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Postby BG07 » Sun Jul 02, 2006 7:28 pm

No worries... for some reason there's a few people who decided not to update today... my reason was your Ava. Elfen Lied rocks my world so hard :snoogins: I saw the entire series today for the first time :shock: it was so good
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Re: DC Fic: (finished)/Untold Tale (new)

Postby Darkness_calls » Mon Jul 03, 2006 11:43 am

I know BG07, Elfen Lied ... OWNS!

Again I had to write this chapter without any "spelling and Grammar checking" :(
the chapter is almost finished.
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Pictures and lot of them. Pictures of children around his age. What is the
meaning of all this!? The room was simple. Small room, the walls filled
with those pictures and many tables. There were glass flasks, different in
size and shape, scattered around the tables. Balanus looked at some of
the pictures, on one of the pictures was a cute looking girl, with copper
colored hair, pink eyes and a weird looking pink uniform and a large red
bow to hold her long hair. On another picture was a boy, he had silver
hair and eyes, he was wearing a blackish outfit and had a hat firmly
placed on his head. Balanus wondered about this, when suddenly he
heard a voice:

"All these people are, just like you, freaks of nature. Something this
organization wants to dispose of"

Slowly Balanus turned around. The owner of the voice was dressed like
every other scientist he had seen. The man had thick black hair, which fell
down onto his face, and dark brown eyes.

"Who ... are you?"

"You may call me Utonium"

"Why ... these pictures?"

"Since I will dispose of you, I think it is alright to tell you"
Utonium waved his hand around, pointing at all those pictures.

"These are all people with unnatrual power, some of them are so called
heroes, while others are villains. But they really are dangerous freaks.
This organization created you, in order to kill them all. But you are a total
failiure. You don't have any powers ... or do you?"

With his question, he pointed ot the ripped door behind him. Balanus didn't
hear his question, he was lost in his own thoughts.

Why would they want to kill them? Why me? Why create me, ain't I also a freak?

Utonium cuckled and wakled towards Balanus. His heavy steps echoed in
Balanus head and snapped him back to reality.

"Get away from me!" yelled Balanus and pointed at Utonium

"Or what ... you'll cry me to death?" asked Utonium and began to laugh.

Balanus yelled and threw his fist at Utonium, but the white dresseed
scientist simply grabbed his fist with his open palm. Utonium lifted his free
hand and hit Balanus square on the face. Balanus gave a low yelp, as he
fell down on the hard metal floor. Sowly Balanus stood back up to face
Utonium. Utonium smiled most deviously, as he drew a gun from within
his white coat.

"And now you die" Said Utonium and fired his gun at Balanus.

Out of fright, Balanus placed his hands crossed in front of him, like he
could stop the bullet and he closed his eyes. The impact never came,
instead he heard a ricochet in front of him. Slowly Balanus opened his
eyes, he gasped as he saw a faint rainbow colored wall in front of him. He
could see the shodowed image of Utonium.

"What the hell is this you freak!"

Balanus had no idea how he did it, he just did. The shield faded away, as
Balanus moved his hands. He had powers, after all this time he accually
had powers. Utonium jumped at him and struck Balanus with the pistol. A
small cut was made on his cheek and blood gusted out of the small
wound. Balanus fell backwards onto a table, quickly he picked up one of
these flasks and threw it at Utonium, but he simply dodged it. Again
Utonium jumped at Balanus and this time he took him down and held him
that way.

"I wonder you little freak, why you don't want to open your other eye..."

Utonium grabbed Balanus eyepatch and moved it. Now the Eyepatch was
on his left eye, but still he didn't want to open his right eye.

"Common ... open your eye!" Growled Utonium.

"No, I don't want to"

"Why not?"

"I ... I don't really know. There is just this warning in my head"

"... Then I will make you open it" Chuckled Utonium and fired a single
round into Balanus shoulder.

Blanus yelled with all his might and his right eye flung open.
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Postby Forse the Deathmaster » Mon Jul 03, 2006 11:49 am

Something tells me that this Utonium guy is about to have a shocking experiance!

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Postby dark psyghost » Mon Jul 03, 2006 11:50 am

Great update DC. i wonder what his eye is going to do.
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Postby Darkness_calls » Mon Jul 03, 2006 12:01 pm

I promise you all ... you will NOT be able to guess it (because it is quite the WTF! lol)
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Postby BG07 » Mon Jul 03, 2006 12:10 pm

Hmm... I like where this is going... something bad is going to happen to that Utonium arse... yay!
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Postby Emerald Emblem » Mon Jul 03, 2006 12:21 pm

Wow, Utoniums a real jerk
he will probably be frightened so much he'll become the one we know by what the eye does

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Re: DC Fic: (finished)/Untold Tale (new)

Postby Darkness_calls » Tue Jul 04, 2006 8:16 am

Thank you guys!
Now ... here is the WTF! moment lol

Again I had to write this chapter without any "spelling and Grammar checking" :(

Next update:



Balanus began to shake, Utonium could barely hold him down. Utonium
was really freaked out, not because Balanus was shaking like crazy, but
because his eye color ... it was silver. Everything about Balanus began to
change. He became slimmer, his body lining softer, eyes larger, lips
thicker, hair much longer, hands and legs smaller.

"Y...You... are a ... girl!" Utonium whispered, while trying to understand
how this was even possible.

"That's right and I'm finally free" Yelled the girl and hit Utonium in the
chest with her palm.

Utonium was blown off her, he was sent flying into the wall above the
ripped door. Small cracks appeared where he hit the wall, that girl was
obnoxiously strong. Utonium tried to stand up, but he was way to sore,
the punch had been a little to strong for him to withstand. The girl walked
towards him, Utonium tried to aim his gun on her, but she simply kicked
the weapon off his hand. She grabbed his collar and without any trouble
she lifted Utonium off the ground.

"I wan't you to remember my name in your next life"
She smiled most deviously before she said her name.

"Basium"
She threw Utonium into the air, then she jumped after him and did a
aerial kick. Utonium came tumbling down and crashed into few tables, he
broke the tables and all of the the flasks. He lay on the floor, most likely
dead because no normal human could withstand a kick he had just
received. Basium giggled as she walked out of the room, she was going to
pay a visit to Mr.B.


"Wait ... so that means... you two..."

"Share the same body, yes"
"That is just ..."
"Weird, strange, unbelivable. I know how it sounds, but that's how it is"
"Hey, don't stop talking while I'm in the spotlight!"


The black liquid from the broken flasks, were all over Utonium. Slowly, he
began to change. most noticable was that his sking color was turning
orange in colored.


"Fire!" yelled a security guard.
Five armed guards began to fire at Basium, but she was way too fast,
they never were able to hit her before she came into close range. Bones
were broken, as Basium kicked one of the guards into the wall. She
quickly punched another guard, and sent him flying into the other,
therefore taking them all down. They hadn't even fully stood up before
Basium was already in the air, she spun around and hit her heel into the
neck of the largest guard. A loud snap made it clear that that paticular
man would never stand up again. The other three guards fled, but Basium
was already blocking their escape route. Basium's elbow made contact
with the stomach of the smallest guard. Bang, one of the two remaining
guards fired at Basium, she was barely able to dodge and a small cut
formed on her cheek. With a yell of anger Basium punched that paticular
man down and before he even landed on the floor, she grabbed his leg
and flung him over her self and he crashed into the floor with a horrific
breaking noise. One more, Basium looked at the last guard with total fury,
he was so scared, his legs were shaking. She walked towards him, he fell
down on the foor and pleaded for mercy. Basium only smiled and raised
her fist. She threw her hand downwards, aiming at his head. But the
impact newer came, she couldn't hit him, not that she didn't want to but
she just couln't, something was stopping her.

"Damn it brother, let me finish him" Basium growled, but after awhile she
stopped trying and walked towards Mr.B's room.

Behind Basium, was the security guard. Slowly he picked up his stun gun
and aimed at Basium.
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Postby dark psyghost » Tue Jul 04, 2006 8:20 am

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Postby Forse the Deathmaster » Tue Jul 04, 2006 8:44 am

Wow!
That realy was unexpected!
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Re: DC Fic: (finished)/Untold Tale (new)

Postby Cadaverous » Tue Jul 04, 2006 11:04 am

holy cow....I mean really holy cow!!! I think I know whats going to happen to utonium
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Postby BG07 » Tue Jul 04, 2006 11:38 am

I had a feeling something like that was going to happen... Yay violence! :snoogins:
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Postby Emerald Emblem » Tue Jul 04, 2006 11:43 am

Oh wow, that was so unexpexcted
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Re: DC Fic: (finished)/Untold Tale (new)

Postby Darkness_calls » Wed Jul 05, 2006 10:01 am

YEY!
I was hoping it would be unexpected :P
This is the end of this chapter!

Next update:



The guard shot his stun gun at Basium, two needle like projectiles flew
towards her with great speed. But quicker then the eye Basium turned
around and grabbed both of the neddles in her hand.

"Heh, I knew you couln't be trusted you stupid thing" Basium chuckled.

The guard smiled, as he pressed a button on his gun. thousands volts of
electricity hit her with full force, the electricity came out of the two
needles, which Basium so unluckily held in her hand.


"Why would you hold the very thing that makes the stun gun, in your hand?"

"Hey look here you st..."
"You musn't forget that we were just newly created, we had no idea how stun gun operated"
"Of course, excuse me and continue"


Basium yelled in agony and fell on her knees. She quickly dropped the
needles, but the security guard had already picked up the stun gun of his
fallen comrade and shot her with it. Basium was too hurt to do anything
about it, the needles hit her in the chest and again thousands of electricity
zapped her. She fell on her back and tried to struggle, but she couldn't,
her muscles just wouldn't react. The guard stopped the electricity. Basium
lay on her back, smoke raising from her and tears running down her
perfect cheeks. Basium sobbed, as she tried to move but like before her
muscles wouldn't react.


"Why are you under lining the point that I was crying?" Basium's anger is
easily heard.


The guard smiled and walked towards Basium.
"Well look at the little bitch now, not so tough" he hissed the last words
and kicked her in the side.

Basium could feel the hatered in that kick, she slowly raised her fist. But
the guard kicked her hand, he sat on her and pinned her down.

"You aren't worthy of that sign!" growled the guard and ripped the BB sign
off her jacket.

Basium, with her wild and crazy personality just simply spat in the guard's
face. If one would focus on the guard's face then one could notice that
something snapped.

"You damn whore!" he guard yelled and let punches rain on her.

"That is enough" Though Basium was almost unconscious she could still
regonzie Mr.B's emotionless voice.

"Yes sir!" said the guard with upmost honor and stood up.

"Too bad I realized this ones potential when it was too late" said Mr.B and
gave a loud sigh.

"Do you want me to finish her?"

"Her?"

there was some silence and then out of nowhere Mr.B began to laugh like crazy.
"Now I understand everything, he ... she is more of a failiure then I could
ever guess. Guard!"

"Yes sir!?"

"Don't kill ... it. But I want you to dump it somewhere, in another city"

"Yes sir ... but what if she..."

"Here just inject it with this" Mr.B handed the guard a small syringe.

"Yes sir" said the guard. Basium could feel someone lift her off the ground
and carry her away. Her vision was way to blurry to see but she guessed
it was the guard that carried her. Few minutes later, she felt like she was
placed inside something ... cosy like leather seet or something. The
guard, which she guessed it was, strapped her down. She could hear him
whisper "seatbelt" and then she fell out of this universe.


With a heavy bump Basium woke up again, her vision was fully restored
and she felt control over her body again. But unluckily for her, the guard
noticed it also. he stung her with something sharp, she suddenly felt really
cold and her she lost all control over her body again. Whatever the guard
did, she was completely paralized. She vehicle they were on finally
stopped, Basium saw that they were in a dark alley. The guard left the
vehicle and came on her side of it. He opened the door and removed the
strappings.

"I hope you die, bitch" hissed the guard and literally threw her out. She
landed on the dirty and wet side walk with a heavy bump noise. She could
see the vehicle leave. Slowly the poison or whatever he injected her with,
reached her mind and she fell unconscious.


"Wow, this is rather sad"
"And there is much left to be told"
"Good, I'd love to hear more. But for today my time is over" Said Lilly and stood up.
"And when can we expect you again?"
"Tomorrow" smiled Lilly and walked out of the room.

End of Chapter 2
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Postby Emerald Emblem » Wed Jul 05, 2006 10:08 am

Cool update DC
I'm commentless right now so forgive me for that
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Postby BG07 » Wed Jul 05, 2006 10:10 am

Aww... she ... er rather they got thrown out like trash, it probably wasn't a good idea to leave them alive... I'm expecting much violence :snoogins:
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Re: DC Fic: (finished)/Untold Tale (new)

Postby Cadaverous » Wed Jul 05, 2006 10:13 am

nice update, I can't wait for more
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Postby dark psyghost » Wed Jul 05, 2006 10:13 am

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Postby Comic Kitten » Thu Jul 06, 2006 12:41 pm

Not much to say here but... AWESOME! Keep it up! ^_^
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Re: DC Fic: (finished)/Untold Tale (new)

Postby Darkness_calls » Thu Jul 06, 2006 7:22 pm

Thanks guys ... and girl :P
I once told you all that I would include a lot of characters and here comes the first one!
Guess who it is (I won't give credits until his name is said ;))

bleh, I haven't found my office disk yet -.-"

Next update:



Chapter 3
"The caretaker"


The heavy iron door opened up. A young woman sat down in front of the
wooden table, facing the captive's tube nad screen once again. Her face
has lid up with excitement, she couldn't have stopped thinking about their
story. It had this unfamiliar impact on her.


"So, you have returned"

"Yes I have and I've been dieing to hear more"
"I probably will die if I have to hear more"
"Excuse my sister, she has some things she doesn't like in this little ... story"
"Shall we continue?"
"Where were we ... oh yes"



"I understand"
"You've"
"voice"
"been"
"always"

Nearly unhearable voice echoed in Basium's mind, slowly she regained
consciousness. She expected to feel the hard, cold asphalt road, but
instead Basium felt a soft madress and something warm on top. It felt just
like a bed, she tried to say something but it only came out as
non-understandable mumble. Her sight wasn't fully recovered, but she
couldn't feel her (or rather her "brother's") heavy jacket or sloppy pant
rubbing againsted her skin. She could feel the tight eye patch hanging on
her left eye. Then a voice spoke, it sounded kind but misterious and it had
the relaxed tone in it:

"I see you've finally awaken"

Basium looked in the direction of the voice's origin, but her eyesigh was
still way too blurry. What the hell was she injected with?
Again Basium tried to speek but just like before her speech couldn't be
understood..

"Rest, I'll be back later. There are things I must get"

Basium said nothing, instead tried to rest. She heard someone walking
away and finally a door being shut. The gentle hands of sleep drew her
into the dreamworld. But just like Balanus, she couldn't rest easily. The
voices, almost un-understandable.


"That one"
"save"
"thank"
"must"
"you"

Basium woke up, she couldn't stand this voice, something about it made
her skin crawl. She noticed that her sight was getting better, she tried to
move, but was only able to move her hands. Probably and hour passed
before Basium was able to fully see and she could even stand up. On the
wall before her was a mirror, she noticed that she was heavily bandaged
and she was only wearing her borther's t-shirt and underpansts. She felt
really stupid for wearing boy's undergarment, it just felt so wrong. A swift
pain made her remember about the bullet wound on her shoulder. She
gently rubbed it, if see would see Utionum ever again, then she would
surely kill him. But he really must have been dead after being exposed to
all that black acid or whatever it was.

Basium tried to walk towards the door, leading out of this room. She
walked like a drunk person do. After quite a walk, she finally reached the
door, though she felt numb, she had enough strenght to open the
seemingly rusty door. It was really bright outside this paticular room and
there was nothing to be seen, it was just really empty.

"Is anybody here?" she asked with a sore voice.

Her words echoed in the eompty hallway, she walked along with the
hallway, hoping to find someone.

"You are up and running I see" came a voice behind her, it was the same
as the one whom spoke to her in the room.

Basium turned around to face the owner, It was a muscular boy, at least
older than ten but younger then fifthteen. He was dressed in somekind of
dark blue outfit. A long thick red cloak hung on him, a large hood covered
his head and hid his face. His eyes shone from the darkness inside the
hood, strangly his eye colors were red and blue. In his hands, he held two
weird shaped boxes, on them stood "Shang Hai restaurant".

"what ... who are you" asked Basium, though her voice was really sore,
the suprised tone of her voice could still be heard.

"Who I am, is not something I will give you at this point"

Basium looked pissed at his answer, she straightened herself and threatened:
"I'll just beat the answer out of you!"

Though Basium couldn't see his face, she could have sworn that he was
smiling. With a chuckle, the boy answered, not angry but rather amused:
"You are no match for me in your current state"

"Give me two weeks and I'll be ready to kick your ass" Basium answered quickly.

"Alright"

"What ... ?" She hadn't expected that

"I accept your challenge, I'll allow you to stay here and rest. And when
the time is ready ... We'll fight"

Basium smiled, this is her kind of guy.

"You want chinese?" Said the misterious boy and lifted the two boxes.

"... What is "chinese" ?" Basium asked, quite embarrassed.

The boy laught and said with most jolly voice:
"I think this will be really fun"
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Postby dark psyghost » Thu Jul 06, 2006 7:30 pm

Good update DC. Is the boy in the red cloak who i think it is?
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Postby BG07 » Thu Jul 06, 2006 7:49 pm

And so our favorite master of fire and ice makes an appearance, great job DC
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Postby Tsunade » Thu Jul 06, 2006 8:25 pm

pink eyes and a weird looking pink uniform and a large red
bow to hold her long hair

that would be blossom

"These are all people with unnatrual power, some of them are so called
heroes, while others are villains. But they really are dangerous freaks.
This organization created you, in order to kill them all


saaayy whaaaat?!? and that utomium is the utonium i know?

And y finished the other fic!!! I haven't finish reading it *cry* but i read the last chapter. so everyone is alive and in this new fic two new ones were created to eliminate the others... I'm thinking of something that will happen on later chapters... Anyway for some reason i didn't like the way it finished. i mean i like the fact that they r alive but the fact that the others think that they r dead? don't like that but eliminating that... I liked it ^_^
oh and i still feel guilty 'cause you have read all my chapters and I haven't finish reading yours *cry*

Oh! and about the unexpected thing... it reminds me of ranma 1/2 lol
there's something i don't understand. The two of them share the same body but how they aren't in the same body when they r talking with the woman who's hearing their story.
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Postby Darkness_calls » Thu Jul 06, 2006 8:30 pm

NO worries Tsunade ^_^

And yeah, that ending was exacly the first thing I decided about the fic lol

With the Blossom, yes you're right.

About Utonium, you'll see ;)

The ending;
yeah ... heheh I found it rather cliché :P
The rest of the story (Leeching the world) is something you could make up on the spot XD

And yeah, this story and the other is not connected
though a familiar race of happy aliens "might" appear ;)
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Postby Tsunade » Thu Jul 06, 2006 8:39 pm

y mean tina and the other 2. if not blame e 'case like i said i haven't finish reading it...

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Tsunade wrote:Oh! and about the unexpected thing... it reminds me of ranma 1/2 lol there's something i don't understand. The two of them share the same body but how they aren't in the same body when they r talking with the woman who's hearing their story.
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