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My L33T Fan Fiction

Postby Acktoo » Sun Nov 21, 2004 8:43 pm

This is a fan fiction that I felt like writing after reading bleedman's comic. It contains some familiar characters (the ones in the comic) and some not so familiar (from my imagination). This will be done in installments; there should be something added every day.
If you want to comment on the story, you're more than welcome to.

One clear day, the Powerpuff Girls were playing in the park after a long day of school. Everybody at the park was having fun, except one little boy. He kept on staring out in the distance, away from Megaville. Bubbles noticed this and walked up to him.
"So, what cha' lookin' at?" asked Bubbles.
"The dark shadow," answered the boy, not looking at her.
Bubbles looked to where the boy was facing. Off in the distance, she could see a dark shape slowly moving closer, looming in the sky like an ominous dark figure. Bubbles quickly alerted her sisters, and the three immediately flew towards it to investigate.
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Re: My L33T Fan Fiction

Postby Al Calnos » Sun Nov 21, 2004 8:58 pm

are you going to...uh..continue on with this...or something? o.O
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Re: My L33T Fan Fiction

Postby Redstar » Sun Nov 21, 2004 9:01 pm

acktoo2001 wrote:One clear day, the Powerpuff Girls were playing in the park after a long day of school. Everybody at the park was having fun, except one little boy. He kept on staring out in the distance, away from Megaville. Bubbles noticed this and walked up to him. "So, what cha' lookin' at?" asked Bubbles. "The dark shadow," answered the boy, not looking at her. Bubbles looked to where the boy was facing. Off in the distance, she could see a dark shape slowly moving closer, looming in the sky like an ominous dark figure. Bubbles quickly alerted her sisters, and the three immediately flew towards it to investigate.

I would ask that next time you post like this you add a little bit more, before you even consider posting. It's common sense that people like to look at something and not be bothered by something that is simply a trifle.
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Re: My L33T Fan Fiction

Postby ikiteruyokazu » Sun Nov 21, 2004 9:44 pm

r u suppose to continue for her and make it continue like on ponju or are we suppose to wait for a paragraph everysingle day?
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Re: My L33T Fan Fiction

Postby Acktoo » Mon Nov 22, 2004 8:00 pm

I would have written more, but something unexpexted came up. And, yes, it will be in installments. It says it in the opening post! READ DUMMIES!!

Added after 43 minutes:

The Powerpuff Girls flew closer and closer to the object in question. Once they got close enough, they saw it was some sort of silver flying skyscraper.
One of the inhabitants of the syscraper saw the girls and alerted his boss.
"Uh, boss?"
"Yes?" asked his leader.
"There are three little flying girls heading towards us."
"Yeah, and?"
"Well, shouldn't we shoot them down or something?"
"Why? They're just little girls. Just ignore them. We need to find a place to land."
"Okay... But I have a bad feeling about those girls," he said to himself.
The skyscraper kept on moving, ignoring the girls. They followed it to the mountains, where it landed. The girls hovered out of sight enough to see the syscraper, but not to be seen themselves. Two automatic doors opened, and two figures stepped out.
The two looked similar in build, each one little over four feet tall, and each one had a perfectly circular head. One of them was dressed in silver metallic armor, with a large gun on his back. The other was dressed in a black ninja suit with two katana blades under his red cape.
"Well, Ling," said the one with the gun, "we're here."
"Yes, Max," started the other. "Now it's time to see if this so called 'Megaville' has what we want."
Max turned his head.
"Boss..."
"Yes?"
"Those girls are here. They're spying on us from behind that mountain."
He pointed towards the girls.
"Let them spy. I don't really care. Let's just get a scope on this place, insider style. Got the holos?"
"Yes." Max brought out two watches from the building. He kept one and gave the other to his boss. Max turned his on and a holo of a tall, black haired man in street clothes engulfed him. Ling turned on his and he instantly became a bald man with a medium build, wearing a business suit.
Ling beckoned to the girls. Not sure what to make of the situation yet, the girls flew down to them, but at enough of a distance to evade any random assault from the two figures.
"Um..Excuse me.." Ling started, in a fake tone of kindness. "We are new here, and we need to find the Megaville elementary. We are new teachers."
Buttercup was suspicious.
"But why do you have holograms to disguise yourselves with?" she asked.
Max looked at Ling.
"Simple," Ling answered. "Our species is extremely ugly, and we do not want to scare our future students."
"Oh... I guess we could take you there, then..."
The Powerpuff girls led Max and Ling to their school, currently fooled by Ling's ersatz kindness. Unbeknowest to the girls, these two were here to liberate all of of the riches from Megaville.

Added after 5 hours 12 minutes:

Ten minutes later, the girls and the two men arrived at the Megaville elementary. The girls left them there and they flew back towards the park to play some more. The two disguised men made their way towards the principal's office. On their way, they passed Sensei Jack, the school's gym teacher. He stopped them and inquired about their purpose at the school. He had never seen them before.
Ling brought up his fabricated "teaching" story, and Jack let them pass, even though he and Ling were secretly glaring daggers at each other. Ling and Max reported to the principal's office, Ling making himself a history teacher, and making Max another gym teacher. The principal, fooled to a fault, let them begin that Monday.
Two days passed, and Monday came. The two newcomers had explored the city during the weekend, making note of various banks and jewlerey stores. Now, they had to teach a bunch of first graders. They made their way towards the school, but a crowd had gathered in the street, blocking their path. They were surrounding a large lizard-like creature who had apparently fell from the sky. Apparently, no one noticed the spaceship hovering high in the sky that he had fell from. Ling and Max made their way to the front of the crowd, pushing and shoving people out of their way. They could not be late for class. They passed the lizard, but Max glanced at it and stopped, grabbing his boss.
"What is it?" asked Ling as he turned around. "What do you- Oh. Hell no," he said as he saw the creature.
The creature looked back at them, but it did not recognize Ling and Max, thanks to their holographic disguises. LIng and Max quickly made their way through the crowd, to get out of the sight of the creature.
"How did he find us?" asked Max, referring to the lizard.
"I don't know... But as of now he doesn't recognize us. Let's keep it that way."
The two made their way to the school.
The lizard-like creature in the middle of the street was actually a dinosaur, a velociraptor, from Ling's and Max's homeworld. It's name was Velociraptor Unknown, and he was Ling's arch nemesis. Somehow he had ended up in Megaville at the same time as the false teachers.
The Powerpuff Girls saw the same crowd of people on their way to school, and they flew down to investigate.
"Look!" exclaimed Bubbles. "It's a cute lizard! Let's say hi!" She flew closer to Velociraptor.
"Wait, Bubbles!" started Blossom. "It could be mean! It might hurt you!"
But it was too late. Bubbles had already flew down to greet Velociraptor.
"Hi!"
"Um..Hi. Can you tell me where I am?" asked Velociraptor.
"You're in Megaville! I'm Bubbles. Nice to meet you."
"Good. I'm supposed to be here as an exchange student. Nice to meet you too. My name is Velociraptor."
Bubbles beckoned to her sisters. "It's okay! The cute dinosaur is nice!"
Blossom and Buttercup flew down. Buttercup saterd at Velociraptor.
"I don't trust it," said Buttercup. "It looks like one of the Gangreen Gang, or one of Mojo's crazy creations." She glared at Velociraptor. "Do you know Mojo Jojo?" she asked.
"Buttercup, leave it alone!" berated Blossom. She turned back to Velociraptor "Can we help you?"
"Yeah. Could you fly me back into my space ship? It's about fifty feet above here."
So, the girls flew Velociraptor back to his ship, and then bolted off to school.
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Re: My L33T Fan Fiction

Postby Acktoo » Tue Nov 23, 2004 7:31 pm

:cussing: :brickwall: Damn. My internet is screwing up. Bad. I'll catch up tomorrow.
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Postby chinesetea » Wed Nov 24, 2004 9:16 am

why don't you try writing and proofing and working on an entire chapter, coming to a good cliffhanger of a stop place and then post entire chapters? a meaty update every week is better than a little snack every day.
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Postby Acktoo » Wed Nov 24, 2004 12:58 pm

See! This is the kind of criticism I want! That actually sounds like a good idea. I was making it up as I go, though. I'll do that. The rest of Chapter One should be done by next Monday.
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Postby Cali Defender » Wed Nov 24, 2004 6:11 pm

YAY! for smart ppl!!!!!
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Postby Acktoo » Wed Nov 24, 2004 7:08 pm

Caligula wrote:YAY! for smart ppl!!!!!


WTF? o.O
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Postby Karuma » Wed Nov 24, 2004 7:08 pm

Acktoo, this is why you make such a good RPer, you can write well.
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Postby Acktoo » Wed Nov 24, 2004 7:29 pm

Why, thank you, Kalma. I really hope that you and some of the others from the *deep breath* PPGDRPG thread will at least try to join my RPG.
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Postby Karuma » Wed Nov 24, 2004 7:42 pm

You see, we jump so many pages because we have these dialogs. Now, if everyone were posting less posts, but also bigger posts, it would take just as long for you to read through them, but they would jump way less pages.
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Re: My L33T Fan Fiction

Postby Acktoo » Wed Nov 24, 2004 7:52 pm

Yeah, true....but with the people that are in it now, I don't think I'll have to worry about that too much. Plus, people tend to be more overwhelmed by not the number of words on the pages, but the number of pages themselves.

And if you want to talk about RPing, talk about it on my RPG page, dammit! >.@
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Postby Karuma » Wed Nov 24, 2004 7:53 pm

I'll just chalk that remark up to the laziness.
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Postby Acktoo » Wed Nov 24, 2004 7:55 pm

I totally agree.
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Re: My L33T Fan Fiction

Postby Acktoo » Mon Nov 29, 2004 2:21 pm

Here's Chapter One, uninterrupted:
One clear day, the Powerpuff Girls were playing in the park after a long day of school. Everybody at the park was having fun, except one little boy. He kept on staring out in the distance, away from Megaville. Bubbles noticed this and walked up to him.
"So, what cha' lookin' at?" asked Bubbles.
"The dark shadow," answered the boy, not looking at her.
Bubbles looked to where the boy was facing. Off in the distance, she could see a dark shape slowly moving closer, looming in the sky like an ominous dark figure. Bubbles quickly alerted her sisters, and the three immediately flew towards it to investigate.
The Powerpuff Girls flew closer and closer to the object in question. Once they got close enough, they saw it was some sort of silver flying skyscraper.
One of the inhabitants of the syscraper saw the girls and alerted his boss.
"Uh, boss?"
"Yes?" asked his leader.
"There are three little flying girls heading towards us."
"Yeah, and?"
"Well, shouldn't we shoot them down or something?"
"Why? They're just little girls. Just ignore them. We need to find a place to land."
"Okay... But I have a bad feeling about those girls," he said to himself.
The skyscraper kept on moving, ignoring the girls. They followed it to the mountains, where it landed. The girls hovered out of sight enough to see the syscraper, but not to be seen themselves. Two automatic doors opened, and two figures stepped out.
The two looked similar in build, each one little over four feet tall, and each one had a perfectly circular head. One of them was dressed in silver metallic armor, with a large gun on his back. The other was dressed in a black ninja suit with two katana blades under his red cape.
"Well, Ling," said the one with the gun, "we're here."
"Yes, Max," started the other. "Now it's time to see if this so called 'Megaville' has what we want."
Max turned his head.
"Boss..."
"Yes?"
"Those girls are here. They're spying on us from behind that mountain."
He pointed towards the girls.
"Let them spy. I don't really care. Let's just get a scope on this place, insider style. Got the holos?"
"Yes." Max brought out two watches from the building. He kept one and gave the other to his boss. Max turned his on and a holo of a tall, black haired man in street clothes engulfed him. Ling turned on his and he instantly became a bald man with a medium build, wearing a business suit.
Ling beckoned to the girls. Not sure what to make of the situation yet, the girls flew down to them, but at enough of a distance to evade any random assault from the two figures.
"Um..Excuse me.." Ling started, in a fake tone of kindness. "We are new here, and we need to find the Megaville elementary. We are new teachers."
Buttercup was suspicious.
"But why do you have holograms to disguise yourselves with?" she asked.
Max looked at Ling. He always had answers.
"Simple," Ling answered. "Our species is extremely ugly, and we do not want to scare our future students."
"Oh... I guess we could take you there, then..."
The Powerpuff girls led Max and Ling to their school, currently fooled by Ling's ersatz kindness. Unbeknowest to the girls, these two were here to liberate all of of the riches from Megaville.
Ten minutes later, the girls and the two men arrived at the Megaville elementary. The girls left them there and they flew back towards the park to play some more. The two disguised men made their way towards the principal's office. On their way, they passed Sensei Jack, the school's gym teacher. He stopped them and inquired about their purpose at the school. He had never seen them before.
Ling brought up his fabricated "teaching" story, and Jack let them pass, even though he and Ling were secretly glaring daggers at each other. Ling and Max reported to the principal's office, Ling making himself a history teacher, and making Max another gym teacher. The principal, fooled to a fault, let them begin that Monday.
Two days passed, and Monday came. The two newcomers had explored the city during the weekend, making note of various banks and jewlerey stores. Now, they had to teach a bunch of first graders. They made their way towards the school, but a crowd had gathered in the street, blocking their path. They were surrounding a large lizard-like creature who had apparently fell from the sky. Apparently, no one noticed the spaceship hovering high in the sky that he had fell from. Ling and Max made their way to the front of the crowd, pushing and shoving people out of their way. They could not be late for class. They passed the lizard, but Max glanced at it and stopped, grabbing his boss.
"What is it?" asked Ling as he turned around. "What do you- Oh. Hell no," he said as he saw the creature.
The creature looked back at them, but it did not recognize Ling and Max, thanks to their holographic disguises. LIng and Max quickly made their way through the crowd, to get out of the sight of the creature.
"How did he find us?" asked Max, referring to the lizard.
"I don't know... But as of now he doesn't recognize us. Let's keep it that way."
The two made their way to the school.
The lizard-like creature in the middle of the street was actually a dinosaur, a velociraptor, from Ling's and Max's homeworld. It's name was Velociraptor Unknown, and he was Ling's arch nemesis. Somehow he had ended up in Megaville at the same time as the false teachers.
The Powerpuff Girls saw the same crowd of people on their way to school, and they flew down to investigate.
"Look!" exclaimed Bubbles. "It's a cute lizard! Let's say hi!" She flew closer to Velociraptor.
"Wait, Bubbles!" started Blossom. "It could be mean! It might hurt you!"
But it was too late. Bubbles had already flew down to greet Velociraptor.
"Hi!"
"Um..Hi. Can you tell me where I am?" asked Velociraptor.
"You're in Megaville! I'm Bubbles. Nice to meet you."
"Good. I'm supposed to be here as an exchange student. Nice to meet you too. My name is Velociraptor."
Bubbles beckoned to her sisters. "It's okay! The cute dinosaur is nice!"
Blossom and Buttercup flew down. Buttercup saterd at Velociraptor.
"I don't trust it," said Buttercup. "It looks like one of the Gangreen Gang, or one of Mojo's crazy creations." She glared at Velociraptor. "Do you know Mojo Jojo?" she asked.
"Buttercup, leave it alone!" berated Blossom. She turned back to Velociraptor "Can we help you?"
"Yeah. Could you fly me back into my space ship? It's about fifty feet above here."
So, the girls flew Velociraptor back to his ship, and then bolted off to school.
Three minutes later, history class started. Ling had walked in while most of his class was carousing and acting out of hand. Ling silently walked to the chalkboard, grabbed the yardstick and ran its metal edge down the chalkboard, making such an atrocious noise to make the kids shut up.
"Hello, class," Ling said as he looked at his students. "I am your new teacher, Marcus Valentine. Your previous teacher is... indisposed... as of the moment."
A student shot up his hand.
"Yes?" Ling adressed the child.
"Can I use the restroom?" the student asked.
"I don't know, can you?"
"Grr.. May I use the restroom?"
"That's better."
"So, may I?"
"No. That is what the breaks between classes are for. Hold it."
The boy slumped into his seat.
"Okay, now class, it is time to learn."

***

Meanwhile, Jack was giving Max a hard time during gym. He had challeneged his new "partner" to various physical tasks, such as weight lifting, push-ups and rope climbing. Max had been able to do all of them, but his armor was starting to bear its weight, and Max was getting worn out. After fifty more minutes of constant challenges, the bell ring for lunch, and Max decided to rendevous with Ling.

End of Chapter One
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Postby Acktoo » Tue Dec 07, 2004 4:36 pm

I have decided to stop this story-due to lack of interest, and lack of time to actually write the chapters. So, this fan fiction dies.
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