Keeper: FFDM: R: Original: Update: Ch.6 Part 5

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Postby Shadowed State of Mind » Fri Jul 07, 2006 7:46 am

Oooh. I like! What was the girl's name again? GAH! I forgot!

Hmm, that character sheet up there reminds me to finish my pick list!
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Re: Keeper's Faust Fall: Dormant Memories (ep.3 begins)

Postby Keeper » Fri Jul 07, 2006 8:35 am

Heh, the Lit forum finally finds my thread "popular". :P

Anyways, good to see you're reading, Shad. Well, since it'll be introduced in the next part, either way in FFDM that is too; her name is Angelean Williams. Heh, I've been wondering when you finally remember to get working on that list again. XD
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Postby numbuw2011 » Fri Jul 07, 2006 10:52 am

thats a pretty cool chapter but i just looked at the char list and then im like 0.0 whos the angel thing in gabes past is it the same as the one in lucifers life?
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Re: Keeper: FFDM: PG-13: Original Work: (ep.3 part.2 up)

Postby Keeper » Sun Jul 09, 2006 5:47 pm

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[center]The Tamer's Liberation[/center]
[center]Part 2[/center]

Far days later after the meaning of the mysterious Gabriel; we are faced with a frontal angle of Lucifer's school; Enjeru Elementary school. (In Japan 6th graders are still consider elemetary students) Outside the school yards stood the young blonde himself, next to him stood Crypt; considering the reason he couldn't be seen it was alright for him to tag along. Lucifer was heading for morning block, which in this case was P.E. This was one of the very reasons why Lucifer had given himself a early bedtime. Crypt and him head through the twin doors and into the gymnasium, there Lucifer removes his usually black garbs and into his school gym uniform. It was a basic shorts and T-shirt desgin, but instead of red and white; Lucifer prefered his black and gray. He heads into the boy section of the gymnasium as his teacher comes walking in.

"Good morning, class. Today we will be working on upper-body strength. So get with a partner and head to the third station point near the playground entrance." the man's strict voice ordered, having the students do as they were told. Lucifer though was a bit of the ignoring one. He had no one to parnter up with even if there were boy/girl exceptions at some points when no one could find another partner. He merely sits quietly on the stands and waits for the class to be over. Though, his teacher spots him and wallks over. Lucifer didn't even sense the man's coming foot steps; well, til he was staring at him from the upper-view. There in his face showed your ordinary Japanese man; he wore a blue, gym jump suit that most Japansese gymist wore. His hair was nicely smoothed down, almost lookings as buzz-cut. He stares down at Lucifer, "Lucifer, I was expecting you to join the other students today. Why are you always sitting out like this whenever everyone else is having fun?" his teacher takes a seat beside Lucifer.

Lucifer merely stands up just as his teacher sits, "Well, Mr.Fujiwara, with all do respect I wish to merely sit out. The other students are not as much of a person as I am. I feel that they're just not like me in any way. Could you be partner's with a complete stranger, Mr.Fujiwara?" Mr.Fujiwara was a bit buffled by Lucifer's response. Though the man was quite used to Lucifer's intelligence, he thought of Lucifer has a revolution for the world itself. Nonetheless, he felt quite stupid right now. "Mr.Fujiwara?" Lucifer spoke to him, do to the man's blanked out expression.

"Eh...! Well, Lucifer, all I can advise to you right now is to give others a chance. You be surprised from what you learn about a person if you give them the right chance." and with that Mr. Fujiwara goes back to teaching his class; leaving Lucifer behind.

"Yeah... right." Lucifer depressedly replied, burrowing his head under his shoulders.

Suddenly, both classes start to go into a chattering commotion. Lucifer rises from his seat and spot that a someone was among the huge crowd that was gathering. He jogs down the stands and skies across the gym floor until he met face-to-face to what the whole situation was about. Inside the crowd stood a light brown-haired girl, with half of it covering her right eye. She wore the red and white wardrobe that most female students wore for gym class. Her hands were gently balled up as they were pressed against her soft chin. She was blushing like crazy as the crowd monstrously askes her questions. Luckily, Mr.Fujiwara was in the mist of the crowd and had cleared it just in time.

"Alright, quiet please! Sheesh, you all talk WAY too much. Uhm, now please meet the newest addition to our gym class; Ms. Angelean Williams. She is a visiting foreigner from Poland and has been very excited to visit Tokyo for some time now. Now give her a PROPER greetings and may you, Angelean, enjoy your time in your few weeks of visting Japan." Mr. Fujiwara warmly weclomed as he heads into his office, holding some papers that the girl had brought into the room.

Lucifer was truely intrigued as who this girl was. She was not like the others, she was more... more exotic. He was excited to meet her so quickly, he rushes towards her at great speed. Suddenly, someone grabs Lucifer by his collar and tugs him back. Lucifer, horrified, turns around to find it was Crypt who had tugged him away from the beauty of a preteen girl. "Crypt! Care to explain to me as why you pulled from my descending desire to meet this girl?!"

"What?! Well, anyways listen; I just felt a REALLY powerful esscense. It just popped up just as that girl did. I think you might want to-" Crypt is stopped as Lucifer shakes him loose, with a raging temper to match.

"That's a very misjudged claim, Crypt. I hope you're more relayable in the future!" Lucifer roared, walking at to the crowd.

"Grrrr! Damn you, yah stubborned child." Crypt cursed, vanishing a explosion of smoke.

Lucifer runs over to the crowd, only to find it deserted of the girl's presence. The blonde lowed his head in depression and walks off to the play ground. Other students follow as the last half of class begins. The rising sun clashes with the reflective glass that Tokyo's buildings produced; sending a almost-blinding light to the playground. Lucifer slowly approaches the side of the school's brick wall. He slowly turns his head and to his surprise. There stood the polish girl, Angelean; quietly staring off at the ground, still blushing too. Lucifer takes a great big gulp, his blood pressure rising, even his horomones started to act up. He approaches the girl with high courage and smiles brightly, "Greetings, Ms. Williams. I like to weclome you to Enjeru Elementary; my name is Lucifer Stephenson." The girl shifts her eyes towards Lucifer's weclome. She slowly rises her left hand and waves "hello", the sun bounced back on her black nail polish.

"Hello back to you, Lucifer... Um... Could you show me around this place? I'm currently new as you can see." she muttered, having those cheeks of her's blush up again. Lucifer was a bit attracted to her blushful look, it remembered him alot of the mangas he's read that had the usual innocent girl in it.

Of course, taking up on her offer Lucifer gradulatly nods and grabs her by her wrist; showing her about the school playground. "So tell me, what lured you to come to Japan?" Lucifer openly asked.

"Well, I was a bit interested in the culture and alot into their styles of wardrobe. Like you;ve seen, I have a big fashionation into their goth-style, Gothita Lolita." she pointed out.

"Hah hah, it's ironic if you think about it. I'm dress the same and yet I didn't even know it was a style considered around here. So, care to ask as you brought you here?" Lucifer askes again, becoming for open during every work Angelean spoke.

Angelean brushes back her fringes of tan hair and pauses, "Actually, I came here on my own but I did come with my own personal body guard. His name is Gabriel; he's a bit of a weird man but seems nice enough to trust. Anyways, Lucifer, think I could ask you some um... personal?" she whispered, stopping in her steps; making Lucifer stop in the same.

"P-personal? Weeell, I wouldn't give any lesser thought; you're a very well-brought up girl, Angelean. So of course, ask what you desire from my thoughts." Lucifer agreed, crossing his arms together across his chest.

"Well... Have you ever seen monsters walking around before?"

Those words, those words suddenly made Lucifer click inside. It made the devil inside him enraged. "Gah! Uhhhh. I'm sorry! I must go, Angelean!" Lucifer quickly rushes off into the school, holding his head in utter pain. Leaving Angelean in the middle of the playground; all alone.

Suddenly, appeared a man near the playground's gates. The man was Gabriel; his face was consumed by a wide, navy-blue, hood. Only his mouth and menacing eye was to be seen. "Ms.Williams, will you care to come here?" his low, whispering voice asked. Angelean obeys his question and walks over to the gates, looking that no one show her doing so, "Tell me, that boy you were with. Did he act somewhat "shocked" to the question I asked you to ask him?" Angelean puts on a worried expression but nods, "I see... Very well, I appreciate your assistance... go and continue with your classes, I shall pick you up after your 3rd class period." with that Gabriel walks backwards into a walking crowd and was vanished from sight.

Though, someone had been listening to the twos' little chat. Above from where the school roof stood was Crypt. His eyes were preforming that trick that achieved him in catching Lucifer the first time they met. He slowly removes his eyes from where Angelean and Gabriel talked. He only knew what was happening, and he knew that Lucifer was the first to claim it first. "Hmph, try all yah might, Abdiel; but I ain't giving up the kid so easily, heh heh heh." Crypt then dazes into the shadows as blackish-looking swords cut a part of him and vanishes a way.

Author's Thoughts
Hmmm, seems Lucifer is the type to fall for a pretty face. ;) Nonetheless, a fellow gothy as him. Well, from what we've read we can see that Angelean is obviously being used by Gabriel in some way. The matter is now is for what reason? Whatever it could be is that Crypt is possibly in on it some how. So again though, a actionless update. Hopefully, HOPEFULLY, there will be some great action in the next update. It just seems that I'm getting less and less descriptive with my writings. This happend with my last fanfic and it was put on hiatus cause of that. I only hope that I can keep the flavor flowing for Faust Fall: Dormant Memories. Also as you know that I've changed the form of my thread title. Yeah, um, my fellow writers out there should do the same. Cole will be deleting threads that aren't following the form he wants on Tuesday. So, you've been warned.

Anyways, until next time. ^_^
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Postby Darkness_calls » Sun Jul 09, 2006 6:48 pm

Most great chapter ^_^

You stubborn child - Crypt
Heh, I liked that one
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Re: Keeper: FFDM: R: Original Work: (ep.3 part.2 up)

Postby Keeper » Sun Jul 09, 2006 6:56 pm

Yep, this one I'm a little more proud of my last one. Sides, it has Gabriel as the "anti-hero" in this one. I can't wait to write up on his battle scene. X3

Hah, I found that to be my so-far favorite quote from Crypt in my update here. He can be a really bastard but makes up for that when saving someone who finds valueable.
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Postby dark psyghost » Mon Jul 10, 2006 9:21 am

Great story so far Keeper.
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Postby Shadowed State of Mind » Mon Jul 10, 2006 10:12 am

Er...about that new rule. Does that go for my thread as well? It's on hiatus and probably on page 5 by now. No one will notice the difference seeing as I won't update for some time.

Of course when I do I'll put my name. Problem: Tis a long name!
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Re: Keeper: FFDM: R: Original Work: (ep.3 part.2 up)

Postby Keeper » Mon Jul 10, 2006 10:20 am

Yeah, but isn't that thread in the Art forum? And you can always try shorting the title like I did with mine. It's just a mere task of putting together the first letter to each sentence in your title.
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Re: Keeper: FFDM: R: Original Work: (ep.3 part.3 up)Tamer Cl

Postby Keeper » Thu Jul 13, 2006 9:20 pm

Quick Words before story
As the title saids, Tamer Battle. Finally, you all get to see Gabriel and Lucifer go at it. It's a big update and may seem like the end, but ooooh my friend you are sadly mistaken. ;)

Enjoy the unholy bloodshed. :happy:

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[center]The Tamer's Liberation[/center]
[center]Part 3[/center]

The rest of the day went on smoothly for the two children. It was by amazing fate that Angelean was to be in most of Lucifer's morning classes. From gym class, to math, and to science; it was like Heaven in the eyes of the young blonde. It was easily swayed into the lovely 12 year-old's charms. Unknownly not knowing that her bodyguard, Gabriel, was one of the tamers that Lucifer had warned him of. Angelean's time had soon came to an end, sadly. There, near the front gate, stood Gabriel, waiting with the lowest of patience. Lucifer had tooken the responsibly of escorting Angelean to the gates. He and she met face-to-face with the man in blue. Gabriel faintly gives a grin, and merely snatches Angelean from Lucifer. The act both shook'in Lucifer and Angelean both.

"Gabriel!? How dare you pull me so hard!" Angelean uproared in panicing fear. She had felt a very cold chill down her arm as he had snatched her at that time. It felt almost... angelic?

"I apologize with the fullest of my regards, Ms.Williams. I just feel a bit UNSAFE with you being around this boy." Gabriel then pulls Angelean away from Lucifer's image, "Please excuse us, young man. I have a need to talk with, Ms. Williams." he and Angelean head off into the streets. Lucifer felt a too uncomfortable about this. The feeling he had looking into the man's eyes made him shave inside.

Gabriel released Angelean from his grip. Angelean examines the area around her. It was a circlual street corner, having at least eight buildings surrounding the whole place. No one was around too, it gave Angelean a little faint feeling of worry but she knew that her body guard, Gabriel wouldn't do any thing to harm her. Would he? The thought terorized her every brain cell.

"Ms.Williams... did you do as I advised you to do?" Gabriel questioned, sending that familiar chill down Angealean's back.

"Y-yes, Gabriel. I asked more and more about the demons and all such things you asked me too ask Lucifer. Though, what was your reason? I just don't find it humane in some way to ask him such things." she replied, now shaking from the pressure that Gabriel spoke in his words.

"I see... hmph." he turns away from her, "Ms.Williams? Do you fully know why I took on the role as your body guard?" he turns and faces her widen eyes, "Hmm, yes. I see you did not know... poor, poor girl. I will be fully happy to show you why." Gabriel walks onto the middle of the circlual street, he slowly reaches for his shaft. He pulls forth his twin blades, they resembled the japanese dao sword. The hilt was a shining brown and the bottom was armored with a reddish metal, the blade was curved in the front and purpled, while the rest a silver. Gabriel slowly rears the blade over to his wrist, he undresses the navy-blue glove from his hand, and quickly slashes his wrist. The dao brightens with red as the red drips onto the concrete ground. Gabriel's face the ground as he watches the blood rip faster and faster. So faster the blood starts to consume his wrist and hand too. Suddenly the blood stops, "Witness, Ms.Williams. Witness the feat all tamers are cursed with." Just as Garbriel finishes the blood from his wrist ripples from his skin. Jagged, spike-like organs combust from his exposed muscle. A jagged ring of incased blood forms around Gabriel's wrist, slowly as his finger tips sharpen into deadly claws. The horrific transformation comes to a stop as the bloody ring forms a twin pair of needles ontop of itself, "Witness the power of the blood-line, Ms.Williams." Gabriel finishes, charging at her with the claws facing in a stabbing position.

Angelean sits, frozen ontop of a wall top, watching as Gabriel comes forth to kill her. Suddenly, she breaks from it and releases it, "AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH!!!" her voice bansheed, as a cracking vase upon a hard surface of spikes.

Not to far, Lucifer hears her terrified screams. He quickly turns around with his red eyes widen in fear, "Oh my god... ANGELEAAAN!!" Lucifer screams back, running out of the school yard and through the gates.

Above the gates, Crypt watched as Lucifer disappears into the city streets. The nightmare cracks a grin and hunches over, looking down at the chronicle he held dear to himself only, "Alright, child, show me the power you've been given." he then dashes into the streets as well.

Lucifer makes it to the scene just as Gabriel thrusts at Angelean, " Huff... AH!? N-NO! Don't you dare lay one demonic touch upon her, you bloody bastard!" Lucifer growled harshly, charging at Gabriel. Gabriel suddenly redirects his target and charges at Lucifer. The blonde knew he become a pile of freshly-cut organs if he didn't dodge in time. Lucifer acts though, he slides under Gabriel's legs just as he hand lunged his claws downwards. Suddenly, Lucifer feels a tight grip around his head, he looks up. He gasps in fright as Gabriel had grabbed hold of his head.

"Die, demonic underling!" Gabriel roared, smashing the ringed structure into Lucifer's stomach.

"GAAAH!!" Lucifer screamed, feeling the needles digging into his liver. He feels the needles rip from him and he's toss upon the ground. "Uhhh...!?" he hesitates as Gabriel comes at him again, "No. NOOO!" Lucifer screamed, covering his face with his arms. Gabriel then stabs down on Lucifer's arms. The blood flows like a river as Lucifer's skin rips away from his arms, revealing half his cut-downed muscle, "AH!? What in the-?!" suddenly the rippled skin flashes a dark red. His dripping blood sprays like a fountain as it starts a traveling trail of hardening blood around his arms. Lucifer's finger tips transform into jagged claws, shining in the sunlight like a sword. Suddenly, as the pain was depthed, it disappeared. Lucifer slowly looks at his new-found "weapon" and looks at Gabriel, he was unsurprised from some reason, "Wh-what just happened to me? Is it?" he pauses as Lucifer's image flashes in his mind and flashes away, "I see. So this is what he meant by taking me over... Very well then. If it's for a gooder cause... I'LL JUST AGREE TO IT!" Lucifer swings his blood-line claws forward, dragging them along together, sparks flew as the claws pressed against each other. Gabriel doesn't hesitate and charges at Lucifer. Lucifer charges back, clashing blood-line with blood-line, "I don't really feel comfortable about seeing my own friend's body guard attack her as that. So have at thy, Gabriel!" Lucifer double slashes Gabriel in the gut and sends him flying into a building, "Had enough, cur?!"

Gabriel makes no motion, he only raises from the crushed building. Suddenly, he levels up his face with both his eyes glowing red like his bloody arms, "You have no possibly thought as who I am. Hah hah, I should have guessed that the fallen angel would leave his little mortal fool take me on. Haaaah, to bad he didn't warn you of what Gabriel had beneath himself." Gabriel's voice was different now. He had someone else's voice, it was echoing as you were to yell in a cavern, though Lucifer could tell it was the voice of a man even older than Gabriel's age.

"Who are you?! I can clearly see that you are not the one I'm facing!" Lucifer ordered, positioning his blood-line claws over his waist.

Suddenly, Gabriel's body flashes a blinding, blue light. Angelean gasps as the blue light covers her body. Lucifer gasps as well as he sees her frozen in motion. This was the same techique Crypt preformed back in the market center!? Lucifer turns and faces Gabriel again. Only to find it wasn't Gabriel now. Instead, he faced a long, blond-haired, peach-skinned man. His eyes were a dark red, but his right eye was a lizard-like one as it was consealed by his blond hair. The man's wardrobe was a shredded toga, it wrapped itself around the man's left shoulder, letting the rest drip down as the shredded ends flutter. Lucifer finally saw that this man wasn't of this world as he peered down at the edge of his toga. There he saw nothing but a purplish flame, trippling down were a twisted sickle resided. Lucifer fell from where he stood, fear was consuming to the break of a stroke.

"Helloooo, young reincarnate. I am Abdiel, the possesor of Gabriel or Ms.William's bodyguard, hah hah hah! Now lets begin this battle, Twin Lucifers!" Abdiel laughed menacing, wisping right at Lucifer.

"AH!? No way he can be that fast!? I can't believe I'm about to say this but- LUCIIIFER!!!" suddenly Lucifer's body erupts into a ball of spiraling lightning. The lightning sphere spirals downwards as the silver-haired devil thrusts the lightning away. The fallen angel floated in the air with his shredded apron fluttering in the air; below stood Lucifer, looking up as the devil faced his opponent, "Lu-Lucifer?"

"ABDIEL! Thou should have guessed thy be my opponent. The boy is merely new to the battles of tamers and possesors, so show some back-bone when taking the role as first caller of our match." the fallen angel grunted, clinching his reddish eyes.

"My apologizes, Lucifer. I merely come to this country in hopes that I may rip you lim from lim! Gabriel attack!" Abdiel roared, swifting his clawed arms at the two Lucifers. Gabriel nods, roaring out at the same time as his other arm turns into a blood-line claw. A reddish gas appears from the needles. Both Lucifers watch as two armored gauntlets appear floating in the air, "Hah hah! Go forth and vanquish the fools, Gabriel!"

"Yes, holy lord." Gabriel replied, sounding like a puppet, "RAAAAAAOOOOOH!" Gabriel swings back his fists and punches forward. Making the halogramic gauntlets to rush right the Lucifer.

"Lucifer! Listen well to my words and aim thy hand forth at the armed menaces. Concentrate and fire them away!" the fallen angel ordered.

Lucifer didn't know what to do at this point but nods in reply. He aims his hand forth at the encoming gauntlets, "Lucifer, what now?! Lucifer?! LUCIFER!" the boy was afraid that the devil had left him there to die. Was he going to die this soon?! "L-Lu-LUCIFEEEEEEER!!!" he screamed, tearings flying from his eyes.

"Thy must have patience, for tis thy is ready now!!! ROOOOOOOH!" the fallen angel raises forth his mighty claws and pounds them together. Great bolts of electricity muster from within his claws as a sphere of lightning forms between his palms, "Lucifer! Cry out thy name of attack! For it holds one's only way of survival!!"

"What?! How could I know such a thing?!!" just as Lucifer finishes his thoughts gather forth a unknown source of information. Lucifer though, merely raises his left hand in front of his face and aims. The blood-line suddenly disappears from his hand as the three corners of his palm open up and three sickles of blood-line appear. They each gather forth the lightning the other Lucifer was producing, suddenly the tamer knew the words was to speak, "RAAH! DEMENTED DESOLATION!" Lucifer cries forth, sending a forth a army-sized blast of flurrying, ardent, lightning bolts. The blast sends the Twin Lucifers backwards on their feet, the ground itself cracking apart from the fall.

Gabriel and Abdiel both stand in place as they blast comes towards them. The concrete blasts from the ground like a enraged geyser. The possesor soonly knew this attack couldn't be countered, "Gabriel, avoid now!" Gabriel nods and uses his halogram gauntlets to push him upwards into the air. To both the tamer's and possesor's horror, the blast known as "Demented Desolation" travels upwards, roaring out its electric fury. "Im-impossible!? GAAAAAH!!! I will shall not befallen as this in such ease from a weak mortal as that tamer! I wil-" Abdiel is silenced, from where his chest was the blast completely devastated the outer surface of his flesh, "Uh!? Da-amn you, boy... Gah!?" the devil spits out a barage of blood and plummits to the ground.Ending his appearance as a flurry of purple flames rathal around his body and sink into the clasped-in concrete.



Author's Thoughts
Well, what yah think? :snoogins: I love making this update longer than the past ones. This is a fine start for the whole battle theme that Lucifer will have to go through. So we have seen that Gabriel is truely a man of betrayal. Luckily, to know that Angelean is frozen during this battle. Though, after seeing something like Gabriel's blood-line, can she possibly go through it after knowing Lucifer is no different? Heh heh, I like to hear your guesses and thoughts on this update now, people. :happy:

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Check-out the nice BGM I picked out for the Tamer Clash.

Credit goes to Blue Laguna for BGM also.
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Postby Shadowed State of Mind » Thu Jul 13, 2006 10:07 pm

So violent! *ups Twin Lucifers' chance of being in my fic by 40%*

I may have to reread this at a time where very little distracts me...that and I'm not too sure how this taming thing works (meaning I have to reread the previous chapters)

And why did Gabe try to kill Angie? Did I miss something? (methinks there's something more to the girl)
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Re: Keeper: FFDM: R: Original Work: (ep.3 part.3 up)Tamer Cl

Postby Keeper » Thu Jul 13, 2006 10:48 pm

40% you say?! Well, heh, it's a start but I won't be satisifed when it's at least 80, hee hee. :happy: That's fine if you want to but if that doesn't help just ask me for the feedback. Like I told you in our last PM chat that I don't mind giving out spoilers if it gets Lucifer any closer to a role in your upcoming fic. Why did Gabriel try to kill Angelean? Hmm, well, heh heh. (I think someone may be catching on. XD) I think you'll find out when episode 4 comes in. Eh, for now I may have to be more under-raps with that reason. :tongue:

Oh yeah, and I sketched that request you asked for. I'll try to ink her in tonight and see how things go from there. And was it shorts or skirt you wanted her to wear?
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Postby Shadowed State of Mind » Thu Jul 13, 2006 10:54 pm

Skorts. Baby blue skorts. (tis my newest character for those who don't know...which is almost all of you)
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Postby Keeper » Thu Jul 13, 2006 10:57 pm

Ahhh haaah! Those kind of pants! lol Great god, okay okay, thank you. I think I have some re-sketching to do. ^_^; Thanks though, and oh crap, looks like the mother is getting pissed now. See yah tomorrow. :happy:
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Postby Shadowed State of Mind » Thu Jul 13, 2006 10:57 pm

What in...GAH!!! You sketched her with either shorts or skirt?! Oh dear, this'll definitely take a while.
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Re: Keeper: FFDM: R: Original Work: (ep.3 part.3 up)Tamer Cl

Postby Keeper » Thu Jul 13, 2006 11:00 pm

*hopes you read previous post*

Not yet, I've been playing my Poke'mon Emerald lately. Ever since I found it laying under my sketchpads and such things have been poke this and poke that. XD I'll try to ask though. No worries.

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Postby Shadowed State of Mind » Thu Jul 13, 2006 11:01 pm

Well anyway, surely you don't have to resketch the whole thing. Simply erase all clothing from the waist down and...wait, tis probably not that simple. Only with the puff drawings I do on occasion.
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Postby dark psyghost » Fri Jul 14, 2006 6:47 am

Good update Keeper.
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Postby numbuw2011 » Fri Jul 14, 2006 11:35 am

that update was pretty intense man ^_^ yay for violance lol
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Re: Keeper: FFDM: R: Original Work: (ep.3's end)The Climax

Postby Keeper » Sun Jul 16, 2006 2:52 pm

Quick words before story
Hope you enjoy the finale of episode 3, The Tamer's Liberation. So it seems Gabriel has yet to call defeat. See how he leans against the Twin Lucifers without his possesor to help now. You'll be surprised on how the Twin Lucifers approach this.


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[center]The Tamer's Liberation[/center]
[center]Part 4[/center]

The tamers' battle field was in ruins. The eight buildings that surrounded the circlual area were to mere rubbles of concrete and other such debris that was laid to nothingness from the overwhelming blast from Demented Desolation. Twin Lucifers stood in their place, watching over so closely at the possesorless tamer, Gabriel. The semi-color-haired man was slowly shaking, continuously glancing at the spot Abdiel fell so suddenly. Though, he did not cease in the urge to brutely massacure the child. It was his right, his moral order to rid this world of so-called, "evils".

"Twin Lucifers... How dare you befallen my trusted friend, my lord and god... HOW DARE YOOOOU!!" Gabriel's halogram gauntlets react towards his temper and launch right for Twin Lucifers. Both the boy and ex-angel quickly react and back flip away from the incoming gauntlets. Out of the blue, Gabriel comes from behind and jabs both Lucifers in the belly with his dao blades. Only the tamer felt the pain of the blade, squishing through his internals. It seemed this hollow-eyed tamer met what he said, "Face in thy name of the lord and be banished from this world! Luuucifeeeeer!!!" Again, Gabriel's gauntlets react towards his unbridled rage. The battle became more of a hellish struggle, the floating gauntlets mimic the enraged tamer's blades, each characteristic forming within the armored palms. The blades finish forming in the gauntlets' hands, making a loud clang sound as the blades brushed against the silent wind. Gabriel seeked his chance to attack, the needles around his chakram-like wrists spout out their bloody-red mist, concealing the tamer within it. Twin Lucifers look with unhappy faces as the tamer dashes around the battle field, concealing his sounds of motion, nonetheless his image too, "You will not leave this battle field without paying for harming my o'mighty lord, that you shall not! HYAAAAH!!" Gabriel reappears from the mist with his hands in some thrusting position. Suddenly, the ex-angel recgonizes this techique.

"Erah! Lucifer! Dance with the highest grace of one's dragon. Avoid the Akuma-hanmaa Fist!" the possesor ordered with the highest of awareness. Tamer Lucifer faintly even knew what his possesor spoke of. Though, this time was as hell-like as it could get. Lucifer, in one amazing feat, entirely eludes the incoming fist attack. His possesor suddenly had an idea, "Quickly! Relieve the blades from thy back and throw upon the one of bleeding light!" Lucifer followed the orders onece more. He vastly removes the twin daos from his stomach and his possesor's as well. Frantly surprising the fallen angel. Gabriel jumps back into his mist. Twin Lucifers are left at a stail-mate. They were ready to attack and so was Gabriel.

"I must proudly compliment your vast and quick growing skills during our tamer battle. You've proven to be more than what I thought you be, Twin Lucifers. Enough though, I have far other tainted beings to slay in my lord's name!" he preached, acting as he was a priest again.

"Pathetic thy are, ye are not one to cry thy achievements! As far as one can compreahend, THOU SHALL BECOME THE WINNER OF THIS BATTLE!!!" the devil preached back, finishing his speak by firing a demonic blast of black energy from his mouth. Lucifer looks up seeing that his possesor had the beasty fangs, similar to a vampires, but as vicious as a saber-tooth's.

"Try all you may, devil! I will not fall before your unholy might!" Gabriel, again, reappears from his mist, wielding his hands in the position of the Akuma-hanmaa Fist. Gabriel had just did what the fallen angel wanted him to do, as he could tell from the creeping grin his vampiric fangs gave.

"Do it, Lucifer." the ex-angel ordered.

Little Lucifer raises the blades together in a formation of a X. Sweat dripped down his gray fringe, smirking as it did. Soon he gave the reply, "Right..." swiftly raising back both blades and thrusting them at a incredible speed, breaking the sound barrier as they collided towards their previous owner! "Enjoy the freshly lingered, demon blood. You half-witted fool you." the boy then gives a unsettling smirk, dashing ahead of the encoming blades. Gabriel was completely caught off-guard, having the tamer jab him right in the gut with his blood-line claws. Lucifer fastly recovers from the first attack and counter-acts with a fast punch to Gabriel's jaw bone. He hears the saticfying sound of it crunching as his blood-line blested knuckles punch into it.

"Lucifer, don't fool about! Finish him, NOW!!!" his possesor raddled, both demony eyes blazing blood red. Lucifer nods, grabs hold of Gabriel's chest and vital throws him backwards into the still-encoming daos. The tamer coughs up blood as the daos met his left biecep, and the other meeting between his groin and belly button. Gabriel spiral plummits to the ground, having the blood splash from his wrists and hands, seeing evidence that his blood-line power had come to its limit. Twin Lucifers look back at their befallen opponent. The ex-angel spits at the man with great unamazement, "Barely worth my time. How pathetic thy are to as be defeated by a mere child. Hah hah ah, makes one laugh with upmost chuckles." Lucifer draws back within his tamer's body, leaving but black feathers upon his leave. The blonde watches as his arms splash the blood away, the pain was like nothing he ever felt before, as if something was butchering his arms with a hatch, and not ceasing to stop. He fell to his knees but held on long enough as he watches the blue aura from the battle field vanish away. Lucifer blessed his lord and god for granting his wish to banish away this horrible fight.

"What will become of you now, Gabriel?" he asked, slowly glancing at the rising tamer. Gabriel merely glances back with his one eye glowing.

"I will not stop in slaying you both, Twin Lucifers. You yourself were unaware of what this devil's past was. I know of it though, and that makes me the one to slay him. Before HE takes him from you and brings that terrible scene back to this Earth that once happened before. After 25 years of dormant rest he had to awaken within you!" Gabriel growled, nearing to attack Lucifer again. Luckily, he thought that this was a foolish act to commit do to the present state he is in now, "Gah... Rest assure English Tamer, Twin Lucifers; I will slay you one day. Sometime or another." before Lucifer knew it, the tamer, Gabriel forces a heavy punch upon the concrete, causing a mountain-size of dust to consume the boy. Lucifer dashes from the dust storm only to see that Gabriel had escaped. Streets away from their battle field, Gabriel is shown standing firm upon a metal pole, "Until next time, Twin Lucifers. Until next time." he then vanishes from sight as a flock of birds fly pass the pole.

Lucifer steadily grabs hold of both his arms, still stinging from the after effects of blood-line. Suddenly, he spots the one he came to rescue. Angelean was leaning against a building piece that had cracked off during the two tamer's fight. Lucifer gentle smiles at the polish girl, steadily paceing himself towards her. "Lucifer!" she cried, run towards him, quickly grabbing him before he had fallen from his walk. She gently strokes the half-unconscious boy's hair, the long fringes of gray hair motioning themselves past her black nails. Angelean then slowly hugs Lucifer, embracing him for stopping Gabriel in his act of killing, "Thank you. I don't know what I would have done if Gabriel had slashed that monstrosity into me. Thank you." she suddenly starts to cry over his shoulder, feeling completely helpless and the main cause to Lucifer's battle scars.

"Heh. Please dear and sweet-hearted Angelean, show more happiness than a motionless sobbing. I am in one piece and am just gladden you are in one piece as well. Grr! Bloody hell, my arms feel like butchered ham. Um... think you can scoot me over to the nurse now? Eh heh he- EH!?" Lucifer chuckled, and then suddenly going into a state of unconsciousness.

Anglean was shocked by his suddenly knockout but was merely glad he was alive, "Hee, of course, dear knight. I will get you right over to the nurse." she leans Lucifer's left arm over her shoulder and helps him over back to the school. She arrives there minutes later crying out for help. Two teachers hear the cries, rushing over as they saw the injured student.

"W-what happened here?! Angelean Williams, what happened to Lucifer?" one of the teachers worriedly demanded. To Angelean's shock, it was Mr.Fujiwara, the gym teacher. Angelean merely blushes in embarassment and helps Lucifer onto Mr.Fujiwara's shoulders, "Angelean, please, what happened to Lucifer?" he asked again, showing more mildness in his voice.

"Well... you see... Lucifer was trying to help me out when this thug came out of nowhere and attacked me and my escort. Luckily, my escort is also my body guard and went after the thug. Though, Lucifer tried to attack the man as my body guard was at the same time, and Lucifer was cut from a switch knife the evil man had! Please, Mr.Fujiwara! You need to get him to a nurse now!!" Angelean starts to cry again, against Mr.Fujiwara's jumpsuit.

"Alright, don't you worry, Angelean. I will seek to it that Lucifer is treated well. As for now, do you have anywhere to go?" Mr.Fujiwara asked.

Angelean suddenly gasped, knowing that Gabriel was the only person who had came with her, "Ehhh, well... No." she depressedly admitted, scooting her left shoe against the school ground.

"Eh heh heh, that's alright. You can wait in the school lobby til we make arrangements to have someone come down for you and take you to one of the city hotels. In the meantime, come into the school, it's starting to rain." Angelean suddenly looks up and sees slowly droplets of rain as Mr.Fujiwara pushes her near the direction of the school doors. She then looks over at the second teacher to see that he was holding Lucifer over his shoulders.

The scene switches on over to a sun-lit room with small, stretcher beds and white curtains around each one. It had the regular likeness that most school nurse rooms had, one's usually seen in Japan that is. Angelean is shown sitting near Lucifer's bed. She watches with worry as Lucifer comes back with the living. His red eyes flash with the sun light as he awakens. Angelean smiles gently as her tears dry from her eyes, "Lucifer? How are you doing?" she softly spoke. Lucifer robs the crust from his eyes and finds that his arms were bandaged up.

"Hmm, I feel fine actually. The stinging feeling in my arms has come to a restful stop and I see you before me, happy-like. He heh, I think I'm doing just fine, Angele-?!" he trails off as Angelean wraps herself around him, pushing him close to her. The girl's brown hair brushes against Lucifer's blushed cheeks as she continues to embrace him. He spots over to her face and sees tears of happiness dripping from her eyes. Lucifer then wraps his arms around the darling preteen. Now each were shown crying over one's shoulder, embracing a hug of relief over the one they thought dear to.

Suddenly, the room door opens up and reveals Mr.Fujiwara and someone else behind him, "Angelean? Lucifer? This person here saids that he's come to pick you up. He's stated that he's Lucifer's uncle and that he decided to pick you up as well, Angelean. Um? Are you two listening? HUH?!" Mr.Fujiwara gasped as he saw Angelean and Lucifer hugging one another still, "Ahhhh? Did I miss something?" he gulped. Suddenly, the man behind him puts his hand over his shoulder.

"Let them contiune what they're doing. If I was Lucifer right now, I be doing the same. You can leave this to me now, Mr.Fujiwara, I appreciate you for letting me in." the man addressed, politely.

"Uh? Okay then, well, I wish them both a well afternoon and hope they come back after the weekend. Um, take it easy you two. Don't do anything that may get you hurt like that again." Mr.Fujiwara warned, still quite baffled by the two hugging.

Luckily, both stop and look at their teacher with blushed faces, "Yes, sir! W-we'll be more careful next time." they both replied, nervously. Then suddenly giggling at each other as they spot their sudden reply.

The door closes in front of them as they see the man walk up to them. He had long, dark gray hair, and red eyes. He had a zig-zag marking on his right cheek; and wear a long, brown coat; and matching, brown gloves. Lucifer felt as if he knew this man from before. Suddenly, the room is covered in complete blue light. "A TAMER AURA?!" Lucifer thought. The man is then consumed by a black mist and reveals to be the nightmare, Crypt. "Well well well, look who had to come to your second rescue, hehehehehe." Crypt snickered.

"AAH! Crryyyppt!":Lucifer growled, blushing with anger.

"Hah hah! You looked so precise with your little girlfriend, child. Hah, anyways, I saw the whole thing. In fact, Lucifer informed me on how you followed every order he gave out during that tamer battle. Which reminds me... How in the fuckin hell did you let that bastard, Gabriel, call dibs on the tamer battle?! Do you realize that whoever is the first to call a tamer battle gets the upper-hand?!" Crypt howlered, pounding his fist against the blonde's head.

"OW! Well, pardon my sudden acts in not knowing that sooner! Besides, I was too worried in Angelean's safety! Also, why would he do such a thing? Gabriel. Why would he try such a stunt as in trying to kill Angelean?" Lucifer sadly stated.

Crypt then shows a sad face, looking away from Lucifer. "Poor kid, I don't have the heart to tell him about that. Damnit, I just too nice without him anymore, gaaah..." he thought to himself.

"Crypt?" Lucifer pondered, seeing the nightmare turned away from him.

"WHA? Oh yeah," suddenly the blue aura disappears and Crypt takes on his human form again, "Um, come on now. It's alright for you to come to the hotel I'm staying at. I have reservations for five so there's plenty of room for other guests." Crypt weclomed, waving his hand for the two to get up.

Angelan stops though as Lucifer gets up, "Are you sure you're okay?... Little Lucifer?" she softly asked. Crypt nearly broke out in laughter as he heard those last two words.

"Ehh?!... Did you just call me... Little Lucifer?" Lucifer asked, a bit embarrassed by the remark.

"Hee hee, you bet I did, Little Lucifer. You know what, I think I'll now call you that. Little Lucifer! Hee hee!" Angelean cheered, acting all perky and happy now.

"Hah hah, I like the idea. Lucifer, you should feel so happy as to have such a lovely girlfriend." his "uncle" chuckled.

"Gir-girlfriend?! Hee hee." Angelean giggled, widden with such mixed feelings. All she could do now was blush as her usually approach to many things.

"Heh heh ehh..." Lucifer then smashes his elbow hard upon his "uncle". "Ah hah hah, nice one UNCLE." Lucifer chuckled, sarcastically; glaring upon Crypt as who was enjoying this all too much.


Morals are something one must hold close to them, but also hold clear too. The man I faced was a victim to his life code. He was doomed to follow the orders of a tainted angel who only wanted some out of it from the fallen angel. Two angels at struggle with one another, and two tamers to be the victims within it. And yet, it makes you wonder... Who is going to be the next angel and tamer in this struggle? Is there a such things as angels now? Or are there just demons? Ones that will grant your wish, ones that will take that wish and stretch it into a horrible thing as murder and dark dreams of their own. I've sene it happen to humans. I've seen what it can do to the ones you love. Though, I've seen those who will fight back for your love one and shield those others demons away from you and your love.

Thank you, Lucifer...



Author's Thoughts
A fine climax I say indeed! As you read it seemd Gabriel would just not go down without a fight. Now you got to see how Lucifer truely is in battle. Seems that he has a bit of Crypt's attitude, don't you think? ;) I sure say he does, with Lucifer and all to aid him in that of course. As well as blood-thirsty personality come along, we switch to as how Angelean feels for Lucifer and how he feels back. Will these two truely love one another? Is it mere puppy love? And what is it that Crypt is it that he just can't tell Lucifer about her? Well, I can't really say yet for I just want to get to introducing my next bad guy. According of bad guys, anyone have an idea as who Gabriel was warning Lucifer of taking his possesor? I'll hint you on this that he's well-known as the "King of the cricket-demons". :devil:

BTW, here's the continuing BGM to the tamer battle. Tell me what you think of it too. :happy:
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Postby dark psyghost » Sun Jul 16, 2006 3:17 pm

Great update Keeper.
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Re: Keeper: FFDM: R: Original Work: (ep.3's end)The Climax

Postby Keeper » Sun Jul 16, 2006 7:31 pm

Thank you, Psyghost. Hope you're looking forward to the next episode. :happy:
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Postby Shadowed State of Mind » Sun Jul 16, 2006 7:59 pm

Good end to the first fight. And as for Angie...SHE'S EVIL!!! Tis a trick! (you wouldn't happen to be basing this on what happened to Claire at the end of Dual Minds Think Alike, are you?)
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Re: Keeper: FFDM: R: Original Work: (ep.3's end)The Climax

Postby Keeper » Sun Jul 16, 2006 8:04 pm

Heh, Lucifer likes to make his fights to a nice end. Nope, she's not evil. Though, the secret behind her can bring do something evil to Lucifer. Possibly to anyone who is like him. Hee hee, I know I must be slipping this out slowly. :tongue:
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Postby Shadowed State of Mind » Sun Jul 16, 2006 8:08 pm

She can somehow nullify summon spiri...I mean, angels and/or possessors?

All of this reminds me too much of Shaman King and a dash of Tales of Symphonia. Which isn't a bad thing.

As for Gabe, considering his position as "rightous" priest, I have just the attack for him: every attack Brisbane used in my fic! (assuming you remember them all)
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