All right, everyone, first thing here is a poem. The rhymes are kinda lame and basic, and sometimes there are none, but whatever. Hope you like it, and if you don't, I am accepting criticims:


Darkness in the early morning, when I'm not in a good mood,
Light at ten, while I have a good attitude.

Cold in the early morning, to fit rainy days,
Warm at noon, with maybe a little haze.

Groggy in the early morning, my dominant feeling
Alert in the afternoon, feel like I can touch the ceiling

Shower in the early morning to wake me up
Sweat in the evening, to tire me out.

Wake up in the early morning, feels like a rebirth
Go to sleep in the night, hopefully the day had earned its worth.

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All right.
The title of the thread should be changed. Depends on what you wrote and of what literature you created.

Other information should be in the Rule section. Just follow the rules, and nobody gets hurt.

Oh yeah, I like the poem. Criticisms...? Bah.

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McDurg- I dunno' whispaho, I've seen some pretty hot things in my life. Like myself. I masturbate to my own image every day. Naw. How about all three of us combine, in the form of a sexy Godzilla? We would totally fuck Mothra.
Alfimi - *sighs*....things i have to do *corners whisper against the wall* *unbutons shirt**flashes**butons shirt up again* there, enjoy your hearty.
Coos - Whisper's a bitch.
Malumultimus - Whisper...you are my favorite worshipper.
Mal again - Nyaaaa~

Duh(to myself)! Forgot to read the rules. My bad, I'll just fix that now.

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Please do, and Thank you
I saw Griddles somewhere... Well, at least it's less work for the chum.

Really, I like the way you write poetry. But, since this is a forum, Follow the rules. You'll be safe when guided

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McDurg- I dunno' whispaho, I've seen some pretty hot things in my life. Like myself. I masturbate to my own image every day. Naw. How about all three of us combine, in the form of a sexy Godzilla? We would totally fuck Mothra.
Alfimi - *sighs*....things i have to do *corners whisper against the wall* *unbutons shirt**flashes**butons shirt up again* there, enjoy your hearty.
Coos - Whisper's a bitch.
Malumultimus - Whisper...you are my favorite worshipper.
Mal again - Nyaaaa~

You've already told him what to do, so I'll stick around and make sure he does it. I take it you meant 'chum' in a good way?

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Of course. Why would I be negative?

I only want some newcomers here in the Lit Forum to understand the Rules you guys applied. It's a simple matter of respect, neh?

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McDurg- I dunno' whispaho, I've seen some pretty hot things in my life. Like myself. I masturbate to my own image every day. Naw. How about all three of us combine, in the form of a sexy Godzilla? We would totally fuck Mothra.
Alfimi - *sighs*....things i have to do *corners whisper against the wall* *unbutons shirt**flashes**butons shirt up again* there, enjoy your hearty.
Coos - Whisper's a bitch.
Malumultimus - Whisper...you are my favorite worshipper.
Mal again - Nyaaaa~

I read the rules, but I have a few questions: the title rules apply to all works, right? Because I didn't find anything specific about poems. And, if so, how should I rate mine? There's really nothing questionable, so G?

Added after 3 minutes:

Take that as a yes to both.

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The title goes like this;



'Inspired, OMG' is the title of What I wrote. Stories have such different titles, so you don't have to worry about it. Since that a Story has some updates, meaning to say that Updates will also be in the thread.



For the rating, well, It depends. I don't know why you should worry about that.


I think I didn't make this clear. Please just read the rules. *is dizzy*

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Ok, there you go.
Gambate~

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McDurg- I dunno' whispaho, I've seen some pretty hot things in my life. Like myself. I masturbate to my own image every day. Naw. How about all three of us combine, in the form of a sexy Godzilla? We would totally fuck Mothra.
Alfimi - *sighs*....things i have to do *corners whisper against the wall* *unbutons shirt**flashes**butons shirt up again* there, enjoy your hearty.
Coos - Whisper's a bitch.
Malumultimus - Whisper...you are my favorite worshipper.
Mal again - Nyaaaa~

I read the rules, but, like I said, I didn't find anything specific on poems, so I went with the title rules that Cole had put, which included rating and title. I plan on putting new poems here, so i just used the title 'My poems'. I get it now that you put an example up, though, so I will fix this.

Added after 15 minutes:

Done, and thank you for your nice comments and helpful posts, whisper.

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I almost forgot (although it doesn't really matter, since no one seems to be posting), since this is a poem VENT, I'm only gonna put poems here when I think of one worthy of the Snafu literature forum.

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Rule three of the Literature Forum:
All threads will begin: Poster's Name, Title of Work, Rating, Fanfic or Orig.

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We've been over this, if you will kindly read the other posts, but I guess I need to fix. Gotta respect the regulars, after all.

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All right, I've decided to A), come back here because I need somewhere to vent my emo-ish poetry that's been spewing out of my mind lately, and B), bring up my old poem vent, because I like reusing stuff. So excuse the emo, there has just been some shit going down that I need to let out.

Didn't Know

Didn't know,
that I lived such a sheltered life.
Didn't know,
that my family was a train wreck.
Didn't know,
that my parents fought so much.
Didn't know,
that they got so bad, they needed time away.
Didn't know,
that my school life sucked so bad.
Didn't know,
that my friends were jerks.
Didn't know,
that my life actually blows.
Didn't know,
that things would get so bad,
That I would contemplate,
The end.
I didn't know
I just didn't know....

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