So does anyone else think it's a good enough story?

Corrected. And the answer: No.

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Do you think it's a story Klyptomaniac?

ow. ow. OW. Hey, Nick-what did the five fingers say to the face?
SLAP!

Seriously dude, wake the fuck up. Are you reading what we're saying? Or glancing at it at all? Or even noticing that it exists? For fucks sake! You have not written any stories here. At all. In any sense of the term. I've had kindergarten kids tell me about a snail they almost stepped on, and that was more well told that what you've presented. You ask for advice. We give it. And then, you do FUCK ALL! Apart from ask "Is it a story yet? Is it a story yet?" No it's not a fucking story yet! Stories don't just write themselves if you leave them long enough. You have to do something. You have good ideas, but you're letting them die. Not only that, you're getting yourself hated by being a dumbass. Seriously dude, are you really 21? Pull your fucking finger out of your hole, read what we've written, and change your "stories", because right now, they are nothing more than festering puddles of brainrot on the information superhighway

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He's a fucking troll.

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I'm pretty sure you're one of those fags who seed/troll sites to finally end up pushing some product. I hope you get penile cancer, Dickless.

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Why do you have always involve the Sith Empire with everything?

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hey man what was that show that only gay douchebags like called again? Oh yeah, it's One Piece ~Dave

Here's a better story:

The toon's anvil:
On tonight's A-Team, Blossom has an old friend who's a toon> But her friend has a big problem. A rival toon is trying to drive the friend out of buisness. The rival has already bonked wih a mallet his friend's wife, and tried to steal a anvil.

The rest of the team arrives to help. Bubbles, is tremendously attracted to the handsome man who works with the toon, but he prefers Buttercup. To further complicate matters the team is being chased by the IRS.

The A-Team has a fight with the rival toon. Buttercup says, "girl power". Blossom throws two guys through a window. Bubbles gets a black eye and Buttercup dosen't even break a sweat.

But the A-Team is captured when the rival's boss, Sith Commander, shows up with twelve guys carrying uzis. The A-Team is locked in a broom closet. Bubbles says, "let's be friends". Hannibal comes up with a plan. They build an armored giant robot out of tinkertoys and odds 'n ends.

The A-Team escapes and goes into Sith Commander's territory, guns a-blazing. "All I wanted was to takeover the world, and that anvil was the key." complain Sith Commander, as the A-Team leaves tied up for the IRS. "Prepare to be stopped" says Blossom. Fini.

This is an "Art Forum", where is the art?

Dude don’t tell me! your one of those Star Wars fans who Dress like Luke or Darth Vader aren’t you? But really, you should take their advice their right it’s not a story YET! But if you take their advice to heart it can grow to be a damn good one aside from all the Star Wars crap. Hell I’d have Bush be eaten by a opee sea killer but that’s just me.so come on dude its good advice don't be a dumb ass take it.

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Fan-Fictions are a form of art, and technically this classifies as a Fan-fic, even though there's still no story

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Mac users edited it out of the Bible, but the eleventh commandment was "Thou shalt get a proper computer, for fuck's sake."

Liberal Arts Quantum Physics: Light's damned fast and not everything is as it seems. Space is funny like that. The end.

Gotcha, anyone know if this will be a strip?

What?

Did you just ask if this was going to be made into a comic?

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What?

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I don't think so.



Could't agree more with you.

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hey man what was that show that only gay douchebags like called again? Oh yeah, it's One Piece ~Dave

I'm good at reading people
like Ninja is an air head

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