DJ's Halo Fanfic.

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Re: DJ's Halo Fanfic.

Postby Dark Jedi » Wed May 10, 2006 6:55 pm

That will be revealed in time I will try to make a chapter every day unless I am busy.
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Postby Ku Ku Ku \(-^.^-)/ » Wed May 10, 2006 6:55 pm

ok...red powuh!!!
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Postby Kane369 » Wed May 10, 2006 8:53 pm

One thing,
QUOTATION MARKS!!!
That is all.
Good chapter.
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Halo: Angelic Past (Chapter Eight up) or FF1: Dark Delieveries (Abandoned)
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Postby Ku Ku Ku \(-^.^-)/ » Wed May 10, 2006 9:45 pm

ok...
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Re: DJ's Halo Fanfic.

Postby Dark Jedi » Sat May 13, 2006 4:50 pm

Chapter 4: Sharadokes Father.

The Main door to the Lab opened and a tall creature with a similar jaw structer as Sharadoke walked in (Elite). Travesty turned to the Elite and said Camore'radon it took you long enough to get back you missed the birth of your so called Pet. The Elite looked at Sharadoke then looked back at Travesty why is it in a cell? Travesy quickly replyed it attaceked and killed two Grunt's that were simply trying to check and see if it was okay. Camore'radon looked at the stun rodes on the ground and found what Travesty said to be highly unlikely. But the elite simply humered the old Prophet and said I have to run some test's on it. Travesty calmly said I cannot let you do that. Camore'radon now surprized replyed why? Travesty quickly snapped back this creature is a abomination and should have never been even thought of as a matter of fact what you did is a great sin. Camore'radon stared deep into Travesty's eyes and said then why did you alow me to make this creature. Travesty simply sat in his hover chair and said nothing. Camore'radon moved closer to Travesty and whispered in his ear the Prophet's may have sent you tomake sure They get there super soldier but if you kill the first one that has survived I will never know what I did right. Travesty now angry ryplied Fine I will let this thing live for now but as soon as the Super soldier is made that thing will die.

End of chapter 4
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Postby Darkness_calls » Sat May 13, 2006 4:52 pm

MEH. He will stay alive for now ... He has to escape ^_^


Really good DJ ^_^
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Re: DJ's Halo Fanfic.

Postby Dark Jedi » Sat May 13, 2006 4:56 pm

thanks
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Postby Ku Ku Ku \(-^.^-)/ » Sat May 13, 2006 9:27 pm

meh i liked it some
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Re: DJ's Halo Fanfic.

Postby Dark Jedi » Sun May 14, 2006 3:55 pm

Okay this chapter will have a Surpriseing twist. Time will tell if people like this twist or not.

Chapter 5: The unwanted Child.

Travesty left the room in a rage and all of the grunts followed him. Atlas walk up to Camore'radon and said I am going to enjoy tearing your pet apart then left the room. After Camore'radon was the only one left in the room he locked the door and walked over to the holding cell that had Sharadoke in it. Camore'radon looked at the small boywho was hidding in the corner of his cell and noticed that there were burn mark's on him. Camore'radon clamly said stand up child I will not hurt you. Sharadoke continued to stay in a fetl position in the corner. Camore'radon then sighed and opened the cell door. i know you can understand me Child I gave you the ability understand all languagh's. Sharadoke slowly rasied his head and could see a tall creature wearing green armor that had a similar jaw struckture to his own. Camore'radon sighed again and tossed Shardoke some clothes here put these on. I will be working so don't touch anything. Camore'radon then walked over to a monitor and began to Look through document's. Sharadoke looked at the cloth's next to him and slowly put them on. He then clamly steped out of his cell and looked around. Camore'radon noticed that Sharadoke was looking around now and simply smiled and went back to his work. Sharadkoe now convinced that Camore'radon was not going to hurt him walked up next to him and looked at the monitor. shardoke was puzzled at what the monitor said it had a list labled Doners. The Elite Doner's Name was Camore' radon and it had a list of information on it. But the Human Doner didn't even have a name this was very confusing to Sharadoke the only information that it had on it was the Doner was Male and it had a Offspring named John 117.

End of Chapter 5
If you don't know what the twist is John 117=Master Chief
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Postby Darkness_calls » Sun May 14, 2006 4:34 pm

ohhh. So they are related ? :ogle:

Good work. ^_^

I do though suggest "" when things are saying things ;)
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Re: DJ's Halo Fanfic.

Postby Dark Jedi » Sun May 14, 2006 4:36 pm

Sorry I am not very good at writeing. ;)
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Postby Darkness_calls » Sun May 14, 2006 4:38 pm

All comes with training ^_^
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Postby Ku Ku Ku \(-^.^-)/ » Sun May 14, 2006 5:28 pm

WE all know tat.
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Postby Dark Jedi » Sun May 14, 2006 5:36 pm

Ku Ku Ku \(-^.^-)/ wrote:WE all know tat.


You knew that he was related to Master Chief? :unsure:
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Postby Ku Ku Ku \(-^.^-)/ » Sun May 14, 2006 5:58 pm

no not tat.
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