X.X Well, it's better than before. I'll show you the needed corrections, though. (Try to learn from them and see what you need to do.)
"okay,ill do a proper sentance." should be, "Okay, I'll do a proper sentence." Things like names of people and places need to be capitalized, as well as 'I's. And you need a space after that period.
"Do you like this sentance, shiro" should be, "Do you like this sentence, Shiro?" When asking a question, the period at a sentence's end should become a qeustion mark.