Yeeouch, a person dead from the start. Harsh.
The starts is real swell and... have I seen you before?
Is this a fanfic of some sort or original writing?
This is no Fanfic, it is my original idea I had for my own webcomic. Right now I have shelved it for later, but I will put the script here to wind up interest.
I will do the comic later next year or as soon as I finish this.
Maybe you've seen me on DA.
Thanks for reading. Added after 7 hours 20 minutes:
“ Let’s move on!”
Rynge led the group on to the next room. God it never ends. A huge anaconda like creature with arms like scythes, glared down at them. Saneh was first to jump out at it. No one stopped her, when she was fueled, she did so much better. The Giant Scythe boomerang rang out and whirled all over the place, slicing the creatures limbs precisely. Sushin and Rynge didn’t even have to do anything. They stood back, alert for other threats. Then the decapitated head of the creature slammed near them.
None flinched. Sushin turned and tossed a micro bomb into it’s gaping mouth and ran. Flesh exploded everywhere. Rynge and them all ran to the end which appeared to be a cliff with no end.
Rynge looked at Sushin. She took the glance as a go ahead and conjured up a fireball in her hand and tossed it down. The ball dimmed and shrinked, then it was out of sight. They waited a moment.
The other side was too wide to just jump it. But Saneh was going to prove otherwise. She took a few steps back. Sushin just watched her.
Rynge shook her head. “ If you fall, it’ll be unlikely you’ll catch a ledge. And you won’t see daylight forever. Not to mention what else is down there.”
Saneh shrugged that off and ran as fast as she could and jumped, lassoing a hooked chain before her to the other side. It caught hold, but she had given it too much Chain and so down she went.
Whoa! Rynge again shook her head and called down nonchalantly. “ See? Now hurry back up.”
There was scuttling and jeering noises, coming from down below and slowly coming up. Rynge and Sushin peered down and Sushin fired up another fireball, but Rynge stopped her. All of the sudden they could see Saneh’s silhouette and underneath her a brilliant disarray of light… or … wait. Heat blasted up as the Light became a volcanic eruption. They all panicked. “ SANEH!”
At the bottom of the cliff was apparently a stream, a stream of flammable liquid and Sushin had unknowingly ignited it. Saneh scrambled up quickly as more Scarab beetles scuttled up from their disturbed slumber. As soon as Saneh went over the edge, Rynge conjured up the force field and covered the cliff gap and as the huge Flames rose up and toasted the Beetles. They screamed and screeched. Sushin backed away from the heat and her eyes widened as she looked over at Saneh.
Saneh dove to the other side. And something pierced her chest with sharp pincers. She screamed and pulled back, accidentally making it tear through her back. She gagged on her blood, but stood up with the a giant Scorpion’s pincer attached to her. She gripped the pincer in both hands. It had not yet injected the poison into her but the poison trickled down her back into her gaping wound as she twisted it the pincer off with pure rage. The creature screamed at it’s lost limb and she used it to stab it instead. It caught her in it claws and attempted to split her in half.
A flame ball the size of a beach ball smashed into it’s head engulfing it in flames, dropping Saneh. As she scuttled away, Rynge instantly grabbed her and helped her stand and backed away from the fire before them of the screeching living fire scorpion. Sushin torched it nonstop, until it stopped screaming.
Rynge helped Saneh lean against a wall. “ Here eat this, you’ll be fine.”
She pulled out a strange green leaf and hand fed it to her. Saneh munched slowly and choked it down. She gasped and sighed. She gave a grin from her bloody mouth.
“ Ironic isn’t it? We haven’t even seen the damn stones yet and at this rate, we may not even get to.”
“ You’ll be fine. Just be as rash as always and we’ll be okay.”
“ Juni .. Wanted to see those stones. Said it was her number one priority. … Damn …” Saneh spat blood cursing.