NOX wrote:Captain's Log - 9/7/2009
Pandora's box was not filled with candy.
Mastermind001 wrote:Well if there is too many Surgers, I made a Guardian, if you want to me to switch.
She really has no motivation. She just does what she wants. She's distracted by a lot of things, I can't list them all. And I was using a play on words with "Mind Over Matter". She thinks faster than she moves, though she moves fast.
Vegedus wrote:She really has no motivation. She just does what she wants. She's distracted by a lot of things, I can't list them all. And I was using a play on words with "Mind Over Matter". She thinks faster than she moves, though she moves fast.
That's still not at all descriptive of the Trait in question. The names need to be evocative of what the trait does for easy reference during the game.
Sigh... No one "does what ever they want". It's a common roleplaying fallacy among newbie roleplayers who worship Chaotic Neutral. Everyone has motivations. Everyone has something they want to do, even if it's just "enjoy life".
For instance, right now I want to pass my exams and get a good education in the long run, and a job I'd like to have later on. You, yourself, seem fairly driven by your libido. Some people want to earn lots of money, some want to eat lots of different kinds of food, some want to travel the world. That's all examples of motivation. Your character can't not have one.
Besides, your new Trait 5 is even worse than the previous one. A Trait that's only relevant while she's sleeping isn't useful at all.
Vegedus wrote:Hm, people keep popping up. Cool.
I don't have a lot to say, actually. It's a fine character and you seem to have a good handle on the setting.
I'd normally like the Trait 5 to be a bit more specific, but I guess it works with his impulsive nature.
It's cool that you want to reserve your extra trait, but note that you'll get chances to get new traits as the RP progress, so you don't have to hold on to it too long.
The personality section is a bit muddled and confusing since he's both shy, cunning, stubborn, rational, goal-oriented, emotional affected, impulsive and idealistic. Perhaps try to draw some clearer, broader strokes about how he is, and mention what some of those ideals would be.
Also, just to confirm, he's currently unemployed, vengeful at Cytek (but not at Surgers), and haven't yet, but might join a rebel group when he finds out why they are there, correct?
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