black Eden, just as every light
source in the base turned on, But not with the usual light, now it was dark red.
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