First off, LOVE the poem dude. Seriously, nice piece of ass you got there.
Just one suggestion though. I noticed that one space pattern you have and maybe that's your intention, I dunno. But I copypasta'd it to my notepad and read it like this and I found it a lot sweeter to orate:
Quote:
No Tears are left to cry
The pain slowly slips away
Our souls find rest in the sky.
Sweating till thy skin is dry
The sun beats down with each ray
No tears are left to cry.
Sing loud, oh brethren by and by
Thy voice shall lead the way
Our souls find rest in the sky.
Beaton down, with heads held high
Skin ripped and torn away
No tears are left to cry.
Riding on wind, our spirits fly
Father, lead us not astray
Our souls find rest in the sky.
Walking in faith till we die
Together we’ll be someday
When No tears are left to cry,
Our souls find rest in the sky.
Quote:
"Ideas for poems are like flowers and poets are constantly searching as though through a field for the most beautiful ones. One day they might pick one up, carry it around in a basket for awhile but then get tired of it and throw it back to the earth. Their favorites are the ones they take home to grow into full poems and put in display pots for all to see. Now, stories are like trees. When they are just ideas, they are little seed thrown out with the hope that they fall on good soil to grow on, the soil being that natural groove that writer and even poets feel when writing a good piece of literature. When they fall on good ground, the writer then take time growing it, watering it and making sure its healthy and strong with good roots. Some trees take less time to grow than other but they all need a little trimming when they're done. After a few trims here and a few branches there, you've got a story worth reading and a tree worth climbing."
That's a very interesting way to look at it. Although personally, I'd like to think of stories as gardens and the writer is practically cultivating his own world into whatever form or shape he wants it to look. The flowers thing I can relate, added that we also admire the flowers of others and from them we find ways to improve our ways in cultivating them.
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