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Re: DC Fic: (finished)/Untold Tale (new)

Postby Cadaverous » Thu Jul 06, 2006 8:52 pm

....oh jeez...DC, you are so COOL!!!....unless there is someone else with different colored eyes wit ha red cloak hiding his face... ^_^
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Re: DC Fic: (finished)/Untold Tale (new)

Postby Darkness_calls » Thu Jul 06, 2006 9:04 pm

Your welcome Cad :happy:


Oh! and about the unexpected thing... it reminds me of ranma 1/2 lol
there's something i don't understand. The two of them share the same body but how they aren't in the same body when they r talking with the woman who's hearing their story.


Yes, well, you never see into the tube they are currently being held (at real time not the story). And there are two screens, few know how it is done but somehow the ones holding them were able to ...
OK I'm not going to say more ... It will be explained as the story goes one, often it will fill with misteries that you won't get until later ;)
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Postby Shadowed State of Mind » Thu Jul 06, 2006 9:46 pm

GAH! Tis a shame I know little of this Cadaverous(sp?). And I hope you find your office disk soon. Bad grammer and spelling irks me a bit.
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Re: DC Fic: (finished)/Untold Tale (new)

Postby Cadaverous » Fri Jul 07, 2006 7:49 am

check out the comic in my sig, it's not too long and you'll get all the info you need ^_^
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Postby BG07 » Fri Jul 07, 2006 1:13 pm

Yo DC, I come bearing Gifs! (bad play on words :P )

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Since I'm in such a good mood and just in case you feel the need to change your ava to a gif, here you go ^_^
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Re: DC Fic: (finished)/Untold Tale (new)

Postby Tsunade » Fri Jul 07, 2006 4:27 pm

Darkness_calls wrote:
Yes, well, you never see into the tube they are currently being held (at real time not the story). And there are two screens, few know how it is done but somehow the ones holding them were able to ...
OK I'm not going to say more ... It will be explained as the story goes one, often it will fill with misteries that you won't get until later ;)


kk ^_^

woah BG07 i didn't regonize you with that ava/sig. I remember the lee one
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Re: DC Fic: (finished)/Untold Tale (new)

Postby Darkness_calls » Sun Jul 09, 2006 6:57 pm

my ... my ... office disk is borken!
I just brought it back and what happened!
I dropped it!
lot of money wasted there ... now I will have to buy another one (or get it through other means).

Thanks BG07 for the ava's but no, I don't change avatars (haven't changed in years). Thanks anyway ^_^

Blah, I'm going away for half a month on tuesday ... so I won't update for a heck of a long time :P

Next update:



Time passed and Basium got better and better. She had regained most of
her strenght, this poison or whatever it was had certainly had tremendous
effect on her. That red cloaked boy had shown her around his house, well
if you could call it that, it was an old abandoned gym of some sort. The
boy told her that this gym had once been full of life but it got attacked by
monsters and the city never seemed to fix it. During the time Basium
hadon her own, the boy left alot, she trained like crazy. On a short time
she had becomed much better, though her power hadn't raised, her
fighting skills had raised. Basium was wearing a dark brown sleeveless
T-shirt and dark blue jeans. The boy often brought her clothes, but the
clothes didn't seem to fit well since he had to guess her size. Only Basium
knew why she didn't just leave, the boy wasn't holding her there captive
or anything. Others would guess that she was either grateful or she just
wanted to fight him, the second guess would suit her more. The training
was hard, because Basium had to be careful not to oblitirate every
punching bag. WHAM!, Basium used to much strenght and her fist pierced
right through the punching bag.

"That is the third one today" sombody chuckled.

Basium looked over her shoulder to face the boy, he held a medium sized
gray box. He always had new clothes for her stored in a box like this,
either he just put them in the box or her got all her clothes from the same
place. Basium smiled and tried to genltly pull her hand out of the
punching bag, but it didn't budge. She tried again but the result was the
same, her smile vanished as she got annoyed. With a loud hiss the
accidentally ripped the punching bag off the chain. Whoops, she thought.

The boy chuckled again and handed her the box, she took the box and
began walking towards the female locker room. Once there she went
inside closed the door behind her. The boy waited near the door. Few
seconds later, the locker room's door opened up a little and Basium's
head popped out.

"You're joking, right?" She said with a doubtful look.

"At least try it on"

"Uhhh... no"

"Come on, try it"

"Alright, damn it ...." she mumbled.

Her head moved back inside and the door once again closed. Few minutes
passed, she was obviously taking her time.

"You ready!?" she yelled on the other side of the door.

"Show me!" the boy yelled back.

"I will never wear this again you know!"

"Come out here!"

The door slowly opened up and Basium walked out. The boy was
speechless, Basium was dressed in a beautiful dress. The dress was bright
white in color, Y-cut and had a red flower in the middle, right where the
lowest point of the cut came. The top was tight, but the lower part was
free, flowing around her legs, it was long and had beautiful pictures of red
flowers.

"Just ... stunning" The boy slowly said.

Basium didn't like wearing a dress at all, she spun around and the dress
flowed perfectly along with her.

"I am never going to put this back on" She said.

"You say that now, but maybe sometime in the future you will find a
reason to use it"

There was an embarrassing silence, then again the boy spoke:
"You know what day is tomorrow?"

"No" she answered, it was a lie, she knew exactly what day was tomorrow.

"Tomorrow we will see whom is stronger" he had a tint of sadness in his
voice, then out of nowhere the boy turned around and walked towards the
exit. Basium watched after him awhile.

"Tomorrow I will learn your name" she said and walked towards the women locker room.
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Postby dark psyghost » Sun Jul 09, 2006 7:03 pm

Good update DC. I wonder when the 2 kids will be able to talk at the same time.
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Postby BG07 » Sun Jul 09, 2006 7:12 pm

Aww... just when there's about to be a fight you have to go and leave...bummer :unsure: But have fun (where ever it is that you're going) and hurry back so you can update your fic :snoogins:
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Postby Darkness_calls » Sun Jul 09, 2006 7:15 pm

I think I'm going to finish this chaper (tomorrow) before I leave :P

And where I'm going ...
Danmark, Germany, France, Belgium and Spain.
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Postby dark psyghost » Sun Jul 09, 2006 7:19 pm

Make sure your this thread does not break any rules before you leave DC. Cole is going to lock thread that break them.
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Postby BG07 » Sun Jul 09, 2006 7:19 pm

All places that I'll probably never visit... People are so much luckier than I am :'( So have fun
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Re: DC Fic: (finished)/Untold Tale (new)

Postby Cadaverous » Sun Jul 09, 2006 7:33 pm

h w do you know, maybe one day, as for me I'm going to see venice in a couple of weeks ^_^ , I can't wait to see the fight
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Postby BG07 » Sun Jul 09, 2006 7:35 pm

-.- see what I mean... damnit I should be in Austrailia right now... but no, I just had to play football >.< But at least you guys get to see new places...
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Re: DC Fic: (finished)/Untold Tale (new)

Postby Cadaverous » Sun Jul 09, 2006 7:40 pm

why, isn't it summer?
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Postby BG07 » Sun Jul 09, 2006 7:42 pm

Yeah it's summer, it's just that if I would have went, I would have missed too many practices to play football... so I decided not to go
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Re: DC Fic: (finished)/Untold Tale (new)

Postby Cadaverous » Sun Jul 09, 2006 7:44 pm

...you have practices during the summer!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :jawdrop:
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Postby Darkness_calls » Sun Jul 09, 2006 7:45 pm

GUYS!¨
please, this isn't the spam forum.
Please take the discussions elsewhere thank you ^_^
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Re: DC Fic: (finished)/Untold Tale (new)

Postby Cadaverous » Sun Jul 09, 2006 7:53 pm

ooops sorry....uh, nice update and I really really can't wait 'til the next one
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Postby BG07 » Sun Jul 09, 2006 7:56 pm

Yes... It would seem that Cadaverous (in the fic) has a bit of a crush going for Basium. And I just thought of something that might get a few laughs... [spoiler]Like having her turn back into Balnus, if Cadaverous has a crush on her or whatever, he'll totally be like WTF!!!![/spoiler]
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Postby Forse the Deathmaster » Sun Jul 09, 2006 11:54 pm

Yeah! That would be awsome BG07!
And Great update DC!
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Re: DC Fic: (finished)/Untold Tale (new)

Postby Darkness_calls » Mon Jul 10, 2006 12:05 pm

Well thank you everyone ^^
This is my last update for the month (going away tonight).


Next update:



Basium laid on her old yet soft bed, like every night she couldn't fall
asleep. The damn voice in her head wouldn't stop talking. She closed her
eye and the voice came again:

"You"
"win"
"time"
"over"

her eye opened, it was hopeless to fall asleep. So she spent the night, like
always wandering around the gym. The boy never seemed to be here at night.

The hours passed and morning finally came. She changed clothes and ate
(the boy always left her food). Then she walked towards the football field
and there was the boy.

"Shall we get this over with?" He asked, the sudden hostility made Basium
stop in her tracks.

"Sure" she said, her words sounding just as hostile.

Without a warning the boy charged at her, she wasn't ready for such a
quick attack and without any mercy, he sent his knee in her stomach.
Basium fell on her knee from the hard impact, but he span around and hit
Basium again with the same foot, right in her back. She fell flat on the
ground, he jumped into the air and fell down towards her with his fist
ready for a punch. Basium rolled to the right just as the boy's fist hit the
hard floor. Basium used the oppertunity and kicked the boy in the calf,
with this strike he easily fell on his knees, Basium was stood up really fast
and threw her fist towards his face. But he was quick enough to cross his
armes to deflect the impact, the impact made the boy bounce for about
hundret feet, never did he dream that Basium was so strong. He hadn't
even finished standing up before Basium was at his face, she threw few
punches at him, which he barely dodged, then finished with a backflip
kick. Her shoe made contact with his jaw and sent him flying into the air.

She can finish me with an energy shot! the boy thought, worries
overruling his mind. But she never did.
Could it be that ... the boy smiled, as he made this tiny discovery.

The blood vessels in the boy's arm froze up, his blackish gloves became
half transparent and light blue in color. Out of his know frozen hands,
grew hundreds of small ice needles. He threw his arm, like he was
throwing a baseball, towards Basium. Those hundred ice needles instantly
broke off his hand and flew at her with great speed.

Even the weakest heroes and villains, can use their powers to deflect this
weak attack. But if my suspicions are correct then ...


Basium ran to the left, she used her hands and legs to slap/grab/punch
her way through the ice neelde barrage. Her clothes were cut, small
wounds were made and needled hit her head on. The boy landed few
feets away from her.

"I knew it, you don't have any powers at all!" The boy spoke.

Basium glared at him, hatred in her eyes. She yelled as she charged at
him. The boy used his frozen arm and hit the ground, instantly the whole
football field became like a skating rink. Basium totally lost her balance,
as she now slided towards the boy. He smiled, as he swiftly span around
and kicked Basium in the stomach, she flew few feets away and landed on
the icy floor, from there she slided along until she hit the hard wall. While
she had been sliding, the boy had been gathering flare sparks in his
unfrozen arm. The flares finally stopped gathering when his unfrozen arm
had lit up with bright fire. He yelled, as he released a flaming sphere,
aimed at Basium. She had just stood up, only to see the flaming sphere
hit her, full force. The sphere pinned her againsted the wall and burned up
her clothes and made heavy burn wounds. The fire finally vaporized,
barely standing up againsted was Basium, her jacket had burnt off, most
of her T-shirt had also been burnt off and her pants were hanging on her,
holes everywhere in it.

Is he accually trying to ... kill me!? she thought.

The pain in her face vanished. The boy literally stepped back when he saw
the killer face she had on now. Basium punched the wall with her left
arm, a small section of the wall broke down. She grabbed a sharp iron
pole (most walls have iron/metal poles when they are being raised) and
ran towards him, the fireball had melted a clean way through the ice field
. She was only about ten feets away from the boy before shot another
fireball at her, but she instanly jumped left and she pierced the sharp iron
pole into the frozen ground. Then she used it to spin around and deliver a
kick into the boy's chest, he flew away and crashed into the hard
concrete wall. Basium landed on the ground and pulled the pole out, then
she threw it at the boy. Splurt! it pierced him through the shoulder, he
yelled from the unsuspected pain and grabbed the pole with his frozen
arm, mistake. The pole froze and now he was completely pinned. Basium
was skidding towards him, ready to deal the death blow. She was about
six feets away from the boy, when her dropped a fire seed into the
ground. The fire on his hand vanished and the seed instantly melted all
the ice away. With the sudden disappearance of the ice, Basium tripped
and landed on the boy, whom was still pinned onto the wall. When people
fall, it is their first instinct to grab everything possible, hoping to stop the
fall and that is what Basium did, she grabbed the boy when she fell on
him. It looked exacly like she was hugging him.

Basium blushed a little when she noticed, but didn't let him go. She felt so
tired and she could easily fall asleep where she stood.

"I think we both went ... quite overboard ..." He whispered.

They both laughed a little. Before he said what she had wanted to hear for two weeks:
"My name is Cadaverous"

She smiled and looked him in the eyes.
"I think we need to get you new clothes"
They both laughed their heart out.


"That was really touching"
"Blah, my brother enjoys the times where I'm ..."
"A sissy?" he chuckled.
"vulnerable!" she yelled with anger.
Lilly smiled, Basium's and Balanus relationship reminded her of her own
relationship with her brother. Something ranged within Lilly's purse.
"Well my time is up"
"Can we expect you tomorrow?"
"Of course"
Lilly stood up and left.
"Thank you for listening" he said when the metal door closed again.

End of chapter 3
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Postby BG07 » Mon Jul 10, 2006 12:19 pm

Awesome fight, Bravo DC... Have a great time in Europe, and please try and hurry back ;) (JK) but seriously, a great chapter and I hope you'll continue when you get back.
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Postby dark psyghost » Mon Jul 10, 2006 12:25 pm

That fighting scene was awesome DC.
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Postby Emerald Emblem » Mon Jul 10, 2006 12:36 pm

That was the best fight scene I've read
man your good at those
enjoy your trip
hope you update soon as you get back
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