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Sigment Kurosai wrote:My, what a... lovely portrait of his father. Gotta say, for a second I thought he was seeing him in the mirror.
GrimlyLoveGunner wrote:]Oh, but also- it was actually the page before you mentioned it where I thought things seemed rushed. Like, if we had slowed down the dialogue and had more: shocked - becoming - realization that would have strengthened the impact too. Instead there was a sense of becoming fatigued while reading it all. (And there's some parts where the dialogue is hard to read.) But you only had one typo in the new batch of pages. Saying 'Rely' instead of 'Real' (I think, now I can't seem to find it.) And one minor part where with 'Beesides' I think that's it. 8D
GrimlyLoveGunner wrote:Shizuni's Gabu's girl right? Forgot about her. Her hair looks different.
GrimlyLoveGunner wrote: Nice that she has a cool backstory. I'd thought of her as an annoying girlish girl that just felt she had better, less dirty things to do. XDDD
I'm not sure how to help you with this- but They look kind of odd sitting in the chairs. Like, they're really thin. They're also sitting there just drinking tea, without a table to set it on in site. But maybe that's a cultural thing? mmm.
GrimlyLoveGunner wrote:And I don't know if you brought it up ever and I just forgot but why do Dharem have cracks in their skin? I thought they were all zombie corpses when I first looked at the comic. XD
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