I'm not entirely sure what he meant. If it was my writing style, or something I left out- or put in his feedback could of helped the story as a whole. I hope he comes back, even negative feedback helps.
This is Chapter 5, I seem to be having trouble writing this for some reason. What was in my head is having a slightly harder time coming out than the previous 4 chapters. I still think this is good though, I gave it a lot of time and editing- and I think it's more than ready.
After this part, this thread will have 2 pages, and not be so clumped together. Hoorah.
Name: The Chronometal Wars
Chapter Five: Mandark's Legacy.
Part One: Closure.
Blossom coughs up a large amount of water, as she looks into Dexter's eyes, now not sure weather or not she is looking into her own... Dexter lunges at her and gives her a giant- worried hug. Blossom is more than just a little confused, and she can barely focus on the situation at hand. Mandark speaks on the Reunion's behalf.
"Touching! Very Touching! By the way, I forgot to mention... Your little girlfriend... Is better off without you..." Dexter walks toward the now crippled Mandark, just having tied up every loose end but his pitiful life. He looks down upon the mess of a man, but Mandark does not respond in fear. Instead, he is almost relishing it!
"That's Right! FINISH ME! Go on! Kill me!!!" Dexter does not budge from his position but instead continues to look down upon Mandark. "What are you waiting for?!!! Kill me now!!! This is what you have wanted for so long! Finish what you started!!!"
Dexter merely shakes his head back and forth.
Mandark, seemingly enraged, stumbles off his knees and grabs Dexter by his labcoat: "WHY!!? WHY!!? You should of just finished me that night... in the cemetery. You had the chance!! You could have just put me out of my misery and saved us all this trouble... IF YOU DON'T KILL ME NOW I'LL KILL YOU, AND BLOSSOM!!!"
Blossom recoils from the situation: Dexter is supposed to of said that he would not kill Mandark, and then slap him to regain his composure, but... what is-
*Blood spatters across the room...*
Dexter has his great gauntlet embedded in Mandark's Torso... "Y... yes... My pain, will finally... end..." Mandark slumps to the floor in a puddle of his own blood. Dexter merely looks upon his pathetic corpse. "Mandark... it didn't have to be this way... but Blossom was right. You were a very sick man, and if death brings you peace, and us safety... so be it...!"
Dexter turns to Blossom, with tears in his eyes, but he does not falter. Weather or not the tears are of sadness, joy or rage, Blossom does not know. He offers to help her up, and she accepts the help... she is very weak from her near death experience. "I... can't believe you actually did it..." --- "Mandark... If you didn't warn me ahead of time I may of considered letting him live on Deedee's behalf... But he has killed too many people, and he almost killed you..."
The roof breaks apart, and the green Powerpuff comes flying through it. She lands on the ground and gasps at the situation...
Mandark is dead in a puddle of his own blood with Dexter and Blossom looking over it. "Y... you guys are safe?" Bubbles also flies down, chasing Buttercup. "Buttercup, you still aren't well! Be care-" Bubbles nearly screams at the sight as well. "It's alright girls... I'm fine..." Blossom lets out weakly. "We have to get her back to her house guys." Dexter lets out in response to her weakened state.
Bubbles rushes to Blossom's side, and picks her up without her even asking. "H-hey!" Blossom slips out. "Sorry Blossom, but you don't look too good. I'm taking you back to the house." Bubbles flies up, and Blossom gets one final look at Dexter, who seems to be talking with Buttercup. As Bubbles exits the ceiling, she flies back in shock- nearly dropping Blossom.
It's the Black girl...
"Bubbles, let me down..." --- "B-B-B-BUT!" --- "I'll be fine..." Bubbles hesitantly lets Blossom down onto the roof, and making sure she can stand properly. The black girl meets eyes with Blossom, then with Bubbles... and then back to Blossom and gestures her head to Bubbles. "Bubbles, can you give us a minute please?" Bubbles nods and flies back down into Mandark's lair.
"Though it ended in the same way, its obviously different... Mandark is dead- but his lab is in-tact..." --- "I..." Blossom lets out, desperately tying to find words. The black girl raises an eyebrow and cocks her head. "What's wrong...?" Blossom looks around a little bit, and then meets eyes with her. "Do you REALLY know who I am...?"
The black girl looks surprised, but then seriously considers the question... "Hmm... The spirit of Blossom, sent from the future to save the past?" --- "That's what I thought too..." She looks very surprised from that statement- and asks inquisitively: "But you found out something that makes you question your own existence...?"
Before she answers that, she lets out another question. "What do you think Dexter's role in this is?" The girl is baffled to have her question answered by another- completely unrelated question. "Well it's all pretty obvious to me..." She looks around, and finds a pillar- then sits on it...
"I'm not sure how much I can tell you without causing you to do something I don't want you too... I recommend going back to whoever told you all of this to begin with- and ask them." Blossom remembers Him in the future, and thinks of Otto's time device. "Alright, I will... and as for your previous question, best not tell you now... I don't even know the specifics yet."
The black girl raises and eyebrow and descends from the pillar, the conversation ended far quicker then she thought. She didn't even get comfortable on the pillar yet! "Fair enough... I guess I'll be off then." The black girl flies off once again at immeasurable speed. Blossom yells out weakly: "Bubbles, I'm ready to go home!" Bubbles flies up quickly, and picks Blossom back up- and flies off.
*Some time passes...*
Bubbles arrives at the house the same time Dexter does, and they both head into the house, and are greeted by the Professor. "Blossom! I am so glad you are okay!" Utonium kneels down to hug Blossom, who hesitantly hugs back. Utonium rises and meets eyes with Dexter. "So you are the infamous Dexter? I can't thank you enough for what you did for Blossom..." He extends his hand towards Dexter's.
Dexter accepts the gesture and shakes it as a sign of mutual respect. "Alright, you two head upstairs, I'll get my medical equipment and tend to whatever happened to you guys." Dexter gestures Blossom to head up first, but she pushes him up the stairs. "You are in much worse shape than me Dexter, I insist."
Blossom looks down the stairs, and meets eyes with Otto, who is going to wait patiently for them to meet in private. She continues...
They enter Blossom's room, which is coated in a bright pink and she pushes him onto her comfy bed. "I'll sit on this chair, you are much more terminal than me..." Blossom overlooks Dexter's wounds again in detail. His hands are coated in dried blood from when his gauntlets were shattered in-battle and his chest is very battered and bleeding as well.
The professor enters the room, with a Medkit- but Blossom stops him. "I can take it from here Professor, can you give me and Dexter some time alone?" He nods at her request, and exits- shutting the door behind him. They spend a small amount of time simply looking at each other...
"Let's get started..." Blossom lets out, Dexter rises from the bed, and Blossom from her chair- and Dexter takes off his shirt. Blossom breaks into the med-kit and finds the healing balm, and applies it to his chest. She knows from personal experience that this is an incredibly painful medicine, even for a superhero- but Dexter doesn't even flinch.
After applying the analgesic- she rips into the bandages, and spins it around the affected areas. After Dexter's chest was finished, she went to the bathroom, and came back with a damp cloth. She took his hands and wiped them clean of dried blood, and then applies to balm to his hands as well- but in a much smaller dose.
After applying the bandages to his hands, he speaks up- "My turn now." Blossom sits on the chair as Dexter inspects her arm- still damaged from the fight with Bell. Most of it is healed, but some of the bones seem shattered. He uses the same cloth, now ringed out and cleaned- to wipe off her dried blood, and then applies a harness to her arm. It seems that's all they needed...
Dexter returns to the bed, and trails off in thought...
"How did you know about all of this...?" He lets out simply. Blossom sighs... "I'm sorry Dexter, but I can't tell you that..." He also sighs... "It's so strange, you knew about Deedee, you knew about the attack, you knew about Mandark and me..." He shakes his head. "But I guess you have your ways and reasons for everything that happened..."
Blossom rises of the chair. "I'll let you rest for a while, I'm gonna go tell everyone we are okay- and tell them what happened, and Dexter?" He looks over at Blossom. "Do you regret meeting me?" Blossom asks this question in very many formats, before this is over, she may have to kill him, and even in a present tense he got messed up and killed Mandark- not to mention all the mental scarring that comes with this...
"We all have our regrets Blossom..." She lets off an aura of sadness, but as she nears the door-
"But you are not one of them, Blossom. You let me see what I shut myself out from, Mandark was still a vital enemy... It may not of been His fault that Deedee died, but it doesn't matter. It was you that gave me the courage to stand up for what was right, and I thank you endlessly for it Blossom... I... could never regret any decision I made with you at my side..."
She looks back and smiles at him. "Thanks Dexter..." She closes the door behind her- eyes closed, deep in thought...
When she opens them- she notices she is looking right into Buttercup's, who seems to have rushed up the stairs in an effort to peep. "What are you doing Buttercup...?" She smiles wryly, and heads back down the stairs. Blossom sighs and follows her back down.
"How's Bigman?" Coop, the pilot of the Megas robot lets out. "Dexter's fine Coop, I'm letting him rest... where's Otto?" --- "The dorky kid? *Gulp* He went out for some air." He says through a mouth-full of Chips and Soda. "Front or back door?" --- "Back. *Munch munch...*" Blossom walks down the hall, before Bubbles stops her. "Where are you going?" --- "I'm going to talk to Otto about what happened." --- "O...okay..."
Blossom turns around to meet Bubbles. "What's wrong Bubbles? Are you okay?" She looks around, before beckoning her outside as well. Once they are on the starlit porch, she continues. "I overheard what you were saying with the black girl..." Blossom nearly gasps at Bubbles' words.
"Wh...what did you hear?" --- "Everything... It was all so weird..."
"This is how you wanted to go huh?" The black girl says to herself above Mandark's corpse. "Hmm... Hard to think you will one day end all life as we know it..." She kicks his dead body. "Not even death will end the world of you!" She almost screams. "AND HOW DO YOU GET SO DAMN STRONG?!"
She paces around his dead body, knowing no matter what she does he will come back and ruin the world. "I don't know how, but somewhere between now, and then... you rise in power beyond control... and ruin everything! When was it? WHEN DID YOU GET SO STRONG?! DAMN!" She shakes her head, still by herself and seemingly hysterical.
"If I stop you now, will I disappear...? Even so, I can't stop you later if things don't change! ARRGH!" She punches the floor. "Dammit Blossom, I thought you would change things, but nothing changed! IT'S ALL THE SAME!" She hears something outside the facility, and rushes to a higher level to check it out.
She eyes a small girl outside. "Susan? Are you in there?" --- "Olga, Mandark's sister- and future Biosymbiote P..." The black girl lets out under her breath. She sighs... "If you need something done, you gotta do it yourself then..."
The black girl opens her arm to reveal an arsenal of weapons... "This is not how I expected Blossom's intervention would unfold..."
The story shall very soon leave PPGD's universe and enter mine, are you prepared? I do hope so...
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