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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Tuor » Thu Jan 16, 2014 4:25 am

I think that's only natural, but you're writing looks pretty great to me!
"Suddenly Frodo noticed that a strange-looking weather-beaten man, sitting in the shadows near the wall, was also listening intently to the hobbit-talk. He had a tall tankard in front of him, and was smoking a long-stemmed pipe curiously carved. His legs were stretched out before him, showing high boots of supple leather that fitted him well, but had seen much wear and were now caked with mud. A travel-stained cloak of heavy dark-green cloth was drawn close about him, and in spite of the heat of the room he wore a hood that overshadowed his face; but the gleam of his eyes could be seen as he watched the hobbits."
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Comic Kitten » Thu Jan 16, 2014 4:37 am

Thank you so much!!! I feel like finishing it is so much harder than I thought... procrastination and low confidence keep getting in the way. It's a crazy battle in my mind!
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Tenshi Nova » Thu Jan 16, 2014 6:09 am

Imo, when someone leaves a book with a cliffhanger, the readers have to really want to know about the characters.
If people like a character, any of the characters enough, they will look for more.

Other than that, a 'sad' happy ending usually does well. A happy ending that everyone knew was coming, and willingly accepting to, but they tried to deny it every step of the way. Take the Magic Tree House as an example, it's a children's book, but the way it's done expresses what I'm talking about. The reader knows that they have to return at the end, but the entire time they want them to stay in that world so far beyond their reach.

Or Harry Potter, everyone was thinking that Harry would win, but the little twists that made people doubt for split seconds at a time is what dragged people in. I'm not a big Game of Thrones fan, I haven't even read the series, but the show abuses this a lot. They make sure you know something is going to happen, then they change your mind for a split second. Before the person has a chance to realize they've been given false hope, it happens!    Take Jamie's hand. They made sure people thought that his hand was going to be cut off. They suddenly changed pace for a second, making everyone think it's not happening, then BAM, it happens. GoT does this a lot throughout the series, and it's done so freaking well.   
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Comic Kitten » Thu Jan 16, 2014 7:15 am

I made it to the middle of the second book before I gave up on his series. His writing style seems to relay a lot of unnecessary information, he has too many supporting characters (which is understandable for his entire plot, but as a reader it's distracting), and the book doesn't even get interesting until the middle to end. It's like a constant building of suspense with a lot of talk but it takes FOREVER to get there!! So I chose to watch the TV show instead, it's much easier!

I totally understand what you mean. The second book is going to end in that way, a happy but sad end that everyone can see coming when it happens. But the first book is really just getting you hooked on the characters and setting up the plot for something catastrophic. At least that's what I'm aiming for :P
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby ULTRADJ » Thu Jan 16, 2014 10:25 pm

Comic Kitten, you're making/have published a book!? Let me read it!
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Tuor » Thu Jan 16, 2014 10:31 pm

Hmm, I wonder where members of this forum would post their writing
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Birdofterror » Thu Jan 16, 2014 10:36 pm

IDK ^_^;

If only we had some kind of subsection of the forum dedicated to works of literature, like books, fanfictions, or poetry.

Oh shucks. I guess a man can dream, eh Tuor?
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Tuor » Thu Jan 16, 2014 10:46 pm

Dare to dream
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Comic Kitten » Fri Jan 17, 2014 4:23 am

ULTRADJ wrote:Comic Kitten, you're making/have published a book!? Let me read it!

Hahaha as those lovely sarcastic guys above me pointed out, I have been posting little snippets from my novel on the lit forum lol

Feel free to check it out! Here's the link.
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Comic Kitten » Fri Jan 17, 2014 4:58 am

Quick question... is anyone in the military? Or has been in the past? I'm trying to write the story with an army, and I'm clueless as how to approach it. It's a tad medieval, but I don't think I want to use king, dukes, counts, barons, knights, and squires... I'm leaning more toward today's use of terminology to the military. But I can't seem to find anything online to help! Or maybe I just haven't been wording my search correctly... either way, does anyone know the order of ranking officials in the military?
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Tuor » Fri Jan 17, 2014 5:04 am

Depends which country you're wanting to go by, US? UK?

US Army

UK Ranks

Although, for a fantasy setting, I'd find modern ranking kind of strange/out of place, personally
"Suddenly Frodo noticed that a strange-looking weather-beaten man, sitting in the shadows near the wall, was also listening intently to the hobbit-talk. He had a tall tankard in front of him, and was smoking a long-stemmed pipe curiously carved. His legs were stretched out before him, showing high boots of supple leather that fitted him well, but had seen much wear and were now caked with mud. A travel-stained cloak of heavy dark-green cloth was drawn close about him, and in spite of the heat of the room he wore a hood that overshadowed his face; but the gleam of his eyes could be seen as he watched the hobbits."
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Comic Kitten » Fri Jan 17, 2014 5:09 am

Tuor wrote:Depends which country you're wanting to go by, US? UK?

US Army

UK Ranks

Although, for a fantasy setting, I'd find modern ranking kind of strange/out of place, personally

Thank you so much!! I think I want to have a slight mixture of the two, kind of like in Avatar: The Last Airbender. But I'm still in the rough draft phase, so when I go through the editing process I'll decide for sure then. But it's always nice to do some planning ahead of time :)
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Q.U. » Fri Jan 17, 2014 6:32 pm

The military these days mostly uses a 3+1 system. Whereby each unit is made of 3 equal members and one higher ranked one who commands them. Then 3 of the higher ranked guys are all under one guy who is ranked higher still, and so on.
Look at the "Chain of command" box on the right of this page if you're trying to find rank names that will fit to the numbers of soldiers you are trying to describe. And the box on the right of this page will give you some extra names for navy and air force.
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Blood Lord » Fri Jan 17, 2014 7:45 pm

*looks at last posts for the Section

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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Tuor » Fri Jan 17, 2014 7:47 pm

I know right? Like the lit forum was her scratching post
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Comic Kitten » Sat Jan 18, 2014 3:31 am

Thanks QU, that's really helpful!

And sometimes a comic kitten just needs a scratching post....
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Comic Kitten » Sat Jan 18, 2014 6:08 am

On a side note, I'm on Grooveshark listening to a bunch of intense movie soundtracks (and even some Runescape background soundtracks for kicks) to help move this writing along... I'm on the final three chapters :)
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Sigment » Sat Jan 18, 2014 1:17 pm

Yay! Someone else that uses Grooveshark. I usually listen to game and anime OSTs there.
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Tenshi Nova » Sat Jan 18, 2014 1:40 pm

My grooveshark is a cluster of random songs from random genres :3
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Havoc » Sat Jan 18, 2014 8:36 pm

What is this "Grooveshark" in which you speak of?
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Tenshi Nova » Sat Jan 18, 2014 8:41 pm

http://grooveshark.com/
Look up songs, create a playlist. They also have custom radio, but I don't use it often.
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Comic Kitten » Sun Jan 19, 2014 3:14 am

It's sooo convenient, and it's not blocked in China! I have a writing playlist, a singing playlist, a country playlist, a metal playlist, and so on. It's so great, I can't wait to use it during school!
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Havoc » Mon Jan 20, 2014 2:57 am

This Grooveshark website is kinda neat. Can you download from it too?
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Sigment » Mon Jan 20, 2014 3:16 am

Yes, but I think you may have to pay for that. I usually just stream my music.
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Havoc » Mon Jan 20, 2014 3:21 am

Where do you usually get your tunes from? Because I sure could use some new music on my little 2GB MP3 player.
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