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Sat Oct 05, 2013 4:02 pm
Sorry, pal. Your girlfriend's a twisted and sadistic daemon. Them's the breaks.
Sat Oct 05, 2013 9:36 pm
Hmm, mighty suspicious of how Gabu seems to be drawing his sword. At first I thought that it was Mizuka but looking back I see that it was Gabu. Confusing since Kunaga does indeed seem to be a daemon. This will be interesting.
Sun Oct 06, 2013 1:59 pm
Hmmm.... what's missing?
An explosion, It kindof just streams straight into them trying to make their way through the fire. We didn't really get to see how severe it was and thus surprise was alittle lost.
Hnnnnmmmmmg...... hmmmm.... what'll happen now?........ huuuuuh....... hnn..... hng..... hnnng.... hnggphff.......
Oh, the handsigns are reminiscent of Naruto. Trolololololol. 8D
DAEMON GIRLFRIEND ELIMINATION NO JUTSU.
*Starts singing Demon Girlfriend* Shuuuuuuuttehfuk uuuuuuup I'mnottooexcited~
Tue Oct 08, 2013 3:39 pm
Well, the proverbial shit just hit that fan really hard this time...
Tue Oct 08, 2013 4:23 pm
What he said.
I'm a bit confused by the last page though..wasn't Rena right next to Mizuka a little while ago? Or is that her turning around and leaving him there?
Tue Oct 08, 2013 4:34 pm
So... despite the fact that the love of his life has just revealed that it's all a lie... he attacked his best friend to prevent him from hurting her? I'm as inclined to laugh as Kunaga is right now. In a good way, of course.
Wed Oct 09, 2013 1:32 pm
Careful with the dynamic panels! It wonks the eyes a little trying to follow them!
It looks like a page is missing- or it's just going fast. I had to re-read the pages to realize what happened.
Datz fucked up......
OoooOOOooOOoooooh~ What'll happen next? pyscho-girlfriend no jutsu.
Rena? Rena? Did you leave the room? R U not seeing this? I think now is the time to kill the Prince for the greater good, dear. It would be the- Oh, I just remembered the implied plot twist hinted at earlier.
Dammit! So.... flippin.... INTENSE.
Wed Oct 09, 2013 1:36 pm
Holy crap, what did I just read?
Wed Oct 09, 2013 2:52 pm
Actually I just made an unthoughtout scene transition and accidently posted one page of the next scene, so this will have caused a lot of damage indeed related to confusion. But basically it's meant to end with Kunaga laughing manically, then moves onto the next scene with Arch Rena walking through the corridors.
Thanks for all the comments anyways, I was hoping to get a few more after then plot twist of chapter 3. Now for chapter 4 which will be just as dark.
Also hope people are noticing adjustments to the way I do shine and the eyes. Got a lot of help from someone, so hoping it's paying out. Again thanks everyone.
Thu Oct 10, 2013 7:44 pm
Love is a tricky thing, it is.
BTW, real quick, the word I think you meant on the first page is "detained", which is like saying "imprisoned". "Retained" kinda means that something was kept in one's possession. Like "He retained his sanity" or something. Anyway, good pages.
Fri Oct 11, 2013 12:27 am
Your artwork has been gradually improving (I looked back to your earlier pages, it is really noticeable how far you've come. Nice work!).
Something really minor though, you forgot to draw Rena's vein things on her face in two of the panels. (First panel in first page, and Fourth panel in second page).
Hmm, is this about his love for Kunaga? Or is it about wanting to ensure the survival of his child? Or could it be some mixture of both?
The first thing that comes to mind is this quote when I read this page: "Oh, what a tangled web we weave, when first we practice to deceive"
I'm sensing that things are just going to get more and more twisted as the story goes on, and I'm looking forward to it c:
Sat Oct 12, 2013 7:58 am
Awesome, thanks for highlighting that Sigment Kurosai.
And thanks for highlighting my improvement, I'm so relieved to hear someone inform me of that, I did get it from the Head of art of my island's community, but glad to hear it from a reader.
Also darn it! Hate it when I do that, forgetting to draw the feckin' veins on one of my characters again!
Anyways, here's the conclusion of chapter 3
Sat Oct 12, 2013 10:37 am
Six months? Had the other three already passed since conception, or do they not have to wait as long? I may need to go back and see if I'm asking a stupid question.
Sun Oct 13, 2013 3:40 pm
Firstly, I must get this out:
HOLY FUCK. Does that thing have two heads or did you do a zoom-in? If you did a zoom-in then you have to make it more distinct, if it has two heads then OH MY GAWD THAT HAD TO BE PAINFUL.
Those little HORNS.
XD But yeah- they're right- your art is improving. The first thing I noticed when I looked at the new pages were DAYUM Rena's so cute! XD
The panel where she's looking up at Mizu for the steps though- they're proportioned wrong- not to mention those must be some damn steep steps- but she's bigger the him again. You'd want to distance the whole room more and just make them real smaller.
Feel bad for him. Though, and wondering what'll happen next. Is the story almost over? or is sicker shit about to hit the fan?
YOU UPDATED WHILE I WAS TYPING, DAMMIT. So, those three chapters were a PROLOGUE? Dayum, son. I'm excited now. 8D
Sun Oct 13, 2013 4:31 pm
Gah, frustration at it's finest, no I was experimenting with panels there, Zyuu only has one head.
And great to know it is improving, it's defiantly what I'm wanting out of this and how is Rena cute?
Though the proportion thing's defiantiatly a frustration as I thought I had got it! But apparently I didn't, but heck at least I'm practicing... Still frustrating though
And thanks GrimlyLoveGunner.
Sun Oct 13, 2013 4:54 pm
Sooner or later, Grimly may wind up as one of those "Number One Fans" you keep hearin' about.
Mon Oct 14, 2013 1:57 pm
*Sees Sigments Comment*
*Starts laughing hysterically, running low on breath*
*Notices own avatar of Tootie*
*Laughs more. Earns weird looks from Mother*
and how is Rena cute?
Not sure how to explain it. Just the look of her profile looks improved and her eyes were real clear and pretty.
Also, try and use just a little more speed lines. It'll make it look less stiff when character move from page to page.
Ahahaha~ My comic'll probably be up tomorrow. I'm so jealous- because since you do yours digitally you're able to get everything even and straight, but in mine you can 120% tell whenever I didn't use a ruler. And I think I lost the ability to keep speech bubbles round halfway through when I was trying to focus on characters. XDDDD
Mon Oct 14, 2013 5:13 pm
Oh! But I thought you were my number one fan Sigment Kurosai!... Ah well GrimlyGunLover's just as good anyways
Hm, going to have to look into the eye thing then. Just to see how that's made things so.
Also don't know about what you mean by speed lines?
P.S. This may seem random, but what are your star signs, mostly curious for a psychological purpose. (I study Higher Psychology and Socialogy at college at the minute)
Tue Oct 15, 2013 2:03 pm
I'm a Virgo. Just barely- My Birthday's August 25th.
Which basically makes me a finicky control freak. XDDDD
I suppose in areas. >.> My mom is too and she's the clean freak kind.
Funny thing is that in Japan people look at blood types like we do zodiac signs. 8D In that I'm an O so that makes meeeee- calm and thoughtful, I think.
As for speed lines- I mean like little lines darting in the direction the run/ little lines outlining the area they just moved from. I thought it might make things look less stiff when they make little movements panel to panel. Find a action manga with a style you like and see what I mean. But don't over do it because then it'll look cluttered.
(And my comic will be up TOMORROW from NOW. I have no perspective of time. It takes way longer to type text then I thought. orz )
Tue Oct 15, 2013 2:13 pm
Apparently, I'm an Aries.
Tue Oct 15, 2013 2:54 pm
I'll need to work on these speed lines though, they look like they'd more create a mess than do good, but I'll probably see if it's something I can actually work on.
Tue Oct 15, 2013 3:27 pm
Hmm, so Kunaga and Mizuka are married huh? It adds another reason as to why Mizuka wouldn't want anyone else to know about Kunaga.
So does this mean that even if the Divinity hadn't warned Mizuka ahead of time, she would have been discovered anyway since the baby has horns on his head (also the whole 6 month pregnancy thing (unless dharem also have shorter pregnancies?))? Or would she have somehow concealed them?
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