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Re: Dreamscape OOC Open

Postby Villain » Thu May 05, 2011 2:30 pm

NO! Save your purity Fummo!
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Re: Dreamscape OOC Open

Postby Karo » Thu May 05, 2011 5:02 pm

Fummofu wrote:Lol

Thanks Karo.
I'm gonna look at MLS's one...

Look at hers, then compare it to everyone else's. Your CS should look like everyone else's.
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Re: Dreamscape OOC Open

Postby Belwicket » Thu May 05, 2011 5:27 pm

Well, I've added everything I could think of from what people have told me, what else do I need?
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Re: Dreamscape OOC Open

Postby Asmodai » Thu May 05, 2011 5:29 pm

You did not add everything we told you... in fact, you pretty much did absolutely nothing with the advice given
If you had really taken our advice, you would've had a good CS by now
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Re: Dreamscape OOC Open

Postby Belwicket » Thu May 05, 2011 5:36 pm

I read it and wrote what I thought you meant.
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Re: Dreamscape OOC Open

Postby Villain » Thu May 05, 2011 5:41 pm

You wrote 2 paragraphs of description (Pictures aren't worth shit)? Did the invisible sniper mods delete it beforre we could read? Did they delete the skills to? And the fighting style?
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Re: Dreamscape OOC Open

Postby Belwicket » Thu May 05, 2011 5:51 pm

I'm constantly editing her, trying to think of stuff and what's not there is unfinished.
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Re: Dreamscape OOC Open

Postby Iris » Thu May 05, 2011 5:56 pm

Then you should only notify us once you've completed your CS. Try to make at least two paragraphs in your appearance, my own has three.

If you need some help with that here is my suggestion on how to separate each paragraph. My opening paragraph focuses on his physical description so his eye color, skin, hair, etc. It is then followed by what clothes he wears, what state they are in and why they are like that. The final paragraph is for stand outs, so for me it's the reasons to why he normally carries so few items with him (when he's drunk he 'accidentally' loses his items.
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Re: Dreamscape OOC Open

Postby Belwicket » Thu May 05, 2011 6:02 pm

That makes sense. I'll edit her again.
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Re: Dreamscape OOC Open

Postby Asmodai » Thu May 05, 2011 6:07 pm

See, you don't take advice. We've told you numerous times to take a look at our CSs to get an idea of how to do it properly, and you clearly didn't do it. It took yet another explanation to get you to understand it.

And even now I'm wondering just how far you're really going to take that advice
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Re: Dreamscape OOC Open

Postby Belwicket » Thu May 05, 2011 6:25 pm

I'm working on her right now. I'm trying to think of anything I could add, I've looked at everyone else and thought of nothing.
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Re: Dreamscape OOC Open

Postby Asmodai » Thu May 05, 2011 6:26 pm

Then you're horribly uncreative.... see your character in your mind, and describe what you see
How hard could that possibly be?
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Re: Dreamscape OOC Open

Postby Zelosse » Thu May 05, 2011 8:13 pm

I like cupcakes.
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Re: Dreamscape OOC Open

Postby Villain » Thu May 05, 2011 9:08 pm

I like turtles
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Re: Dreamscape OOC Open

Postby Belwicket » Thu May 05, 2011 9:54 pm

Asmodai wrote:Then you're horribly uncreative.... see your character in your mind, and describe what you see
How hard could that possibly be?

I don't see every little detail.
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Re: Dreamscape OOC Open

Postby Glacier » Thu May 05, 2011 10:21 pm

If you want a skin and bones version of what it takes to get in look at my CS here Nathyne Hawkstrider

I spent most of my time on the skills section, as it's pretty important, but the other areas are bare minimum.
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Re: Dreamscape OOC Open

Postby Belwicket » Thu May 05, 2011 11:22 pm

I edited her again, think she's close to acceptable.
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Re: Dreamscape OOC Open

Postby Asmodai » Fri May 06, 2011 5:17 am

I have to say, you're getting there... although her skills irk me, why does she have so many mage like spells when she's a rogue?
I'd advice you to take less magic type skills, and focus more on physical skills. Think Dash, Sprint, Throwing Knives and all that
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Re: Dreamscape OOC Open

Postby Glacier » Fri May 06, 2011 11:33 am

Nice improvements to your CS... MLS
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Re: Dreamscape OOC Open

Postby Villain » Fri May 06, 2011 8:13 pm

Hooray! MLS Is taking leaps and bounds! However I'd have to agree with how Mage like you are so I'm just going to straight up help you on that.

   Instead of having energy tornados have a semi thin metal string attached to the end of eah onenof your weapons. Tornado would instead be spinning one of your weapons in a tornado like fashion (either in a circle or even doing X slashes with them). Double tornado shouldn't need explaining if you payed attention to what I said already. Add the string in the weapons catagory and simply state that she has an extra bundle strapped to her side like a cowboy and his lasso incase the strig ever breaks. There the most obvious magic ability is gone.   
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Re: Dreamscape OOC Open

Postby Belwicket » Sat May 07, 2011 4:05 am

I was thinking that over the course of the RP she'd possibly get new weapons by the time she was able to use the Tornado skill. However, if that's the only thing I have to change, I will edit her again if the GM says so, as well as anything else she tells me to.
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Re: Dreamscape OOC Open

Postby Villain » Sat May 07, 2011 9:11 am

Karo's a she.
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Re: Dreamscape OOC Open

Postby Belwicket » Mon May 09, 2011 2:09 pm

Alright, right now i'm trying to think of better powers for some of the others I don't like as much.
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Re: Dreamscape OOC Open

Postby Karo » Mon May 09, 2011 7:59 pm

It's marginally more acceptable. What she looks like physically needs more explanation, and your skills thus far are absolute garbage.
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Re: Dreamscape OOC Open

Postby Belwicket » Mon May 09, 2011 10:05 pm

I don't know what else to do about her appearance. Her powers, however, I have many ideas but I don't know which ones would be acceptable.
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