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PostPosted: Sat Feb 25, 2006 2:28 am 

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The night was humid when the Galactic Empire Remnant invaded. They have tooken over Washington DC and re-named it New Coruscant with Sith Commander as president. In order to defeat the Empire, the Powerpuff Girls team up with the Darkstar Council. President Bush, Vice President Cheney and Congress flee from New Coruscant to Megaville. To make things worst, a few TIE Bombers have bombed the Baldwins, after that, Bush declares war on the Empire. Meanwhile the 2 cops from Lethal Weapon team up with the Powerpuff Girls. The war lasted for 9 years but the good guys won at the end. And so once again the day is saved thanks to the Powerpuff Girls, the 2 cops and the Darkstar Council. The End.


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PostPosted: Sat Feb 25, 2006 10:18 am 
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Cool... :what:
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I like how you said, "the 2 cops from Lethal Weapon team up with the Powerpuff Girls," and didn't even mention their names even when Lethal Weapon is in the title. No seriously... Just imagine... "the 2 cops from Lethal Weapon" going up to super-powered (animated) Powerpuff Girls and asking them if they could... TEAM UP.

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Yes, Klyptomaniac.


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PostPosted: Sat Feb 25, 2006 6:27 pm 
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Yes, Klyptomaniac.


Good. >.<


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Powerpuff Girls Doujinshi 3: Powerpuff Girls vs. the Roborg

The city of Megaville and the rest of the world is under attack by the Roborg, a race of alien reptilian cyborgs. Roborg Starships were blowing up cities, Drois Tripods were hunting humans and Robot Starfighters were swarming all over the sky. To make things worst, the Roborg were the ones that attacked Atomic Betty. Once again the Powerpuff Girls teamed up with the DarkStar Council and fought against the Roborg. The Powerpuff Girls/Darkstar and the Roborg have been fighting for months. It also turned out that it was the Roborg that made Minimandy what she is by using time travel. During the battle Dexter and Blossom finally kissed for the first time. To make things worst, Washington DC has been tooken over again but by the Roborg instead. The climactic battle was over on July 4th and The Powerpuff Girls/Darkstar Council have won. And so once again the day is saved, thanks to the Powerpuff Girls and the Darkstar Council. The End.


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One paragraph is not a story.

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it's a summary.

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PostPosted: Sun Feb 26, 2006 3:48 am 

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I made it longer. Is it a story now?


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Do you know what a paragraph is?

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PostPosted: Sun Feb 26, 2006 3:57 am 

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Yes, but I do not know how long it is.


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Paragraphs have no determined length. You fail.

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I don't get it.


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KEREYST.
A PARAGRAPH.

You will get a MUCH warmer reception here if you a)read the rules and b) take the time to learn to write before flooding us with single-paragraph "fics".

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Here is a good place to start. Fanfiction Writing Basics.

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I made it longer again. Is it a story now?


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What? No! What you have provided us with, both times, is a summary of a story-what you plan to write. Story requires a beginning-where you introduce each character, even if your audience already knows them, and have them meet- a middle- where you introduce a conflict- and an ending- where the conflict is resolved. Throughout the story, you also have character interaction, which can lead to characters discovering their own flaws and then they can grow to become better people.
Have a look at some of the other fanfics on these forums. See how they have been written, and take this on. Then plan out the story on paper-write drafts. You have some goos ideas, but jumping in the deep end like this is not the way to do it. I personally have millions of ideas for Fanfics and original stories everyday, but I don't think I've ever put more than one up, because they haven't been taken to the point where they are worth reading. I think you should do some waiting as well.

also, tooken is not a word.

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I agree- You need TONS more detail and TONS more everything TT TT

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@Jay

That set-up is usually for classical/traditional tragedy.

I dislike it because it would usally only include one twist, that one being the climax.

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Well, larger books tend to have one BIG pyramid that encompasses the whole story but as you go up, it's usually told with many more smaller pyramids. If that explanation makes sense to you at all... um, meh.

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Bob, let's worry about him understanding the pyramid of action at ALL before we worry about his stories being *interesting*.

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