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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Birdofterror » Fri Dec 06, 2013 8:01 pm

Tuor wrote:
Birdofterror wrote:But if you gotta get the creative juices flowing, try recreating the moments that happen when you suddenly get the urge to write.

So get drunk, gotcha
I'm actually not going to joke, go for it, haha.

Also, Tenshi, that's kind of... touching. I constantly reminisce over my earlier ideas in life and how they morphed or simply vanished from who I am now.

I wonder if I were to just sit back and remember all of the things I've ever created... what will I remember?
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Tuor » Fri Dec 06, 2013 8:02 pm

I'm not either, that's when I've written most of the stuff I've written the past 5 years
"Suddenly Frodo noticed that a strange-looking weather-beaten man, sitting in the shadows near the wall, was also listening intently to the hobbit-talk. He had a tall tankard in front of him, and was smoking a long-stemmed pipe curiously carved. His legs were stretched out before him, showing high boots of supple leather that fitted him well, but had seen much wear and were now caked with mud. A travel-stained cloak of heavy dark-green cloth was drawn close about him, and in spite of the heat of the room he wore a hood that overshadowed his face; but the gleam of his eyes could be seen as he watched the hobbits."
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Krest » Sat Dec 07, 2013 4:42 am

The Fakku community tends to think the majority of works with the "random" tag were made when the creators were high. Thus, "I want what you're on."

Alcohol and drugs are actually really good for coming up with ideas... x.x

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The first character I ever imagined was called Lyfin. He was a citizen of Atlantis (the supercontinent not the planet), was involved with its destruction, was reborn when his universe broke from its multiverse and formed its own multiverse, became a god of that new multiverse, and eventually met my second character, Rou...who was one of many heroes in about twenty or so SciFantasy stories across an entire universe. The two ended up teaming up to fight Nonexistence itself - y'know, Primordial Chaos...

Because Mary Sues are awesome.

I never once proclaimed that I was them, though - interesting, right?

Now I have a third character, but... She's not fully developed yet :P So I'm not going to mention her xD Especially, since she's also my online identity 0.0 My main one, not this one...

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Whenever I need to imagine, I just imagine an invisible sword, turn on some music, and start fighting thin air...until I make enemies, until I become another person, until the entire world reforms and a story is made... That's how I do.
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Birdofterror » Sun Dec 08, 2013 6:06 am

The Krest wrote:Whenever I need to imagine, I just imagine an invisible sword, turn on some music, and start fighting thin air...until I make enemies, until I become another person, until the entire world reforms and a story is made... That's how I do.
This is very embarrassing to admit, but I kind of do this, haha.

I make sure to do it in private. :roll:

I remembered one of my oldest stories. It was called "The Beams." Basically, a hyper advanced race of monkey people (Who are basically just humans but taller and with more hair) that vaguely resemble Bigfoot invade the world and enslave the humans.

Kind of like Planet of the Apes but with a shit ton more cyber punk monkeys. It was pretty funny to my 10 year old mind.
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Q.U. » Sat Dec 14, 2013 12:33 pm

Birdofterror wrote:
The Krest wrote:Whenever I need to imagine, I just imagine an invisible sword, turn on some music, and start fighting thin air...until I make enemies, until I become another person, until the entire world reforms and a story is made... That's how I do.
This is very embarrassing to admit, but I kind of do this, haha.

Humans are so messed up.


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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Millo » Mon Dec 30, 2013 1:29 am

I used to day dream a lot as a kid so my day dreams have always been really vivid which is good when you want to write a story. I've been working on this Comic/Story called SUPER-DUPER lately. The thing is that I don't dare put it on paper till I've practiced my Drawing skills to the point where i know i can decently draw it all.
Have you tried turn it off and on again?
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Birdofterror » Mon Dec 30, 2013 9:20 am

Super DUPER?

Too much duper, not enough super.
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Millo » Mon Dec 30, 2013 12:14 pm

No Bit not Super DUPER


It's SUPER-DUPER
Have you tried turn it off and on again?
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Hallow Nova » Mon Dec 30, 2013 10:38 pm

Damn. A couple months ago, I sucked at comma placement. In an online assessment I just took, I got 1 wrong out of 30. I'm so happy. c:
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Havoc » Tue Dec 31, 2013 12:05 am

My typing and grammar skills have greatly improved since I joined this website.
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Tuor » Tue Dec 31, 2013 12:09 am

That is awesome to hear, guys
"Suddenly Frodo noticed that a strange-looking weather-beaten man, sitting in the shadows near the wall, was also listening intently to the hobbit-talk. He had a tall tankard in front of him, and was smoking a long-stemmed pipe curiously carved. His legs were stretched out before him, showing high boots of supple leather that fitted him well, but had seen much wear and were now caked with mud. A travel-stained cloak of heavy dark-green cloth was drawn close about him, and in spite of the heat of the room he wore a hood that overshadowed his face; but the gleam of his eyes could be seen as he watched the hobbits."
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Millo » Tue Dec 31, 2013 12:25 am

I see what you did there,Tuor.
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Tuor » Tue Dec 31, 2013 12:32 am

Keen eye, Millo.
"Suddenly Frodo noticed that a strange-looking weather-beaten man, sitting in the shadows near the wall, was also listening intently to the hobbit-talk. He had a tall tankard in front of him, and was smoking a long-stemmed pipe curiously carved. His legs were stretched out before him, showing high boots of supple leather that fitted him well, but had seen much wear and were now caked with mud. A travel-stained cloak of heavy dark-green cloth was drawn close about him, and in spite of the heat of the room he wore a hood that overshadowed his face; but the gleam of his eyes could be seen as he watched the hobbits."
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Guardian » Tue Dec 31, 2013 1:00 am

So I'm looking to be writing some more action scenes in the future, but I'm really unsure in how to correctly write them so the story doesn't bog down. I want to make sure I get the details of the action down, but then it feels like I am describing it way too much. So I edit it and then it feels like it becomes too vague.

So I guess what I'm looking for is what is the happy medium for action scenes with description of events, and what elements are needed to make it gripping and wonderful to read?

EDIT: I guess one-on-one would work, but also some suggestions for larger scale combat. Maybe like two or more main characters taking on a larger group.
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Sig Skellington » Tue Dec 31, 2013 1:04 am

I think some of the stories in here may give you good examples. I just had a fight scene in my latest update. Whether or not it's what you're looking for, I can't say.
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Birdofterror » Tue Dec 31, 2013 2:39 am

Not entirely sure what you're asking for. Help? Tips? Examples?

I mean, my very first fight scene came in my story around chapter 2, since then, I've had at least 2 fight scenes per chapter. Every one of my epilogues end in fire and blood as well. Maybe take a gander if you wish? Or as Sigment said, you can read his recent part. It's not very hard, just don't try to bog it down with fancy words. Fight scenes excel when they are fluid. Keeping track of which character is doing what at what time while never letting up on the action based details until the fight is over. Talking: Optional.
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Thy Obsessive Freak » Tue Dec 31, 2013 10:40 am

Been a while since I gave any art advice, but action and fighting was what I focused on and learned a lot of. One thing to keep in mind is telling the reader only what he wants to know. With things like action and violence, you're more keen on what happens next rather than what that punch was like.

For example, I saw the punch come at me, I couldn't move in time, that it struck across my cheek and tore a gash.

Really that there is just unnessecary information that the reader doesn't care for, just leave it that the he was punched and then saw his one blood on the floorboards as he got up. That there is already telling what happened and the fact blood was spilled, yet he was still able to get back up tells a enough about the sort of damage it did.

Remember you're trying to entertain the reader not see how fancy you can come up with words or tell every detail that happened, boxing commentators would have such an awkward time if this wasn't the case.
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Guardian » Wed Jan 01, 2014 2:01 am

Birdofterror wrote:Not entirely sure what you're asking for. Help? Tips? Examples?

Help and Tips. Like what a teacher would give - an explanation of basics and things to keep in mind, and perhaps a few example to look at.

I've got a quite a few books in the ways of sci-fi and fantasy, so unless its a specific example that would be benifical, I have examples around me. I just don't know how to build one, and looking at one doesn't help completely. It's like wanting to know how to build a house or a fix a old car so you can do one yourself. You're going to be shown or look at plans, techniques, suggestions, material, maybe a few examples of things people have done which could help. You aren't going be given a built house or a fixed car and told "do something like that."

So while the examples are beneficiary and will be used, I am looking for helps and tips - what are the plans, suggests, and materials required to create action scenes? What can I do to make them gripping and exciting, and what sort of things should I avoid?

You all gave good insights, and I will examine your combat scenes, Sigment, to see if I can gleam something from them.
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Tuor » Wed Jan 01, 2014 2:05 am

Also, the talking about the fixing a motor, made me think, that do what you think, and then we can better critique it, BL. So, "SHOW ME YOUR MOVEs"
"Suddenly Frodo noticed that a strange-looking weather-beaten man, sitting in the shadows near the wall, was also listening intently to the hobbit-talk. He had a tall tankard in front of him, and was smoking a long-stemmed pipe curiously carved. His legs were stretched out before him, showing high boots of supple leather that fitted him well, but had seen much wear and were now caked with mud. A travel-stained cloak of heavy dark-green cloth was drawn close about him, and in spite of the heat of the room he wore a hood that overshadowed his face; but the gleam of his eyes could be seen as he watched the hobbits."
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Sig Skellington » Wed Jan 01, 2014 2:23 am

Putting it as simply as I can imagine, writing in general boils down to balancing simplicity with detail, IMO. This feels especially true of fight scenes.
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Guardian » Wed Jan 01, 2014 12:29 pm

Tuor wrote:Also, the talking about the fixing a motor, made me think, that do what you think, and then we can better critique it, BL. So, "SHOW ME YOUR MOVEs"

Hmm. I like this idea, and shall get to it.
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby ULTRADJWEEN » Sun Jan 05, 2014 3:53 pm

Well, I'm new to the forum side of this site and I hope to write a fic for people to enjoy! I like writing stories so people can enjoy and have fun reading. This is also like training for me when I start a career out of doing series.
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Birdofterror » Sun Jan 05, 2014 7:04 pm

Yeah, I've been seeing you post a lot. I would recommend you giving yourself an avatar, it makes it a lot easier for people to personalize you and recognize you at a glance.
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

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This is from the guy with an arrow. c:
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Re: The Writer's Lounge

Postby Birdofterror » Sun Jan 05, 2014 9:08 pm

There are many like it, but this one is mine.

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