Kane369: Halo: Angelic Past: Fanfic rated PG-13. pg.3-4 Ch.7

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Kane369: Halo: Angelic Past: Fanfic rated PG-13. pg.3-4 Ch.7

Postby Kane369 » Wed Apr 26, 2006 7:37 pm

((Inspired by Skorri and FOXGEAR, comes a crappy Fanfic LIKE YOU'VE NEVER SEEN BEFORE! Ok...maybe you'll think that it's good...but please leave feedback afterwards.))


Final Fantasy I: Dark Deliveries
By Kane369.

Chapter 1: Mysterious Duo
A boy woke up in a meadow, mystified on what had just
happened. He looked at his hand, to see if he was still
alive. Fortunately, he was. But his hand was gloved.
He looked at his arms, dressed in a blue robe, felt his head,
a hat. He took it off and examined it, revealing his black hair. It was yellow and
was pointed. He looked around in search of his sister.
He soon saw her, unconsious wearing a white robe with a
hood and red triangles. To his relief, she woke up, turned
to him and sighed, "Sam, what happened?" she asked,
"I don't know, Sara." he replied. The male was Sam and the
female was Sara. She was happy that Sam was with her, and Sam
felt the same emotion. They both got up and examined themselves,
"Someone's been screwing around with our clothes, Sammy." Sara said.
Sammy was Sam's nickname, and he hated it. Sam looked towards Sara,
"I'm dressed like a mage, same with you. Where are we?" he asked.

While Sam and Sara were examining their new outfits, two men were watching
them. One was wearing red armor and had brown, spikey hair, whose name was
Sirian, and the other one wore green clothing and brown gloves, along with a
green bandana, and his name was Lloyd.
"Sirian, why are those mages alone together?" Lloyd asked,
"I know it's strange...a white mage and black mage should never be alone together, a
forbidden love...how interesting. Let us go see them, Lloyd." Sirian said and
stood up, Lloyd doing the same and followed his older brother.

Once Sirian and Lloyd approached Sam and Sara, Sam turned to see them,
he walked towards them, "Excuse me, do you know where the nearest city is?"
he asked. Sirian raised his eyebrow, "You should know that, black mage" Sirian
replied, confused at Sam's question,
"I'm sorry." Sara said, approaching the two, "But we are lost, and looking for a
place to stay You see, we aren't from here." she added kindly.
Sirian looked even more confused, then looked at the port nearby, no ship. He
turned back to them, "You must be from here, or did you magically appear here
with your magic?" Sirian asked. Now itw as Sam and Sara's turn to be
confused, Sam was the one to speak up, "We're not sure actually..." he trailed
off, still very confused. Sirian turned and signaled them to follow, "I'm not
sure if you speak truthfully. But I guess I'll trust you. Now hurry up, I'll take
you to Corneilia." he said and began to walk, Lloyd, Sam, and Sara began to
follow. Still very curious on what was to come next. Sam felt something in a
pocket and took it out, it was a blue crystal. He nudged his sister and showed her
the crystal. Sara checked her pockets and took out a red one. Both amazed,
they both stopped, Sirian turned and then began to stare, and then stopped to,
"What do you have?" he demanded with a touch of anger in his voice,
"I don't know, we found it in our pockets." Sam replied, and Sirian drew his
sword,
"You lie! Why do you have the crystals of power with you!?" he yelled
questioningly, Sara showed fear and cowered in fear, same with Sam,
"We honestly don't know! Please don't hurt us!" Sara pleaded fearfully.
Sirian turned to Sam, who was cowering and smircked,
"I black mage cowering? How pathetic!" Sirian said and laughed, Lloyd
thrust himself in front of Sirian and stretched out his arms protectingly,
"Sirian, don't! They honestly do not know! Plus, we have crystals to remember?"
Lloyd reminded Sirian and pulled out a green crystal.
Sirian sighed and withdrew his sword, "You're right, Lloyd." he said and took
out a brown crystal, "We all have crystals." he added.
Sam and Sara got up, "I guess we should get going." Sam said,
"I guess we should..." Sirian replied, "warriors of light." he quickly, turned, and
continued walking. Sam , Sara and Lloyd looked at eachother with strange
expressions, then they shrugged and followed suit.

((END OF CHAPTER))
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Postby Darkness_calls » Wed Apr 26, 2006 7:40 pm

A darn good start. I'll be checking this fic from time to time. Keep it up ^_^
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Postby Kane369 » Wed Apr 26, 2006 7:42 pm

Hooray! I'll be posting the second chapter by tomorrow or friday.
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Postby Kane369 » Thu Apr 27, 2006 4:18 pm

Chapter 2: Explanation

Sirian topped again and turned, "I forgot to ask, what are your names, mages?" he asked. He wanted to know so he won't have to call them by their classes
anymore. After a bit, Sam anwsered, "My name is Sam. This is my sister Sara." Sirian was caught by surprise, and Lloyd laughed,
"I am truely sorry Sam and Sara, but Sirian and I thought that you were boyfriend and girlfriend. Not brother and sister." he said. Sara giggled a bit and smiled,
"It's OK, people do that all the time. Nothing personal." she said,
"Then why are you different mage classes? Families in this world go by the same class always." Sirian said. Sam and Sara twiddled their thumbs,
"It ain't our fault." Sara explained simply,
"See, we actually aren't from this world." Sam added hesitantly. Sirian looked at them curiously, "Then how, may I ask, did you come here?" he asked.

Sara began to explain what she and Sam remembered, It was April 27th, 2006. Sam was sitting in front of the TV playing video games, (It was Sam who explained what a TV and videogames were) and Sara was cooking when, all of
a sudden, the TV started malfunctioning, and then a warp appeared, sucking them both in.

After Sara had finished, Sirian and Lloyd stood there, very confused on
the story. It was Lloyd that finally broke the silence, "So you are from the future?" he asked, Lloyd found this amazing that somehow, Sam and Sara had come to this time, "I don't think so, probably from aanother world. Not time period." Sam replied. Sirian thought for a moment, than looked up, "This must have been the work of Lukhan the prophet." he said. Sam and Sara were now confused again,
"Who is Lukhan?" Sam asked,
"Lukhan is famed for his prophecy about the four of us, 'One day, four fiends will assume power of the crystals of power that protects our world. And when that day comes, four light warriors will come and cleanse the land of all evil.' I think that's how it goes." he said. Sam and Sara went wide-eyed in amazement,
"We aren't heroes, we're just people from another world." Sara said astonished, "Yes." Sam added, "We can't be these light warriors, it's just a coincidence that we have these crystals."
"C'mon, you HAVE to be!" Lloyd insisted, "You at LEAST have to help my big brother and I!" he added. Sam and Sara shrugged and considered it,
"I...guess we're in." Sam decided, "But we're gonna need weapons to help, I don't think I have anything on me." Sirian took a red orb out of his pocket and tossed it to Sam, and then a white one at Sara, "Use those when you need it. Just hold it out in front of you and call out it's name. Sara, yours is Cure. Sam, yours is
Fire." he said. Lloyd smiled and took out a bag he was carrying and took out a dagger and a hammer. He tossed the dagger to Sam and the hammer to Sara,
"Those won't be very helpful, but actually handy in tight situations." he said.
Sam and Sara shrugged as Siran and Lloyd turned to continue forward, Sam and Sara quickly following behind.

((END OF CHAPTER))

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Postby Darkness_calls » Thu Apr 27, 2006 4:20 pm

Great idea to let the girl have the hammer ^_^
This fic continues to be good.
Good work.
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Postby Kane369 » Thu Apr 27, 2006 4:24 pm

In FF1 white mages always have hammers.
Chapter 3 will be up by friday at least because I get off early then ^_^
EDIT: By the way, the getting sucked into the TV I don't think was very original. That part was so Gamer Elite (flash series by Metal Maverick)
AND: My fanfic is totally unpopular in the views section. W00T!
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Postby Darkness_calls » Thu Apr 27, 2006 4:28 pm

That part was so Gamer Elite (flash series by Metal Maverick)

I've seen it. And no the idea comes not from him originally it was a cartoon WAY back (in the past)
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Postby Kane369 » Thu Apr 27, 2006 4:40 pm

Oh. OK!
Still, my fanfic is so fucking unpopular.
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Postby Darkness_calls » Thu Apr 27, 2006 4:42 pm

Somebody is reading as long as the views go high up. There aren't many that comment, but you at least have me (the fan of all fics), I nearly never get any comment.
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Postby Kane369 » Thu Apr 27, 2006 4:53 pm

yay!
I wonder why people would rather look at peoples artwork rather than read fanfics :O
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Postby Darkness_calls » Thu Apr 27, 2006 4:56 pm

Pictures please the eye but words confuse it :P
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Postby Shadowed State of Mind » Thu Apr 27, 2006 5:02 pm

Then they should just read manga! I do but I read stuff without pictures when need be.

And darkness_calls, I really do read your fic. I just don't have much to comment on lest it be the predictable "excellent" or "fine" and whatnot. Sorry. But I'll comment when the time comes!

PS: That leech scares me. Period.


Oh, and it'd probably best to assume that this fic is based off of Final Fantasy? Sorry, but I kinda stray away from fics based off of shows/anime/video games that I don't play/watch lest I get confused (AKA spoiled) from the references and whatnot, but I'll TRY to read up whenever I wish. After all, I at least played Final Fantasy IV, V, and VI.
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Postby Darkness_calls » Thu Apr 27, 2006 5:06 pm

Thanks Shad, you can't know how much that pleases my heart. But I know that poeple must be reading my fic, else its views wouldn't raise so much everytime i update. + I love writing my fic so I post though there are no comments ^_^
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Postby Shadowed State of Mind » Thu Apr 27, 2006 5:06 pm

And don't let the lack of comments get you down. Frostmark barely has any from last I recall yet that thread has about 1,000 views! And believe me, I NEVER thought that my fic would get up to 5,000 views somewhere after putting up the first part of my fic (which was just a simple PPG portion [as in, no D]), and now I have 11,000 views!

So yeah, I'm sure there's someone here who's an FF fan. Perhaps you should put the title of the fic as your thread title. Just a suggestion.
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Postby Kane369 » Thu Apr 27, 2006 7:06 pm

I'll keep that in mind.
P.S:Yes, this IS based on Final Fantasy. Final Fantasy ONE i may add.

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Chapter 3: The King

Sirian stopped at the front gates to the city of Cornelia and turned to his new companions,
"We have arrived." he said and walked through. Sam and Sara were speechless at
the beauty of the city. Flowers, medievil buildings with unqiue things that made them
stand out, stuff like that. Lloyd skipped in front of them, "Welcome to Corneilia!"
he said and smiled. Sara walked ahead, examining the city by every square inch.
She turned back to her brother and smiled, "This is beautifal!" she exclaimed.
Sam also stepped forward, and then saw a little girl crying at the side of a house.
She had light green hair and wore a red dress. Sam walked towards her and got on his
knees, "What's wrong?" he asked the little girl. The girl looked up at Sam and snivelled,
"My sister has been kidnapped by a very bad man." she said. Sam raised his eyebrow,
"Who is this 'bad man'?" he asked and the girl stared at Sam,
"Do you not know? The bad man's name is Garland, once a very noble knight of Corneilia,
now he's pure evil." she replied and sobbed some more. Sam wiped a tear off the girl's
face gently, "It's OK, she'll be alright." he said, attempting to cheer her up,
"That's what my daddy says all the time." the girl said sadly, "He keeps mentioning these
light warriors will come and rescue my big sister. But I don't think that's gonna happen."
she added and continued sobbing. Sirian walked towards Sam and looked at him,
"That's Princess Amelia, the younger daughter of King Cornelius the seventh." he told
Sam and then looked towards Amelia, "It's OK Amelia, can we go see your father?" he asked.
Sara and Lloyd had come to and Amelia looked up at them, "Maybe, but I need a reason."
Amelia replied. Sara immediantly took out her red crystal and showed it toAmelia,
"What about this?" she asked and Amelia's eyes widened. She looked up at the rest as they
took out their crystals. She stood up and stopped crying. She was short, about 4'6, obviously about 8
years old. She nodded, "I'll take you people, please follow." she said, still kind of sobbing
and turned towards the castle. The others following her.

Amelia knocked on the door to her father's throne room and a guard opened the door, she nodded to
the others and they showed their crystals. The guards eyes widened with amazement,
"Come in, warriors of light, King Cornelius has been expecting you." the guard said and let them in.
King Cornelius stood up from his throne, "Amelia! What have you brought me?" he asked,
"I bring the warriors of light, father." Amelia replied and stepped aside. The party showed their
crystals to the king and his eyes widened, "Amelia...how did you find these people? You haven't been
in the wilderness again have you?" he asked and Amelia shook her head, "Nope, I was crying and the
one in blue tried to cheer me up." Cornelius walked towards Sam and examined him,
"A black mage? You sir, have an unusually kind heart for one." he said and Sam blushed,
"Are black mages not supposed to do that?" he asked and Sirian butted in,
"They say that they aren't from here your majesty." and Cornelius eyes widened again,
"Sirian my boy! Why do YOU have a crystal?" he asked,
"Long story, your highness." Sirian replied. Cornelius sighed returned to his throne,
"I hope you know the situation here warriors of light, but I have a favour for you in order
to prove yourselves." Cornelius began, "You see, my daughter, Eve, has been kidnaped by the evil knight, Garland.
What you must do, is kill him and bring my daughter back here safely Garland will be found at the Chaos Shrine
north of here. Very basic, OK?" He concluded and the light warriors nodded, "Then go, light warriors, save my daughter!"
The light warriors ran out the door and out of the castle, made preparations, and set out to the Chaos Shrine.

((END OF CHAPTER))
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Postby Darkness_calls » Fri Apr 28, 2006 5:23 am

A good chapter ^_^
Your fic reminds my of 8-bit theatre on newgrounds.
"Welcome to Cornilia" lol
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Postby Diesel Kane » Fri Apr 28, 2006 9:48 am

Errr sorry to burst your bubble..."Kane". But only one art thread per member.
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Postby Kane369 » Fri Apr 28, 2006 2:46 pm

Oh... ^_^; I knew the one art thread per member...but I didn't know that fan fics and art fell into the same category.
Sorry about that.

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How about this, we delete this one, and the fanfic will go into my crappy art thread with lots of crappy art in it.
OR
We can delete the posts in that one, and then I'll delete the thread completely and I will never do anything on paint that will be posted on this forum.
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Postby Darkness_calls » Fri Apr 28, 2006 2:49 pm

Have this thread and add you art here, never talk about you own drawings that way ^_^
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Postby Kane369 » Fri Apr 28, 2006 2:52 pm

No...seriously...they're horrible. I'm better on paper though ^_^
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Postby Darkness_calls » Fri Apr 28, 2006 2:55 pm

Then you should buy a scanner lol
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Postby Kane369 » Fri Apr 28, 2006 2:57 pm

Don't have the money.

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Plus...my parents wouldn't get one anyway.
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Postby Darkness_calls » Fri Apr 28, 2006 3:00 pm

That must suck ... Not having the money I mean, nothing techno in my room is from my parents, I bough everything myself ;)
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Postby Kane369 » Fri Apr 28, 2006 3:22 pm

Chapter Four: Garland

Sam, Sara, Lloyd and Sirian arrived at the Chaos shrine and looked up to examine it,
"Very gothic." Sara said and Sirian shrugged,
"Yeah, I guess." Sirian said and walked in. Lloyd stared curiously at his brother, but followed anyway with Sam and Sara.
When they entered, Sirian was already at a door just ahead of them and he opened it, entering the room.
Sam and Sara entered as well and their eyes widened in shock, there, Sirian had a knife and had raised it...
to an unconsious Sirian. The imposter Sirian turned and grinned evily, "Say goodbye to Sirian, Lloyd."
he said and Lloyd looked confused, then drew HIS sword and charged,
"Stop, Lloyd, or I will kill your brother." the imposter ordered and ripped off his mask to reveal a pale face
with dark blue hair, "I am assuming who I am light warriors...I...am Garland." he said and laughed.
Sam drew out his red orb threateningly and Garland laughed again, "Foolish boy, do it and I'll kill Sirian, make a move
and I'll kill him, so put that away." Garland said evily and Sam growled and put it away. Garland walked over to a desk
with a horned helmet on it and put it on, "If you want to save Sirian and Eve, you will have to kill me. But I won't go without
fight, so...I do wish that the gifts I gave you will help." Garland said again and drew a longsword, smirking behind his dark helmet.
Sara took out a bright yellow orb and screamed, "PROTECT!" and aimed it at Lloyd, Garland charged towards Sam, but Sam
stopped him by drawing a light blue orb, muttering, "Blizzard." and froze Garland in his tracks. Garland sneered as he
struggled to break free, but Lloyd charged and slashed Garland's back, then stabbed him in the hand which held the long sword.
Garland screamed in pain and Sara nodded, drew her hammer, and smashed Garlands other hand, Garland screaming even harder.
The real Sirian woke up, dazed on what had happened, then stood up, amazed to see Garland frozen and being beaten by his brother,
Sam, and Sara. Sirian ran towards them, stole the longsword from Garland and stabbed him in the back of the head, everyone was
amazed at the sudden act as Garland died instantly, and fell to the ground, unfrozen. Sirian withdrew his sword and looked behind him, to see the
unconsious princess stirr and wake up. She stared at Garland's corpse and stood up, staring at Sirian and the others,
"Thank you for killing him." she said and a tear dropped down her eye, "My name is Eve, princess of Cornilia. May we return to
my kingdom?" she added and everyone nodded, turning to the door and left the Chaos shrine, straight home to Cornilia.

((END OF CHAPTER))

Oh yeah...I just remembered; The princess's name is actually Sara, but we'll call her Eve because it's a much more suitable name, since there is already someone who goes by Sara.

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My parents wouldn't get one because they wouldn't know what the hell to do with it :P
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Postby Darkness_calls » Fri Apr 28, 2006 3:25 pm

Man Garland got whacked lol
A most promising update ^_^
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