Um....I guess I can post my poetry here....Alot of people say I'm good...

My World

In my world, I have friends.
In the world, I don’t.
In my world, I have problems.
In the world, I don’t.
In my world, it is depressing and dark.
In the world, it is bright yet sad.
In my world, I am popular among friends.
In the world, I am not.
In my world, friends cry for me.
In the world, they don’t.
In my world, friends don’t hurt you.
In the world, they do.
My world is now falling apart,
But the world will not be there to catch me.


Yes, I wrote that...What do you think?

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Ah well... it's repetitive, but it does get the point across

I can't really say anything about the contents of your poem since that is something that I can't help you with.

Yeah, you're better then some people, most are like".....I don't get" They aren't much help...

How about another one?

As the snow falls

As I walk into a dark alley,
I feel frightened,
I hug myself close,
I feel warmth even though it’s snowing,
I close me eyes and imagine that you’re here,
I imagine that you come up to me, You hug me close,
You keep me warm,
I feel warmer every step I take,
I open my eyes to find that I’m floating,
I turn around to find him there,
Carrying me through the snow,
He hugs me close,
I lean back and relax,
I let him do this because………….he’s my hero.

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Well, I'd suggest you get involved in some sort of club activities

Sorry... But saying "The World" Reminds me too much of .Hack\SIGN however, this poem kinda parrallels the plight of Tsukasa... Wierd if thats not what you went for...

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Eh, not really into the club idea.

Added after 4 minutes:

I didn't go for that, it was actually when i was really stressed out and wrote my feelings into a poem....i do that alot...

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Everyday
[first verse]
It seems like yesterday,
We were laughing together,
You looked into my eyes,
And I looked into yours,
We share a special bond,
One that most don't have...
[Chorus]
Everyday,
You are always gone,
Everyday,
You are with someone,
Everyday,
It seems like we're getting farther and farther apart.....
Everyday....
[second verse]
You were silent that today,
I felt like shit all day,
You barely talked, even breathed,
You had something with someone,
All I could say was how could you...
[Chorus}
Everyday,
You are always gone,
Everyday,
You are with someone,
Everyday
It seems like we're getting farther and farther apart,
Everyday....
My head is about to explode,
Harsh words are going through my head,
I wish they would go away,
So I can break away....
[Chorus]
Everyday,
You are always gone,
Everyday,
You are with someone,
Everyday,
It seems like we're getting farther and farther apart,
Everyday,
You are always gone,
Everyday,
You are with someone,
Everyday,
It seems like we're getting farther and farther apart,
Everyday,
Everyday,
Everyday,
Everyday.....

It's supposed to be a song...I don't think it turned out that way...

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Nobody loves me. I have another song that's better....

I met you at the corner,

You said I was cute,

I said I was flattered,

But I'm not into you,

You seemed fine with that,

You seemed to bounce back real fast,

I never knew you could be mad,

Making me so sad.

[Pre-Chorus]

You took my hand and held it,

I slapped you for it,

You couldn't take it,

So you just hit me like that.

[Chorus]

All this anger is built up inside of you,

You don't realize it but I do,

I take my fist and hit you,

You take your fist and hit me back too.

I can't take this shit anymore,

Sometimes you leave me at my door,

How could you be so mean,

When I thought you were so keen.

[Second Verse]

I met someone else,

He told me about himself,

When I rolled up my sleeves,

He asked, Who hurt me,

All I could say,

Was that I was okay,

He asked who was it

And I just fell for it.

[Pre-Chorus]

He seemed to be the type,

to not laugh when i cry,

I told him the truth,

All he asked was Whywould hehit you

[Chorus]

All this anger is built up inside of you,

You don't realize it but I do,

I take my fist and hit you,

You take your fist and hit me back too,

I can't take this shit anymore,

Sometimes you leave me at my door,

How could you be so mean,

When i thought that you were so keen.

[Third verse]

He held me close that night,

For I wasin such a fright,

He reached out to touch my bruises,

And said I won't hurt you,

I winced at his touch,

I didn't know why he cared so much,

He asked to stay the night,

I didn't know if it was right,

He just looked into my eyes,

My answer just didn't satisfy,

I gave him a look,

That can't be described in a book,

He lifted my chin up,

Formed his hands like a cup,

He bent over way too close,

So that we were nose to nose.

[Pre-Chorus]

I guess this is how he says good-bye,

All I had to do was close my eyes,

I decided to answer his question,

By giving him my suggestion,

You may spend the night,

Even if it wasn't right,

He hugged me tightly toward him,

Under the lights that were so dim,

We stayed up all night,

And I figured That it was right.

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I guess I could put my stuff up for review.
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What Love Gives

What does love give to each of us?
Happiness, a sense of security, meaning?
That may be what you think of immediately, but it's not always true
For some love is actually quite blue
Heartbreak, emptyness, lonliness
Just a few of these
Can make a heart feel ready to burst at the seams.
Love can be happy, love can be sad
And sometimes love can just make you mad
And I have felt all of these
Love has healed me and love has hurt me
But I still remember the pain
And still I feel as if there is nothing to gain
And here I ask: what has love given you?
A life of happiness? Or a life a little more blue?
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My Heart

I never thought you'd be the one that would make my heart skip a beat or make me smile like no one else can
This love took me by surprise it came so quick it hit me like a thunderbolt
It's the greatest thing that's ever happened to me but it leaves me so confused, but that goes away when I'm standing next to you.
You've stolen all my heart and over half my mind.
When I look into your dark brown eyes I know your heart is mine.
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Dreams

Dreams, they're not what you think, they're what you are......
Always calling, drawing you into their divine realm
Always giving peace and relaxation to those who need it
'Till you become, naught but a dreamer
Always living your life in a dream.
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Can You Relate To?

Can you relate to what I've been thinking, what I've been dreaming, what I've been seeing?
You can only relate to my life if you've been there before.
My thoughts, my dreams, my life.
Stay out.
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Who I Am and Who I Will Be

Who I am and who I will be are two seperate people joined as if one.
Who I am is always a no one and who I will be is always a someone.
Who I was is now in the past always to be locked away, who I am will fade, but who I will be will stay.
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Unknown Poem (aka No Title Yet)

For those that weep and all that cry
In all the world each soul will die
In frosty moonlessnights we lie
For the sake of those who have yet to cry
And for the ones who have yet to die
We are the ones that stand and cry.
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Ok, any reviews people?

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Zath: Behold, Karo: The only woman in existence who can make Fenix shut the fuck up.
Redsnow: That, and, frankly, if Karo doesn't like you that much, your character is probably going to die soon after his acceptance anyway.
Keiran: Bad RPs don't get picked, unmemberable RPs get ignored.
Zelosse: I don't usually laugh at blatant attitude, but when I do. It usually involves Karo.

very cool.

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This goes deeper and deeper....

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I eventually will put me.

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Now, who's that too, Hime-chan or me? You didn't make it very clear you know.

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Zath: Behold, Karo: The only woman in existence who can make Fenix shut the fuck up.
Redsnow: That, and, frankly, if Karo doesn't like you that much, your character is probably going to die soon after his acceptance anyway.
Keiran: Bad RPs don't get picked, unmemberable RPs get ignored.
Zelosse: I don't usually laugh at blatant attitude, but when I do. It usually involves Karo.

Wow thats great. Your work improves as you write so keep up the good work. I love to write. Might i advise you to work on smaller pieces a few lines long. I started doing that and I just got better and better. It builds skill and as you work with it, you elaborate it to make it a larger poem. or sometimes even stories! I love writing. It helps me relieve stress and rant, but is a calmer to let me get away from it all. ^^; Ah and reading too. !!! :-D

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http://fchan.hentaiplanet.net/flash/src ... 666165.swf

*Sighs* People really need to specify who they're talking about. I'm getting all confused.

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Zath: Behold, Karo: The only woman in existence who can make Fenix shut the fuck up.
Redsnow: That, and, frankly, if Karo doesn't like you that much, your character is probably going to die soon after his acceptance anyway.
Keiran: Bad RPs don't get picked, unmemberable RPs get ignored.
Zelosse: I don't usually laugh at blatant attitude, but when I do. It usually involves Karo.

@_@ I'm assuming it's to you, Karo.

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Ooo I have poems to but most of them suck! heres one people like better! and KyuuKetsuHime
your poems are realy good nice job to you!
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The Bell


Why have I been cursed with this life?
All I have seen is darkness and strife.
Now hearing the sounding bell,
For I have been condemned to hell.

From hell I shall arise again,
Darkness exuding from my grin.
Revenge,
Revenge is what I seek,
For all of those who made me weak.

For all of those who ruined my life;
Now it's my turn to hold the knife.

I have forever walked this lonely road.
Now I shall finally explode.

Explode with anger,
Explode with strife.
Explode with danger,
For all of those who ruined my life.

"You will pay"
I shall say,
To them as they weep.

For you have left me with this wretched life,
And you have made me weak.

You shall not live.
But you will give me
Something I desire,

You will see the blazing fire.

You will see the roaring fires of hell.
This time you will hear the bell.
The bell of death will ring through-out your ears
Forever!

Revenge is truly sweet!
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~*~Letterbomb~*~


I can't believe it.
You're such an ass.
I'm so sick of it!
You won't let me pass.

You won't let me in your heart.
You won't let me in your mind.
I have no comprehension,
of what I would find.

I have tried to get into your heart,
To mend this friendship
and not be apart.

But I'm done.

I can't.
I won't.
And if you wish t stop me;
just don't.

I'm leaving this behind,
Because I'm pissed.
You've hurt me so many times,
and I'm sure I won't be missed.

You mess with me.
You mess with my friends.
You fuck with our friendship,
as it bends.

But soon it will break.

We will leave you,
Out to die.
We will point and laugh,
as you cry.

You won't get pity.
We won't feel shame.
Because when we needed you,
you never came.

I'm pissed.
But you're too blind to see
and this time,
I won't accept some lame apology.


I'm done.
I'm through.
And today,
I leave behind all memories of you.

Now from your heart I shall steal.
When you have left me with
these scars that won't heal.

You've meesed it up.
I'm sorry to say.
But I all ask is
for you to go away.

By: Lisa Dooley - A wonderful person a smart wise person. and By Moi, see we worked on it together!
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Are any of those any good? sorry if they are kinda long! I have alot more..

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I like killing people wanna be my friend?

0.o those are good. Kinda dark, but very well written.

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Zath: Behold, Karo: The only woman in existence who can make Fenix shut the fuck up.
Redsnow: That, and, frankly, if Karo doesn't like you that much, your character is probably going to die soon after his acceptance anyway.
Keiran: Bad RPs don't get picked, unmemberable RPs get ignored.
Zelosse: I don't usually laugh at blatant attitude, but when I do. It usually involves Karo.

Thank you, yours are really good to.

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I like killing people wanna be my friend?

Actually most of those I wrote in the 7th grade. Only the last one was written this year. The first two were written last year though.

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Zath: Behold, Karo: The only woman in existence who can make Fenix shut the fuck up.
Redsnow: That, and, frankly, if Karo doesn't like you that much, your character is probably going to die soon after his acceptance anyway.
Keiran: Bad RPs don't get picked, unmemberable RPs get ignored.
Zelosse: I don't usually laugh at blatant attitude, but when I do. It usually involves Karo.

O they're still good. I wrote mine this year.

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I like killing people wanna be my friend?

i feel so special!!!

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