I agree with the both of you!
Bleach IS totally awesome.

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Bleach seems like Naruto for me. It tries to be totally badass and serious but it loses it with crappy storytelling. Bigger fan of: Wolf's Rain, Cowboy Bebop, Trigun, Samurai Champloo, and Fullmetal Alchemist: Brotherhood.

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A Pimp Named Jeezy Creezy: Lasting all the way up to Valentine's.

And the Pimpeth lord sat amidst his real ballin' players, the Apostles, and raisingeth his cup of Cristal as they devoured the grapes and cheese from the finest bitches in town he said

"Sleepery Dee, Sleepery Doo.
Whoever betrays me tonight, I'll mo'fuckin' cap you!"

FMA is pretty good. But i see past Bleach's constant change in character importance to see the fights myself

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Oh, holy fucking CRAP. You're sixteen? Man, I wrote better than this when I was twelve, and I can prove it!

...yeah. "Nostalgia" and "shame" come to mind.

But dude, seriously. SLOW THE FUCK DOWN. If I could offer one piece of advice for you it would be to reduce the pace at which you advance the plot.

Plan it out in your head, or even on a sheet of paper first.

For example, with my story (Puff Most Epic), the process for writing it is roughly the following:

-Brainstorming
-Plotting the main ideas on paper, including themes involved
-Writing a basic run-through of the events
-Expounding on those events
-Removing that which does not fit the theme (either of the paragraph or of the story)
-Replacing outright bad with good (including grammar, spelling, punctuation, etc)
-Revising areas that need more work
-Touch-ups (minor details in the story)
-Posting

You are not restricted to what you can post on these forums. Some places have a limiter, which will generate an error, telling you to cut down your post. But, as far as I know, that is not here.

Work on your story a little more, take some time, and MAYBE you'll be even as good as me, some day.

So modesty isn't a strong point for me. Whaddaya gonna do, take me to Mast?

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At least you are honest about not being modest.

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A Pimp Named Jeezy Creezy: Lasting all the way up to Valentine's.

And the Pimpeth lord sat amidst his real ballin' players, the Apostles, and raisingeth his cup of Cristal as they devoured the grapes and cheese from the finest bitches in town he said

"Sleepery Dee, Sleepery Doo.
Whoever betrays me tonight, I'll mo'fuckin' cap you!"

honesty needs understanding to be worth something, so if you can understand why not to be modest, you can't fault yourself for it. However, that means in addition recognizing that others CAN fault you for it, so with those who have not made the conection of the worth of modesty personally yet or if they have indeed discovered a system beyond that sort of recognition (which is a possibility you should ALSO be ware of)--you must have discretion.

Particularly, Soulreaper, you're very enthusiastic to write this idea as a fanfic, but have you really taken the time to examine the discretion you've chosen in writing even what you have thusfar? Or perhaps examined the methods of reasoning you've decided to use as justification for your motives in writing the fic at all? I am just curious.

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Puff Most Epic.

Ugh, jesus...

I've received complaints about this thread for a while and when I checked last time it was going nowhere.

Now that I've seen the newer posts my opinion has not changed. If you're going to put chapter 3 on hold, then I'll put this thread on hold too and spare us all. PM me if you want to reopen it with chapter 3 but I assure you, these people will come back with it.

Thread locked until progress is made... whenever that is.

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